I sighed, as I relaxed myself back into the bed. Next to me, a large pile of sweet candy was being sorted absent mindedly as I reviewed over having been able to attend the pony equivalent of my favorite holiday. The mere act of having been able to talk to the princess of the night had left me Giddy. Unable to quite sleep nor relax, but instead left me pacing around my room while errant hands continued projects both at my desk and traveling with me. I would have to wait and steal a newspaper soon in order to see what effect my actions would have caused, but so far it was working out fantastically.
Eventually I would be dragged into direct confrontation with one of the key elements of Equestria. Be they the princesses or the elements of harmony, and the idea of undermining their justice system had already taken a second hit if Luna became proactive against the practice of petrification. What would I do for an eye in the palace, something that could infiltrate and just... watch. But what sort of mask would that be? A dozen sketches flooded the worktable as my mind went to work and started sorting the images.
Solid Snake? Too easy for a guard to catch. Cardboard boxes weren't just left lying about in a palace. Let alone the nightmare it would be to try and capture that rugged beard accurately. That denied him as a puppet, and besides, Solid Snake wasn't the best at evading detection without lethal force. Besides, he was a hero not a villain, even if war was a morally grey area.
Nox? Too easy to spot, and without actual stealth skills his main form of hiding would be making a time anomaly which would get him caught almost immediately by the sisters. While his skills were useful, they were best kept in reserve.
A half a dozen more were removed, due to flaws in their stealthy approach, which meant I needed to turn from invisibility or hiding to a far more... direct approach. Infiltration. The key word would be who then, as a majority of the masks I had were not based on the pony identity, and even the few that could take the shape wouldn't be able to do so very accurately. Nor would maintaining a puppet at such a far distance away be easy to navigate with skill and finesse. Would I even be able to do that? I needed more information regarding magic, or more likely the ability to detect magic in order to figure out what could or couldn't be done. From what I knew they couldn't detect changelings but if that was because a spell to detect individual magical signatures weren't developed or the lack of the skill in question in general were unknown. It reminded me of what i read earlier back near the start. Information is power.
It was unknown if my presence had been detected beforehand but it seemed that the Sisters were particularly receptive towards time magic, but the other forms of magic I was using was either harder to detect or required different skills in order to find. It brought me back to the entries I had read about magic, "Knowledge is power." I repeated to myself.
Canterlot wasn't just home to the princesses, but the school for magic that Twilight had attended as well. If it was anything like a college that would mean that with winter coming a new term could begin, but first things first it was time to deal with a few guests, and gather more information. So much work to do, and thankfully a lot of time. For once there was a large number of people staying in my place of residence of which to deal with. So I decided to start with the familiar and work my way to the unfamiliar grounds. Starting with checking in on Amber, she was hard at work trying to train while my Glados puppet threw increasingly bizarre or difficult, sometimes both, situations at her. It was interesting to watch her work, as she was progressively getting stronger and better at avoiding the numerous traps and beating them back with each day of training. A griffin in motion was still a sight to behold, as Amber had figured out how to use her wings to aide in more subtle bodily direction changes through both on the ground and in the air by manipulation of her wings thanks to the few occasions Cass came down to watch, and occasionally spar with the Griffin.
With little to do aside from improving the training course, I moved on to Cass, who was busying herself with her routine workout. I wasn't a medical expert, but with Trixies knowledge of magic had recommended Cass had begun to work out with her new cybernetic limbs, improving her endurance and magical capacity through consistent use of the cybernetics I had built for her. The magic tax was incredible it seemed for people to use my props, as the props themselves were fueled from magic, but already Cass was making leaps and bounds in that progression as well, having gone from the mere half an hour of consistent use a day to several hours before needing to rest or recharge, and it made me smile a bit inside but at the same time with her busy in training it seemed like hardly the time to interrupt her with a conversation. I'd have to save the idea of adding modifications to her cybernetics for when she was actually able to use them on a day to day basis.
