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Sweetie belle and Rarity story.
Sweetie Belle finds a Wishing flower and makes a wish. A day for Rarity and Sweetie Belle spent together.
Sister time! As humans.
Also, got the Pic off of Google so I don't have a link!!!!
Edit: Picture link--- http://chibi-jen-hen.deviantart.com/art/anime-Sweetie-Belle-sketch-253151149
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You indent some paragraphs but not others. The chapter editor has a button you can press to insert indents automatically, so you don't have to space over.
Try writing with spellcheck and then pasting into the chapter. It can catch a lot of small mistakes.
I think you need more paragraphs. Try breaking them up a little.
I think a "slice of life" tag is appropriate for this story.
Your dialogue often has the punctuation wrong. See #3 here.
Overall, it's not a bad first story. Keep writing! You'll get better with practice.
Also, here's your cover art source:
http://chibi-jen-hen.deviantart.com/art/anime-Sweetie-Belle-sketch-253151149
What?
I don't get it
this story reminds me of my older brothers first you think there great and cool and want to be just like them
then you find out there assholes you love 
then you find out there assholes
4140803 Thank you for helping me to better my stories!!!! Could you become my editor?
4142203 I could try to do something like that.
4142375 That would be great!
Great story! It really warmed my heart.
4163083 Aww, thanks. I am working on your cover right now. I want it to be done tomorrow!
4163088 Great!
I can't wait for it's arrival.
4141176 it's just some fluff
Why is this in the Foalcon group? <.<
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It's a good story, but why is it in the foal con group if there isn't any foal com in it.
Why is this listed as a foalcon story?
Very short, but sweet and heart-warming.
I like it
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Thank you!!! Glad you like it!
A sweet and innocent story, i enjoyed it very much!