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Spike, a brand new Alicorn, is next in line for the throne, but Prince Blueblood will do anything to become king. Will Spike and his friends be able to save Equestria? And will Spike and Sweetie Belle ever get together?
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A lion king crossover eh? Something I was not expecting to see. I'll keep an eye on this to see where it goes.
I was looking forward to this, and so far I am still every interested
. I know the story by heart thanks to my childhood but even so it is still enjoyable to see it being retold here. I want to see the differences and similar aspects both versions will have. I know it is a way off but i am dying to see Timon and Pumbaa and Spike hanging out, and of course when Sweetie and Spike reconnect after all those years apart
. (One of the sweetest moments in Disney history if you ask me lol)
I am very much enjoying this so far, especially since it involves a lion-king esque theme,
Spike as a staring role, FS being the ruler, and Blueblood being a vile, power hungry fiend.................
this is now favorited and my new story to read on from now on.
Hope to see more awesomeness from you!!!!!!
4172043 I'll update as much as possible.
4172383 Took forever to post. had to have someone proofread before it was ready. J still have the movie so it will be easy for me to figure out things.
4172755 I'll update ASAP
The beginning was just to adorable, and I love how you had
hanging from a branch to surprise Flash Sentry. 
4173120 thanks. we have to remember, it is Pinkie.
4173150 True. After all who else can pull a party cannon out of no where?
4173211
true. 
The fourth wall MUST BE PROTECTED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Good chapter man.
4197116 thanks
Cute and good so far! It was funny with Twilight's reaction to SpikeBelle XD
4223350 take a look at chapter 3
That's what you get pinkie XD
4243406 I think she learned her lesson for now.
[quote"You two need to grow up,"]
(this actually needs some commas)
Those were all of the comma mistakes that I found in this chapter. Other than that, great chapter, cute 4th wall breaking, and kinda lay off the commas for a bit. Thanks!!!!
4243907 Thanks for the help. I sometimes go comma crazy, or not enough commas. I'm going to take some time to write and look over the next chapter more carefully. And Pinkie will get a small break from the author for awhile.
4244124
That's cool by me man
So Im gonna assume that Flash dies and Blueblood kills him.
Spike, I will personally kill Blueblood for you.
...
And take his identity.
4354414 yeah. have to go with the way the movie went, even if I'm not fond of that scene.
What is the deal with pinkie and breaking the forth wall, discord should also be able to break the forth wall
I really like this it's pretty funny how spike is an alicorn I had to do a double take, also first it's the cake then the cookies next she's going to take your xbox and beat all the halo campaigns
4354960 he might show up.
4355005 Lucky for me, I don't have those. However, if she goes anywhere near my computer and Total War games, there will be trouble.
Alright, it's SpikeBelle, so it gets an upvote from me, because I know you'll be doing your best to give it justice. Now, let's get the actual review underway!
GOOD: I love the Lion King approach. I really like how you set up the characters stories. Punctuation and grammar tend to be good, also. There are a couple of run-ons and such, but nothing to bad.
NEEDS IMPROVEMENT: The pacing is a bit too fast and awkward at times. Like, in this sentence here, for example:
That could be better written as an action statment. Something like this:
Also, I like what you're doing with the fourth wall, but try and keep it to a lesser minimum, because it throws me for a loop during the story.
Overall, I really like where this is going.
4392434 thanks. I try not to break the fourth wall much, but when it comes to Pinkie, I can't resist.
i think you should change their expectations of sweetie and spike 'getting together' to expectations of 'getting along' because they were just born, thats about a decade too early to worry about relationships
4503014 did you read chapter 3?
I don't get it. What's wrong with asking for the kid's name?
4583722 nothing. Shining's just teasing his nephew.
Ok I know you want pay back on Pinkie...
but by doing that you let the foals get into the Everfree Forest.
liking the story though
4687149 you have no idea how much payback there will be next chapter. And it won't be from me. That and I had to have them go into the forest for the story to continue.
4887067
x 1,000,000
Also, feel free to ask my OC or Luna questions on the blog.
4503014
I second that, it really should be along the lines of getting along well.
Beautiful :D
5316462 the chapter you waited on
Oh my...yay!
5318516 you do remember what I said if you say that, right?
5318766
I do, and that was what got me to want to do it in the first place.
5318770 so you really want me to hit the trash can button on that comment?
5318773
If you want to. It's your story, you didn't want that comment, hit the trash if you wish.
5318775 hopefully people will understand why I got rid of it.
5318778
Yes.
5318475 :D
5320533 still thirty ahead
5320533 twenty. my bad.
When is the next chapter
5503277 working on it
5503308 Well don't take this the wrong way. It please work faster this story is great