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They don't have their cutie marks in the fan art pic...
But good chapter.
A Fallout Equestria sidefic in the featured box? Will read!
Missing something there.
Oh this is really good
1996161
Yeah I'm aware. It's still cute. :)
1996601
Thanks!!!
1996874
Fixed. Thanks for spotting that!
1996949
Thanks a bunch!!!!
That was one long chapter, but it was totally worth it. My eyes hurt. Ugh, I swear I'm gonna be blind before I hit 30 with the amount of squinting at tiny words on screens that I do on a daily basis.
That wrapped quite a bit up, which is nice. Just leaves one or two things for Star and Friends to focus on now. Now, now there's nothing to do but wait for the next chapter.
awesome. Absolutely love it. I'm happy that cranky is good now. what kind of stuff could cranky do before he was sloth? the whole "i would have killed you already if i wanted to" kind of thing?
That was quite the long read so here have a short.comment:
THAT WAS EPIC!
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. But trust me, there's still quite a bit for the crew to deal with. Spark being free in the world with a physical form? Baaaaaaad thing.
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Thanks! The way I see it is this, even before he was Sloth, Cranky was still pretty dangerous for a ghoul. Especially since he was intelligent / lucid enough to remember everything. He would have had to known how to survive to travel like he did.
2002103
Thank you, so so so much. I gave you an up vote for that.
I wanted to say thanks to everyone for all the support on this one. I knew right from the get go that this was going to be an ambitious chapter. I knew I was taking a leap of faith that it was going to turn out for the best. And for the most part, I'm glad I did. So thank you everyone, for reading and for sticking with this. Arc 3 is all laid out and ready to begin, so all we have to do now is keep moving forward.
-V
2002219
Well thanks for that then!
And now that I think about it if Cranky stays with the party Radiant and her companions are gonna be quite the force to be reconned with.
Very nice! Have a mustache!
Unless things will change a lot in the rest of the story (chapter 7 onward) shouldn't there be a romance tag? I do realy enjoy this story atm :)
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Eh, I've thought about that, but I honestly don't think it needs one. Primarily this is a dark adventure story. Yes, there are some elements of romance (especially on a certain chapter), but the primary type of story is dark adventure.
Thanks for the comment though, glad you're enjoying it!
well read the entire thing in 2 days so that is pretty fast xD
Nice story but the further you go it seems you start swearing a lot more in the story xD And Randiant Star's mood swings are a little weird sometimes but still pretty fun.
Now to learn what Twilight had in store when she planned it all
2018687
Heh, I never really noticed that one.
But hey, thanks for the comments and for the reading! Totally appreciated.
2018697
I only started noticing it because I was suddenly seeing a lot of fuck and shit :P Not many other swear words realy xD
I will admit the chapter size intimidated me. Counting the previous one (as it hasn't updated in a while) the total word count i just read is up past 57 thousand words. This chapter alone took a bit more than an hour to read.
volrathxp, this was an awesome chapter. While i do regret putting it off for four or so days, i simply didn't have two uninterrupted hours to go through both chapters in one sitting, until now.
Now i gotta find the time to read the 61k word oneshot, Ptolemy. It's been sitting in my read later list for quite a while now, and i've got a baseline on how long it should take to read, with this.
2019210
Well, thanks for taking it on, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your comment and for your readership!
I love when people update.
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Heh. Fear not. I keep a pretty tight update schedule. This chapter kind of extended that a bit, but hey, it was worth it.
LOVED IT. Loved everything about this chapter. Was more afraid that this was the last chapter than anything else.
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Starlight is set before Gardens was cast. There's still a Wasteland in this world.
The Museum was loosely based off of the Field Museum in Chicago. as far as location, and the general size of the place.
Well, the longest chapter you've ever done and I feel you've nailed it. It didn't feel like 36,977 words at all.
The character progression in this chapter alone was the best thing here. The building of tension between Lust and Radiant Star was really well written and the way you dealt with it as good. The whole mind meld thing was a nice way to handle things without the other characters or the fighting getting in the way of it all. Same for the way you dealt with the confrontation with Spark, Lucky and Pride/Diamond, doing it in the mind drive gave the whole thing center stage to what else would've been happening in the background.
Seeing the Sins as they used to be was a good idea, I really like Wrath's orb the most. Seeing him not as this massive musclebound warrior on drugs but as the head scribe of the religion just goes to show how much he changed. I hope you show us more of this, would be good to see what happened in the early days after they changed or even just before. did any of them resist at the last second I wonder?
I combat in the chapter was good, brief little fight's as opposed to massive big scale fights. But this has always been one of your strengths I feel, don't think I've read a bad combat scene from you yet. Keep it up.
So in all I feel this was a good chapter, you can obviously write the long chapters and keep them interesting. I find some author's long chapters I start to kinda drop off towards the end, I have this problem with PH sometimes. The only thing I feel was a bit weak is the amount of time you give your other characters. It seems like sometimes they are just their for the ride, I know you can't have everyone chip in all the time otherwise every chapter would be this long. You started to address this with Patch calling out to Lust, so more things like that I feel would bring a bit more life to them and not just have them sat in the back twiddling their thumbs... Err hooves..
Till next time!
McMesser
Shiiiiiiiiiit this took me six hours to read, but it was definitely worth it. I know I said I was probably going to do a review, but what can one say about something nearly too good for words? All I'd really have is the random and wise-ass remarks that I'm known for. Anyway, Lust is definitely my favorite character now, and "thunder come to earth" from one of the rocket launcher scenes is now one of my favorite phrases. I have certainly learned quite a bit from following your work, and it has inspired some of my own ideas. Also, I got major feels from the bigger scenes Lilith/Lust. Keep up the good work, cause I ain't leaving anytime soon and I look forward to future chapters.
-Ironmonger/Lord Korloros
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As always, thank you so much for this. It's a great review, and I loved it.
2048998
Thanks much! I definitely appreciate it!
Given the revelations behind the Season 3 finale which shall not be mentioned, does anyone here find Radiant Star to be ironic?
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Given that you anonymously left this same comment on my Wikia page, does anypony find that ironic?
But seriously, sure it's ironic! I mean heck, they're just passing out wings!
Still, hilarious.
Just an fyi, I'm reading this, I like it, and I want ,more. Jus sayin.
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Aww, well thank you very much! I really appreciate it! No worries... this week had some stuff going on, so I didn't make as much progress on 21 as I would have liked, but I'm going to start fresh tomorrow on it and push forward!
This is one of the stories i am never disappointed with. The characters are all interesting, the description is great and the fights are always engaging. I'm glad this story has not been one of those that the author suddenly stops posting.//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
Once again, I'm incredibly impressed with the depth of all of this. The characters are all brilliant to read, and have had me cheering them on the whole story through. Great work!
dang it
Finished this chapter long time ago and now when I got back I cant continue cause I dont remember almost anything
I guess I will try audiobook by Visual ponytthenrrator
Untill then I refrain from comments but I will chek your gallery for ther stories
I... probably supposed to write something here... But I can't. Touching chpter.