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schmitthappens21


But it's better if you do.

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Princess Twilight Sparkle is like the other princesses in some ways. Every princess needs her bodyguards. More than one most of the times. Lightning Sparkle is a guard, she is only called in for one time deals though. Little does she know this will be more than a couple of weeks or so. Will Lightning be able to deal with this new change, but more importantly, will the new princess be able to deal with her?

(That is one version of my OC)
Cover art done by: Roxanne10 (You probably won't find much of her art there, but you'll find her amazing stories)

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 7 )

I love this story, though it does need more details. (No offence.) I'm a smartass too. (I don't get myself sometimes. I got held back a grade, yet last year I got exceeded on ISAT. ISAT is this big test that my school takes at the end of the year. Well, I didn't fail kindergarten, my dad chose to hold me back.)

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None taken.
I can be a smartass/wise guy.
It is going to be a chapter story, so more to come soon.
Eventually.
I'll try to work on it, I'm not the best at chapter stories, but I'm going to try really hard not to give up or something.

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Also, what kind of details?
I would love to hear your opinion.

"Because we trust you." Flash says[ /quote] there should be a comma after "you" and it should be "Flash said."

I walk past the princess, and say "Let's catch a train."

it should be "walked" and "said"

"But-" I get cut off by Mr. Armor over here.[/quote ] it should "got." When you write a story it should be in past tens, unless the character is talking. You should also space out your paragraphs.

Example: "I wanna go for a walk," Pinkie Pie said, almost jumping out of her seat.

Scootaloo frowned. "But that's nā€”ā€œ

"Oh, come on. I'll be fun, I promise," interrupted Pinkie Pie.

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