Moving down the list, Trixie had gotten into my stash of books that I had stolen from Twilight's library and was making notes. I tried to bother the show-mare but was rewarded with being completely ignored. Seeing as her attention was focused in said books, though from a curiosity glance I could spot that she was reading into various spells, I left her to her studying, resolving to ask her more about Canterlot's schools for unicorns later on. It wasn't a pressing concern, but I respected most peoples need for some alone time. After all I would prefer to have some alone time myself every so often and if I couldn't respect someone elses personal space, how would I expect them to respect mine?
That left mainly the space marine wing, which had been redecorated quite vastly, restudying my notes I remembered my notes of who was who of Yoko's squad, but I didn't spot Yoko among them. Where was-
Knock Knock
Oh, there she was.
"Come on in!" I yelled out, unlocking the door with a simple flick of my mind, and opening it as I strode across the room, glad for the freedom away from the wheelchair, "Yoko, what a surprise, what's up?"
Yoko herself was wearing a loose fitting shirt, with jeans, though she was still wearing her power armored boots. I noticed she still carried her bolter on her back, though I couldn't blame her, considering I still wore my marionette generating device on my side as well. Little tools of the trade given to us, and even in a secure zone I wouldn't leave such a thing where it could be picked up and examined by others. The expression on her face told me she was a bit cheerful, and her tone of voice reflected this as well, "Sup with you Xandy? Got a few moments to spare?"
"More than a few moments," I responded in turn, taking a seat and gesturing to the one I normally reserved for Cass, "Have a seat, what do you want to talk about?"
"Well for one I wanted to say thanks for saving me and my squad." Yoko started, "Though I wanted to talk to you about what your plans are. As much as I want to stick around, I don't know if I am allowed to or if it would even be possible to."
"What do you mean?" I asked, nearby my table of in construction projects slid to a halt as she continued on.
The easy going smile turned into an unsure frown on Yoko's face, "Well for one, you brought back several ponies, ponies who have different versions of themselves here, it isn't like you just brought a displaced here after all. The fact that you took me from my world means I can't rely upon my old tokens either, and anyone attempting to call me back at my 'world' would get no response. Essentially to the multiverse, I'm 'dead' I guess." She paused as she considered this, "Which means I'm stuck here as long as you continue living as well as my troops lives unless you can somehow send us to another plane of reality, in which case I'd be stuck there until I got sent back to you."
"Is this theoretical? Not that I plan on dying mind you." I told her back, pondering over the science behind it, "I mean, I know there are probably ponies out here that are alternate reality versions of the ones we brought back, but it won't really be that big of an issue, would it? If anything it just means that the most they'd need to do is wear their armor, and not meet their other selves right?"
"That or we go with the doctor who logic of the universe crashing if they ever met themselves, but that's time travel not multiverse hopping. The show itself seemed to imply with that one Twilight time travel episode that they can cause a paradox by time traveling to meet themselves."
"Ugh Science." we both said after a few moments of pondering this, and laughed when our responses were identical.
"Glad to see some things never change," Yoko smirked a bit, "So what's up with you and this universe, you told me Discord of all people brought you here?"
"Yeah, he was dressed as a shop cleric to a prop store where he made his own props, taught me a bit on making his own horn and gave me the kit I'm using to make said props." I gestured to my supply kit, which was in a very orderly state. Of course my very I meant in a mess where only I knew where the exact tools I'd need would be. Usually I left tools all over the place when working on a project, and only cleaned up afterwards. But with a constant stream of projects, there had been little chance to re-organize my worktable.
Yoko pondered this, "That's a bit odd, but at the same time somewhat expected of the spirit of disharmony and chaos. I was brought to my world by some 'merchant' fellow that a lot of other displaced think 'has to be evil' for some reason. Though I don't really get it, I mean if anything its the displaced themselves that show either evilness or goodness the merchant just seems like well, an intermediary. I mean what sort of evil villain brings random people with random powers into different universes where one of their favorite shows exist as reality?"
