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pokefreak13


Clap and a half!

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Trixie is tired of all the bulling and teasing so she tries to end her life. However she's gets interrupted by a pink pony.

Cover art by Jacob Bading

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 28 )

4th wall breaking...instant like and fave:pinkiehappy:

Thank you. I always did enjoy Pinkie Pie's 4th wall breaking.:pinkiehappy:

Then she smiled, waved goodbye to the party pony, and headed towards Saddle Arabia science not all of the ponies there hatted her.

I think you meant 'headed towards Saddle Arabia since not all of the ponies there hated her.'

Whoops. Thank you for pointing that out. I'll change that right away. :derpytongue2:

science=a type of study; since=for the reason of.
In any case, have a fav and a like.

Separate the paragraphs each time the speakers changes and correct some spelling errors. Other than that, it's a cute story.

Okay. Thank you for your feed back.

Not specially good but for some reason I can't leave without telling how well done it is. Just the minor grammatical and setup mistakes but nothing big.
Keep writing.

In your short description it says 'Ersaminor'. Its meant to be Ursa Minor.

Pinkie broke the fourth wall....dislike

5287187 sorry bout that, that was kinda rash, I'll read the story fully then judge next time :twilightsheepish:

5290618 cdn.makeagif.com/media/11-19-2014/huHaBK.gif Have a funny image of rainbow gluttonizing herself :D (all the images on my Page are all made by me through various youtube vids

5290637 Heres the link of the vid, its quite funny actually

5290697 No. Its cheese. That kinda looks like Glowstone

also AJ says on the sign

Eat up fatty :D -AJ

5290746 The Chair was the highlight of it :rainbowwild:

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