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Yeah you heard right. A pregnancy fic where Maud has a rock growing in her kidney. The idea came to me when I noticed how much rocks she ate and thought "Yeah too much minerals in your diet can really create an issue." This is a goofy, goofy exploration of that concept.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 18 )

Umm... wondering what to make of this...

We'll this is certainly a unique story

*reads title*

What the hell.

*reads story*

Hm. I like it. :pinkiesmile:

This is what I get for smoking weed:facehoof:

*Hours later and totally sober*
Holy shit this is real!:rainbowhuh:

Meh.
Schist happens with Maud.

Trying to process what the heck just went on.
-Inside my head-
Brain? What in Equestria is going on here?
Brain: It appears that the wat levels are off the scales. I reccomend reading a story that isn't about rock pregnancy.

Ha...ha...Ha! HA! HAHAHAHA!:heart:

I copy pasted this from the sites writing guide that you can find here.

Note: not an exact word for word copy/paste, some of the formatting of what they have in the guide didn't transfer over into the paste.

Dialogue

The most important rule of dialogue is this:

New speaker, new paragraph.

For example:

“MAKING CUPCAKES!” Pinkie happily announced.

“Baking?” Dash was disappointed. “Pinkie, you know I’m not good at baking. Remember last time?”

“Oh that’s not a problem at all. I only need your help making them. I’ll be doing most of the work,” Pinkie explained.

But not:

“MAKING CUPCAKES!” Pinkie happily announced. “Baking?” Dash was disappointed. “Pinkie, you know I’m not good at baking. Remember last time?” “Oh that’s not a problem at all. I only need your help making them. I’ll be doing most of the work,” Pinkie explained.

It’s also wrong to just put new dialogue on a new line, because it’s bad practice to separate any kind of paragraph without using indentation or vertical space (these kinds of breaks are completely invisible if the last line of your first paragraph happens to be the same width as the page it’s on).

“MAKING CUPCAKES!” Pinkie happily announced.
“Baking?” Dash was disappointed. “Pinkie, you know I’m not good at baking. Remember last time?”
“Oh that’s not a problem at all. I only need your help making them. I’ll be doing most of the work,” Pinkie explained.

Your story is fine in of itself, but the way it's written is terrible.

This is the most entertaining Maud Pie story on the site so far. +1000xp :pinkiehappy:

"Can I feel your belly?" "Can you?"

Mathematician's answer!

Absurd, cute, and hilarious. I'm loving it.

My 3DS returned from repair and I've been loving it too much to give you your horse rock pregnancy fic. I want the next chapter to be a long one and also want it to read better. Chapter 5 is the finale.

Well this was something else lol.

I am actually (strangely enough) reading this story while dealing with a kidney stone in my left ureter. Technically, for Maud to be in pain the stone should be in her left ureter not her left kidney. Kidney stones are usually asymptotic while they are still in the kidney.

If the stone is small enough it will often pass with medications to allow the ureters to relax and expand along with drinking plenty of fluids. Basically drinking fluids when thirsty. If that does not work then surgery is needed.

Other than that this story seems to be pretty good so far.

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