"Because they're bored?" I shot out, with a shrug, "That or they're actually a nice guy, who knows? I never met him and you're like one of the few displaced I talked to so far. Been a bit busy on my side to really do very much with any of them. Discord's logic behind bringing me was bit more clear than what you're saying."
"And that is?" She asked, gesturing me to go on.
"Well Discord wanted me to teach them the true meaning of a tragic villain, the ponies that is." I told her and she facepalmed.
"Really Xandy?" She asked me with an exasperated sigh, "You're still hung up about their whole Elements of Harmony Deus ex Machina method of dealing with villains? It was a cartoon meant for children remember?"
"Yeah? Well its reality for both of us now," I countered and she rolled her eyes, "Besides, what else am I going to do? Interfere with Twilight becoming a Princess? Attack random villains and sit on the side lines in an otherwise peaceful and uneventful countryside? Boring."
"Uneventful?" Yoko raised her eyebrow, "It seems like Ponyville either deals with a monster attack or a friendship problem every month or so by the shows logic."
`"And heavens forbid am I preparing for the Canterlot Wedding Fiasco." I responded in turn, "We just had Nightmare Night, which means its not going to be long before Prince Plot device and Princess Hasbro-merchandise have a run in with the changelings. I'm just trying to change their system of justice to account for less extreme punishments than killing people with petrification or brainwashing them, not cause a genocide or cause total Anarchy."
"True enough I guess," Yoko said, "So what do you plan to do after you're done trying to change Equestria's government?"
I paused, giving it a thought, "Not rightly sure, after Discord is reformed I guess my life goes to... Something? Not entirely sure, might be more involved with other displaced and helping with their issues. Or even become an anti-hero or something in this universe. Honestly if it wasn't for the whole, 'No Judical system like ever' going on, I'd probably be retired and living in luxury considering the dragon horde of gold and jewels I have in the vault down here."
"Wait Dragon Horde? What? Did you kill a dragon?" Yoko asked with disbelief.
"No...?" I said back a bit confused, "I grabbed the one that the red dragon in the show left behind after Fluttershy glared it down, why do you ask?"
"That is going to bite you in the rump Xandy. Don't you remember like any of our adventures where we tried taking dragon hordes when the dragon was gone?"
"I'll deal with that issue when the time comes, I already dealt with a massive basilisk, how much more dangerous can a dragon be than a giant poison spewing, turn-you-to-stone-with-a-glare snake?"
"Dragon fire can melt durasteel in my world." Yoko said calmly. I did not want to know how she found that out.
"Okay, time to grab a fire manipulating villain then." I shot back, and she sighed, "Speaking of which, how in the world is Aku a tragic villain?"
"Giant space blob that was made by the gods and deemed evil and customarily slaughtered by its creator so only a tiny scrap of the overall mass escaped to plague the planet as a mindless puddle of what looked like oil until a jerk shot it with a poison arrow to try to kill it, and then it gained consciousness from a poisoned arrow and lashed back against the things trying to kill it?" I monologued for a short bit, before giving her a roll of my eyes, "Oh gee, I wonder."
"That doesn't excuse him from losing tragic points by taking over and enslaving the entirety of the universe." Yoko shot back.
"The only reason hes evil is because a whole bunch of people on the losing side of a war calls him that. If anything Aku is more like a child when you consider the mass he was originally a part of. A fractured soul that's reacting to its environment. Also Aku's Rule seemed to have the opposite of a bad effect if you remember."
"How so?"
