Rainbow Dash, third year Wonderbolt cadet, is putting on the show of her life, a performance that decides whether she stays in the academy or goes. After an unforeseen event, she finds herself having to combat guilt, fear, and having lost the relationship she had worked so hard to obtain with her idol.
Thank you Jayesixx for the amazing cover art!
Quite good sir, I only saw some grammar errors but other than that I think you did alright.
Concept was pretty good, but grammar was kinda off (very at times) and the flow didn't work for a decent chunk.
Idea: 9/10
Writing: 4.5/10
Enjoyment: 7/10
4504352 Thank you. I believe my writing has gotten better, but the flow may just be that I always think my stories are at least a little rushed. Ugh.