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Redric Carrun


I really need to get a better one of these. I'll get around to that... sometime.

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Rainbow Dash wakes up alone, imprisoned in a sadistic cycle of death and violence for the amusement of a faceless crowd. In the arena, her opponents are the heroes and villains of all history, with fighting styles and strange abilities that are thousands of years old, and no less deadly for the wait. Outside, she must seek allies and teachers who can help her escape, and find out just what's going on in this wacked-out place.

But which is worse: that she's been trapped here without her friends to rely on? Or that they might very well be trapped here too, and she isn't there to help them?

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Not the best day Rainbow's ever had, that's for sure.

Images flashed in her mind. Aching joints. A cloud. Twilight's grand-kid – stupid, stubborn brat. Couldn't fly. Panic-falling-chase. The ground. Old. Pain. Old-old-old-pain-slow-black.

Good way of conveying that (1) this is decades in the future (I'd guess at least 25-50 years, since there's time for Twilight to meet somepony, have at least one child, and that child have a child, which makes it over one generation and maybe two generations, plus I'd guess that Twilight's family tends to marry late (common pattern with intellectuals), and (2) Rainbow may have been taken / copied at the moment of death or severe injury, given her last memory.

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Yep. Very little about this whole situation is as it seems. Rainbow Dash lived to a very old age, had a happy, fulfilling life, stuck with her friends to the end, and died a hero.

And now she's back.
Let the confusion commence!

As it turns out, Dash, you can totally die twice.

And of course, that means you can explode twice as well.

The more you know~!

This sounds like it needs a dark tag.

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It does sound like that, doesn't it?

The setting's pretty dark, but that's not going to be the focus here. I mean, there's some pretty horrible stuff, but the characters are going to take it in stride pretty much, and I'm not going to get too graphic I hope.

I might have to add one later anyways, but I'm trying not to.

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Actually, you know what? I changed my mind.

This story may not be grimdark, but I think it's got enough in it already to warrant a label. And even if it doesn't get darker, it's not really going to get any lighter either.

Thanks for bringing it up. I don't think I would have given the matter any more thought if it weren't for your comment.

This is interesting but I'm pretty confused at what's going on here. Can't wait to read more and find out what is going on! :pinkiehappy:

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Well, the mystery is part of the experience~

Things should get reasonably clearer in the next chapter or so. At least by then, Rainbow will be talking to somepony who's been in her situation for a while now.

4221325 Yeah it's much better to find out stuff as you go along than have the author reveal everything near the start. Awesome story btw! :twilightsmile:

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

Wait a minute... Death Battles and Rainbow Dash? Does this mean that she'll fight Starscream?

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Ha! I hadn't considered that, no, though I'm flattered you bring it up. Equestria Daily is exceptionally intimidating, and I don't feel I've developed this story nearly enough yet on paper or in my head for it to be ready for that level of criticism. Perhaps later, when it's more complete.

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Death Battles is a highly descriptive name, referring only to the events occurring in this (fictional) program. The similarity of titles with the more well-known "Death Battles" is purely coincidental, and I can say with certainty that Rainbow Dash will not be fighting Starscream in this fic.

Probably.

That was awesome tho I suppose this happens after Rainbow has grown for a bit since the mane six are relatively the same age it means since twilight is now a granny it seems rainbow is at granny age as well Anyways aside from all that this story is amazing and definitely deserves more likes and views keep up the fabulous work

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Wow, thanks!

A lot of things about where Rainbow Dash ended up aren't what they seem. I hope I can make sure the reveals are worthy of the suspense.

4295542 you're welcome and don't worry I can see you won't disappoint in coming chapters :twilightsmile:

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Well, I'm not dead. I've been trying to focus on my other story, but I intend to continue this eventually. It might be a while, though.

4231950 Maybe she could end up against a figure of Equestrian lore who just so happens to be Starscream in all but name?

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That might work. Well, in all but name and being an actual giant, transforming robot. But I bet I could come up with some sort of reference.

We will see...

Will this be continued? I want to see where it goes. Also I like how much Rainbow was in character.

Pretty good start. Shame to see it abandoned. Might be easier to start over, maybe after figuring out a general outline for where the story is going. And maybe do a little world building to figure out how these battles work. It's obvious that they can heal and maybe even respawn fighters at a whim. Not too different from an idea I (kinda) stole for a story where gladiators in the future are pretty much just androids. They can die and be brought back as well.

Dunno if you'll ever come back to this, or if you're even on the site anymore. But I like the story and wouldn't mind seeing more. After all, we still don't know how Rainbow got where she is, how long she's been there, or what happens if she dies. I imagine she'd be pretty traumatized to wake up after feeling her life slip away or end in a quick snap. Getting beheaded is probably a trip, and not something you'd forget. She'll be having phantom sensations from her first few deaths, assuming she could even get used to the whole thing.

I do wish more people wrote stories like these. Battling to the death is a lot more interesting if the fighters can be brought back. Though not everyone would do well living such a violent life. Not to mention it brings up some rather troubling philosophical questions, especially if you're cloning people. I wouldn't be surprised if that's what's going on. Rainbow dies, and they get some of her DNA (or just her bones if it's necromancy), then either clone or resurrect her to fight.

Good luck to you wherever you are. Hope you write more good stories.

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