"Technology sky rocketed for one, if you remember. Samurai jack was flung a few hundred years into the future, which around our time would have barely reached the industrial era, and while hes a conquering tyrant of an Empire, many other tyrants are also viewed as 'good guys' back in our own world. Take the United States for instance with the Native Americans and its former slave policies. We conquered another land as pretty much self entitled, racist, and down right inhumane settlers back then but no one bats an eye at America because its the 'land of the free' thanks to a few important politicians giving the nation a wake up call on how hypocritical it is, Yet during its brutal initial rule technology and medicine advanced far further than the natives could of ever imagined, and industry had a higher calling than the wandering tribes could hope to stand up to."
"Thought you already know a war leaves no men as good." Yoko shot back, "If I recall from our sessions, you were quite adamant on that with dealing with the Tau and calling the Empire out on its xenophobic ways."
Man that had been a while ago, "True enough, but with all wars, history is written by the victor. Take the second world war, if Hitler had won, his genocide of the Jewish race would of been called justified and he would of been called a hero. He lost and was deemed one of the most infamous villains in history. Yet hardly anyone back where we came from recalls Stalin, who supposedly murdered nine million more of his own men than Hitler killed with his authority because that's who gets talked about in history classes."
I paused as I watched Yoko mull over that, and I took a deep breathe of air before continuing, "Yet here we rewind back to the original topic of Aku as a conquering king, having united multitudes of races under his rule, and having at some point given multiple types of animals sentience, and replaced his army with machines. If anything Aku became one of the more ideal tyrants, for he actually cared for the public opinion of his image as well as peoples lives. Why else would he of built his army rather than conscripted it?"
"To prevent mutiny?" she began again, but I shook my head.
"A lot of the robots under Aku's command have some level of basic sentience, a type of machine that was phased out. Remember the episode where they spent the entire time focused on one robot from a much earlier time of aku's rule who had emotions and loved a puppy?"
"Right, but Samurai jack murdered hi-" Yoko paused, "Great, now you're having me thinking of Samurai Jack as the bad guy."
"Samurai jack was morally grey if anything, " I responded back, "For all of Jack's good intentions, he failed to realize that the rest of the human race isn't nearly as 'good hearted' as he thinks it is. If we look at the show we see most humans are either barbaric warriors, gun totting Scotsmen, Spartans, punks, or in a few cases members of a mafia. There is barely any humans left who don't practice one form of violence or another in that show or result to using it as one of their primary methods of getting what they want. Even the monks as glorified as they were tried attacking Jack just for trespassing."
"I could argue that they were driven into that corner like rats and fought back as hard as they could by Aku, but even I know there's no winning on the human morality fight of that universe." Yoko replied, "That's like arguing that the Empire of mankind was morally correct to commit extreme genocide of xeno-races that weren't human and then throw all their psykers to die as a giant meal pot of souls to their god emperor."
I opened my mouth to agree but she continued on, "So I'll drop the matter of Aku, I may not agree on the matter but you make a very interesting argument for a show that could be reality in another universe. Though I must say you may be reading a bit TOO much into the matter of Aku. Keep in mind this is the same guy who cheats whenever he can, and called a pizza guy despite being the emperor of many races."
I chuckled, and she gave me a curious look. Quickly I elaborated, "I miss our debates, its been too long since we last saw each other, and I was still getting over maybe never seeing anyone I knew from back home again. Sorry. This has been a bit of a relief actually."
She laughed as well, "Yeah, know what you mean. It seemed like yesterday we were geeking out over the phone for the next comic-con, but now, I'm actually a space marine and you're... well you!"
She gestured broadly at me and I looked myself over, "Well, I'm still a shorty, especially in comparison to you now. But then again you were always tall..." I joked, earning a playful though somewhat painful punch to the arm.
"Yeah yeah, but what's up with your face? I was at least dressed up as a space marine when I was transported, you look like something from an anime. Maybe Kagetane from Black Bullet, if he was exceedingly short and had fire in his eyes and mouth. No wonder we mistook you for a daemon at first glance." She chuckled.
"Funny, I'm spookier under it though." I responded in turn, "Think Slenderman. Though please don't remove my face, its really really weird having three of my five senses disconnected from my body."
