On a normal day, Applejack goes to lend Rarity a hoof searching for gems but a terrible accident leaves her at deaths door. Joined by her family and three friends-Rainbow, Rarity and Spike-Applejack clings to her life. As her life gives out she tries to cherish the last words she'll ever hear again.
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You know, considering the time they all talked. They could've bandaged her up and took her to the hospital. I mean, the ending was pretty sad, I admit. But the fact that they blatantly ignored that they have a building and staff dedicated to saving lives, wouldn't they just take her there?
4186968 I know what you mean, and a couple people told me the same thing and maybe overlooking it afterwards that would have been the best idea but regardless, I wouldn't want to deny ones last wishes. Besides, bandages can't fix broken bones unless of course you believe in reattaching dismembered limbs with duct tape.
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Duct tape fixes everything
The required suspension of disbelief is too much for it to feel sad to me. There is just too much loss of immersion and realism when you're basically asking the reader to accept that they didn't try anything at all to save Applejack's life.
You also have some other issues such as the characters not feeling entirely in character based on their speech and actions.
Grammatically, at least, nothing glaring jumps out; although there are quite a few small errors, nothing extremely egregious jars the flow.
So....Why didn't they take her to the hospital? Also, AJ told Rarity not to move her and then tells Rarity to take her home...which requires she move AJ.
I would find this more emotional if it were not for these plot holes.