"Wait what?!" Yoko's face was priceless, "Dude, you can't just drop a bombshell like that and expect me not to want to see that."
"Maybe another time, still not comfortable with my face being removable. Its like... " I paused, unsure of how to explain it, "my chest gets tight, and a sense of dread overcomes me, ya know? It's really weird."
"So guess you can say, you're attached?" Yoko commented, with a small comforting smirk.
"Har. Har." I gave her a momentary glare before lightening up into my own grin, "Since when were you into puns?"
"Since I was abducted from our old reality to a world of colorful rainbow ponies." Yoko replied in turn, "You learn to lighten things up every now and then with some bad humor after a while. A lesson Pinkie taught me surprisingly back during the first few weeks of my stay."
The night dragged on, and we had some catching up to do, well she asked a lot of questions, and I mine. But all in all it was a night of fun. A lot of things were spoken of that night, most of our time since she had come through the portal was making sure that she would be alright after all. Not much had been said as the new found military force had settled itself in. Perhaps it was time to have a chat and change that...
I know nothing about Samurai Jack, and all I know about Warhammer is the "If The Emperor Had A Text-To-Speech Device" so this chapter was weird.
7564950 Disclaimer, Two geeks talk about shows in this chapter.. Not all of them that well known. Though if anything that should be watched, I'd have to say Samurai Jack is a great one. Needed to do this sort of chapter to get the whole 'Aku is not a tragic villain debate' out of the ever boiling water and thought to have some fun with it.
7565044
Ah ain't a geek, I'm a physics nerd.
This is not my territory.
Interesting enough, Stalin is deemed as a "genocidal maniac", even through multiple historical evidence suggests it is mainly a result of anti-soviet propaganda, but a lot of dictatorships were supported by USA because they were oppressing communists, like Somoza's.
Talk about "public image" here.
Also, one of the reasons why nobody "bats an eye" at USA is the United States Navy.
7565123 I wish to comment but at the same time, I just deleted roughly
threefour entire term papers worth of uncited rage about American Government force feeding children essentially American propaganda instead of history. Most of it I don't care to leave on a thread meant to be towards this story. USA is great in its own way for the security of its people, but don't get me started about America's lack of education in regards to everything else the world was doing outside of Germany in world wars or 'fighting for various freedoms' both inside the country and out in America. Public image indeed.Would the Joker be considered a tragic villain? I mean his supposed back stories are fucked up..
hmm, stealth based information gathering tragic villain? Kagura comes to mind, with her wind power and ninja skills, but that's about it.
What about Sasuke's older brother? A ninja forced to play the role of the villain...
Also... If you need a character for shock and awe later on how about the first of the colossus from shadow of the colossus?
Hmm, I figure slenderman work pretty well, what with people having a hard time noticing him, instant teleportation, and possibly hallucinations.
Idk if wesker qualifies, but he'd be good.
I was going to mention grey Mann, but I figure he's too much of a villain.
And I only just thought of it, but all of the antagonists from Bomberman 64 the second attack. Main villain is possessed by a demon, others are brainwashed by the guy, except bulzeeb/regulus, who is merely posing as such to fight bomberman. Regulus/bulzeeb certainly fits the anti-hero trope.
Good to see you are still working on this fic.
The quality did kinda drop this chapter spelling and grammar wise.
Eg:
Equestria
The first part of the second sentence doesn't really flow into the second part, it seems to shift gears suddenly and the transition is somewhat jarring, problem could be just the 'and' in there, a (semi?)colon or different word may work better, make it more like he's making a list in his head perhaps with the inevitable confrontation as item one and the progress on his ultimate goal as a separate item two?
Also missing capitals scattered throughout the chapter (eg: cass, i) and sentences that just read a bit weird/are jarring like my example above.
Edit: also the repetition of 'knowledge is power' twice in the closing of two successive paragraphs is a bit redundant/repetitive.
Anyways still enjoying, just wanted to throw my two cents in.
Best tragic villain for stealth would be pitch black not only can he turn to shadow but he can seemingly teleport through them.
A long time ago I, Aku, the story wrighting user of Fimfiction, stumbled accross this tale. And now, long after I had thought to leave this website, I come across it once more. I now pass judgment!
This story passes. Nine out of eleven.
7565420 But at the same time, several of them were told by the Joker himself, and he isn't exactly a reliable source.
7568282 thanks for pointing this out, hadn't checked a few of my spelling and went back over it to fix a few things that went wrong in this chapter.
7569151 Joker is a bit of an nonredeemable villain though, constantly lying with his backstory and only real motivation is apparently messing with Batman. They went over a lot of each others characters in 'The Killing Joke', which I can recommend.
7568631 Watch out for those accursed Samurai Warriors wielding a magic sword. Feel free to stay a while more Aku, been a long time since I've seen ya around.
Great chapter
7569400 Curse those Samurai and their swords, a pox upon them! Oh, but for the olden days. I am afraid that this Fandom has lost much of its appeal to me. Now I rarely check in to see how some stories have proggresed. I must know how they end.
I have a suggestion for a tragic villain!!!!
DOCTOR NEFARIOUS!!!!!
Watch the Ratchet and Clank movie, and you'll see why.
I don't like the way you ran the conversation on Aku's 'innocence'... which appears to be the centerpiece of the chapter no less. You want to rant why you're right, try not to seem so aggressive to support subjective opinions as facts, or at least ease up the aggression enough to let the other member of the conversation have the chance to bring up one solid argument in response.
The space blob that Aku originated from was never really established as being either innocent or guilty in any way. All we had to go on were its actions once it landed on Earth. It appeared to be growing a forest of spikes for every life it took... however the fuck a pool of cosmic oil could manage to do that. You see, the show was ambiguous on that front for a reason, that being not that the writers were trying to make an otherwise 'innocent' life form appear guilty through bending of context, but because they needed a villain, and that was the best way they could reasonably make one.
Aku might not be your generic kill-baby-pandas evil overlord, but he still lasers kingdoms to rubble (aside for Jack's Dad's kingdom, there's also that one scientist who made the elite ninja robots), does genocide with a smile on his face and has dealings with soul-stealing monsters.
The reason why he's not your generic kick-a-baby-puppy-because-REASONS villain is because the writers wanted to go for a comedic character instead. That doesn't make him a 'tragic villain', it makes him comedic relief in order for the viewers to not get too upset every time out of the hundreds of times he was going to escape Jack's 'righteous' blade.
Oh, and on account of Jack being a psycho or whatever, I'd like to see you face horde after horde of murderous assholes and not use your sword once. It's a cartoon about a freaking samurai, of course he's going to cut people up! Be thankful they made those people robots.
7587840 you do have a very good point, Though Jack has also taken time to join things like the mafia in the show. While understandable it was for comedy and a way for Jack to reach Aku an 'honorable samurai warrior' is a bit of a stretch when that Samurai knows various forms of martial arts and weapon use that aren't dedicated to the typical samurai. If anything Jack was a martial arts user trying to fix what he saw was wrong with the world while Aku tried to influence his own sense of what was right and wrong from the get go when a human man tried killing him with a poisoned arrow and then denounced him as evil and started the big conflict. The show leaves much leeway into what the 'giant space blob' had been doing in space, but the gods just attacked it when it was wandering around rather than show anything for or against it. So while your view is right, that Aku is a horrible being put into comedy, The Puppet Master favors the other side of seeing Aku. As someone who could of destroyed all life on the planet but instead chose to conquer and manage it when he could of easily of ripped life from it since the only one who had the 'magic sword' was a young kid Jack at the time and thought there was a deeper reasoning to that.
7596586 So Aku is not an evil monster bent on wiping out all life, but just your typical evil overlord... in other words, a politician.
Considering the fact that evil is subjective, yes, we're both right. However, my other points still stand. Either way, I do still like your work, it just seems like your main character (who is trying to make people stop being judgmental, self-assured, condescending, self-righteous morons) is being kinda self-assured and judgmental himself when he just shut his childhood friend down like that. I get that it was supposed to be an important matter for the protagonist, but you still made that centerpiece conversation waaay too self-serving for him, and his friend didn't have any role beyond humoring a flawed line of thought.
7565216 well you ar sort of correct, they give you the... how should I phrase it...
Important stuff, the info that is needed to understand the other stuff.
Heck I am a certified world war historian, and if they gave you EVERY DETAIL OR EVENT YOU WOULD NEVER GET PAST THE REVOLUTION LET ALONE THE WORLD WAR.
I'm not saying that Stalin is not important or EVIL but he only really affects Russia until the whole operation barbosa thing... and yes he was bad but he was not even important for the Cold War he Died like 4 years into the war heck we had van braun after Stalin died and trust me on one thing "propaganda is the only view that you are allowed to publish" that is nonsense, that is like saying that the US doesn't talk about what it does wrong! News flash, I LIVE in a country that the us has tried staying quiet about for years and even we, a small island in the Caribbean can still say that the US has more info on past mistakes they committed, wars they lost, or even how many times they were attacked than any other country in the world.
Heck look at a Russian history book and they only say that Stalin was a jerk, the USSR is not even mentioned in the book, or the nepolionic Wars. Germany is even worse they say that they will never forget their mistakes and yet anything from 1895-1957 is either glossed over or is not even there!
Ps communism is VERY BAD,
Capitalism is temporary,
Scocialism is the ONLY answer.
Also for a tragic villain... try project freelancer
The Meta
Locus
Felix
The director
And many more are well within the term of tragic villain, like The meta was forced into a broken state of mind due to an AI trying to control him.
The best part, each is crazy OP and have a different talent and power... actually even Carolina and the sim troopers count because they were being manipulated by the chairman of spartan tech industry AKA super evil guy.
Or if you want a GOD tear super tragic villain, you have almost ALL of 40k From Horus to the cult mechanicus every single non god is a tragic villain
Hmmmm, would he ever craft masks of the titans from greek mythology? Kronos who was told of his death being by one of his own children turned him into a villain only to accomplish making that predicted future come true by not loving his children.
7896581 From a comment at funnyjunk.com
But if you want source: http://dragonsburn.tumblr.com/
Moar plz?
Are you going to update anytime soon?
7879143 The Meta can even be considered a reflection of Luna.
As entertaining as our protagonist is, I'm curious as to what the ponies think of him and how his actions are affecting them.
I know another character you can use in this story, her name is Hexadecimal from the show ReBoot and she would be an adversary to Cadence and Shining Armor(and possibly Discord). Reasons: She is benign virus(albeit a batshit insane one with phenomenal powers) but she genuinely loved Bob (A Gaurdian, essentially protectors of the Net and a virus's sworn enemy) and was an enemy of the cast for a time then she turned good only to turn back to her old self in order to protect the man she loved(and through this sacrifice, saved the net). It was one of the few things in fictional mediums that actually moved me to tears.
Here's two warhammer 40k primarch's that could fit the Title of Tragic Villain.
1. Magnus the red, he did everything he could to save his father's dream and what happens? He gets enslaved by tzeentch, his homeworld is sacked by the space wolves while he was willing to surrender peacefully (who had possibly sent a message by, unknown at the time, a follower of horus's asking for his peaceful surrender), he sees his chapter slowly dying off... he's been through hell, but some people thinks he still holds love for the Emperor.
2. Konrad Curze , The Night Haunter, who was haunted by powerful Visions that constantly kept with him, and his very first vision was his death. He hated what had become of his legion, how it went from honorable Night lords to criminal rabble because of how many of his men died... and after he clawed his way into control of his planet by punishing all crime severely, when he returns he finds it corrupted once again causing him to blow up the planet by focusing fire on the fissures caused by his crash landing into the or at least near the core. And when the emperor sent a Callidus Assassin after him? "Your presence does not surprise me, Assassin. I have known of you ever since your craft entered the Eastern Fringes. Why did I not have you killed? Because your mission and the act you are about to commit proves the truth of all I have ever said or done. I merely punished those who had wronged, just as your false Emperor now seeks to punish me. Death is nothing compared to vindication."
I am also still glad, that the Ork wasn't grown to the size of The Beast, a Ork warboss that when he was first sighted by space marines they thought it was a Ork Stompa... until they realized that was a orc in all that armor, he, according to lore was the size of a hab-block, and was smart enough that the WHOLE Ork race evolved because he was alive, becoming better at harnessing their 'orkiness'... he also established the different orc warbands by giving them unique things to wear, like the best close quarters fighters got horns on their helmets, the most tactical among the Orks he gave them a bloody axe to wear, and yada yada... he also managed to make, a seriously messed up space marines chapter, the iron warriors I believe (who created the Unfleshed) into saying when they saw the bastards world sized human farms "it will be a mercy kill"... by all the old gods and new do not let this warboss grow to the Beasts size...
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Still prefer Emperors text to speech version of Magnus, its hilarious. Though motives are important to determining a lot of things, but Magnus probably has a higher kill count than most fantasy characters can ever claim with that over 10k lifespan so far in a space age empire. Plus with Magnus currently in service of a certain Chaos God in reality there is an overwhelming sense of stagnation ironically as Magnus continues to serve his master against The Imperium/ Empire of man.
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Woz Tha' ya stinkin' Grot? Ya though' tha' I can't get 'Uger than ah Stompah? Ah'll Show ya bigga than a stinkin' Stompa! I Iz gonna be da biggest bestest warboss in da sectah!
Hue hue.
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Oh Omnisiah... we might need exterminatus.... or a lot of brown pants...
Just looked at this story out of curiosity did you just get bored or it? Figured I would ask since the length on last update
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there has been a massive writers block alongside a lot of life stuff getting in my way, but recently been starting to power through a few of them, Right now I'm mostly revising the next chapter of this and my fallout Equestria fic while figuring out what else to do to start propelling the story forward again, adding bits of foreshadowing and stuff like that.
8323469Fair enough I remember encountering this a while ago and was genuinely interested in it since it seemed like a very neat concept. Best of luck and if you ever want a proof reader I would be willing to offer up help 😊
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As much as I am sad that you had writer's block, please make more.
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Darth vaders more of an anti-hero tho and the sudden redemption face-heel turn in the movies kinda ruin the tragic villain vibe. As fun as it would be walking down long corridors very slowly and menacingly.
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https://m.In a different order of ideas,
Characters like Pitch Black from Rise of the Guardian's or the Sandman from Spiderman would be good infiltration/spies tragic villians.
Pitch would be great for Luna and the Sandman could used for any Knight Templar characters like Shining Armor or could be used for Fluttershy. due to his evil actions being motivated by the love for his daughter and his original personality as a gentle giant/ unintentionally killing Uncle Ben.
Also have toy thought about using Malefecent or the Wicked Witch of the West?
Finally re-read, and I have to say, I like this re-write a lot. I would also like to apologize for sounding petty or otherwise rude in my criticism, upon retrospect.
You know the weird part about Yoko and Skargoth is that when more than one displaced end up in the same world, they most likely know or at least encountered each other in their version of Earth. So my question is; did Skargoth before he became Skargoth knew Yoko, and being Ork god of time, how come he didn't see this end result happen or at least felt it coming... something fishy is in the air and its not the prometheum gases?