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In 2014, Convention 13 was signed as a world treaty. The Convention was rules for first contact. In 2017, the Convention is finally being put to use.
A Xenologist and a Marine initiate first contact. Unfortunately, the Xenologist is an Australian madman, and the Marine is a nineteen year old. This can not go wrong at all.
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Edit: Well would you look at that, i got first post :3
Favorited, because marines are awesome and Nigel is one crazy motherfucker.
Nigel Thornberry, looks interesting. You set this up to have an interesting back story, so don't screw it up :P
Realisticly giving up your sidearm for any reason is a stupid idea.
But fuckit for the sake of the story!
also
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Sonuvabitch.
I knew I was going to fuck something up.
Thanks for pointing it out.
And, yes, realistically, that would've never happened. But he gets the vibe that Nigel would just annoy him until he got the weapon. So he gave in quickly.
It was pretty.
(Not to be taken seriously, but his is an interesting story, if it makes you feel better)
1)Who the fudge is Nigel?!
2) Also, unfinished sentence.
3) Wait a minute, what the fudge is going on?!
4) "Obvious question to an obvious answer." Cliché.
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5) You must be one manly tooth fairy, Sir.
6) Wait...they don't know who's driving?! Their marines!! Their lucky that it was an ally driving the vehicle! Put the enemy as the driver and they can easily become sucide car crashers!!
7) I'm guessing that's either Applejack or Twilight...or Spike.
8) If Spike lived, he's gonna have a girlfriend in the sapient world, I called it.
9) "My friends//family is dead I'm sad" Cliché.
10) Wait a minute, Celestia has a plan?! Does she even have the magic to do it?! Don't pull that, 'She's got little magic left', Equestria is in ruins! And theirs no way Luna is part of this! Theirs no other sister! It didn't say that in the chapter! I may be wrong here, but if the next chapter doesn't involve her sister, Celestia, and Twilight pulling that off, than you can't explain that!
11) Twilight did a crime?! Dis gun be gud.
12) Now thinking about it, did a nuclear war happen...or...did they just go war on themselves like we humans did? Either way, a Fallout reference is in their somewhere.
13) Restart her species?! Are they planning on having sex?! Can thy turn into humans so this at least doesn't gross me out? No? ...Fudge
14) She went into the universe and died, the end.
BONUS ROUND: How many references are found in here?
15) CoD
16) Battlefield
17) GTA
18) Fallout
19) Tooth Fairy: The Movie
20) That One Planet Earth Movie from Cartoon Network
21) Nazi Zombies
Total Sins: 21
Solution: War (The hilarious kind)
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What?
The only Nigel I want to know about I Nigel M. Chalmers. Yes, the "M" stands for "Motherfucking," and no, you don't want to piss him off.
other than that, looks promising.
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That... uh, that's who this Nigel is.
I got permission from DropBear.
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Oh cool...
Might want to mention that somewhere...
Sorry...
*Sinks into ground, waiting for it to swallow me and my shame*
Nigel reads more like a cranky pom than an Australian dude. It's really not the best characterization I've seen.
4094153 Just a little joke, and a few questions from me, but other than that, this story's great!
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Meh, I'm American. I don't quite know how to write Australians.
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Most of them will be touched on in the next chapter, and some of them had context clues.
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It's okay.
4094153 I believe that was to be some form of review... have you edited this chapter? If not, I believe he might be listing off the cliches he thinks your story may/does contain.
An Australian that didnt say 'Cunt'?
Impossible!!!!
But seriously, if ya need an aussie to give you a hand with stuff, give us a bell.
4094384 It's fine and understandable. Absolutely nobody here says 'gobshite' though -- and believe me, I have lived in some very fucking ocker areas -- and the quantity of swearing/"bloody fucking" doesn't make him seem any more Australian. It just comes across as cartoonish and, as I said, makes him read like a cranky British dude with a foul mouth.
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There's a plan for that in the future.
Oh shit, magic acts as EMP?
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Massive concentrations, yes.
4097157 Fuck. There goes our only advantage. Does EMP shielding work?
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Yes, it does. But like I said, massive concentrations. You also have to be in close proximity to it. This will be explained in later chapters.
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Although I have to disagree that being our only advantage.
4097209 Ok.
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You'll see.
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Yeah, I just need to find the inspiration for the next chapter.
My train of thought has a shitty conductor.
Triiiiiiied. And failed.
It's really really hard for me to get into first contact stories, especially when it has something to do with the army or something. There are just so many fics like that, that I've been turned off from it. Not that this is a bad fic, necessarily.
However I will give you a piece of advice that I should have followed when first writing my fic. Cursing in narrative lines outside of dialogue. Usually a no-no, though I suppose there is the argument that it's just the author's voice, however, it just seems kinda...I dunno. Juvenile. I've thought a lot about it since my fic, and I think cursing in narrative lines can work if used appropriately. In the beginning of this fic I got bombarded by 'fucking' one too many fucking times.
On the other hand those gripes have more to do with personal taste than anything. Carry on!
4101972 True dat, you should still read fics from the Nigel-vers their pretty good.
As good as that is for a laugh, I don't think you meant to put that there
Either way, keep up the good work on the story, my friend
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Yeah I was talking with Dropbear about that, and I'm going to try and tone down the cussing.
Admittedly, it doesn't exactly fit Nigel.
But… Dante is a nineteen year old marine, so…
Besides that any other critiques?
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Damnit, why do they put "I" right next to the "O"? Why?!
Fixed, thanks for pointing it out.
4103134 I don't know it just seems a tad off.
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Like how so?
4107961 Nigel is a tad bit docile.
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Being improved upon.
There's also a reason.
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Oh Lord Inquisitor, i'm sure this fic will satisfy both me and you.
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Can't well bloody wait for the next chapter!
4108743 Fail.
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it's strange, if I re-post it it works fine then stops the next day.
EDIT: Found out why, it's adress seems to change with the number increasing so I guess it must be on a site where new images 'bump' it from the current URL.
Eh.
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Eh.
4336013 Too much character buildup and background. Needs more shoots and women.
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Eh.
ehhh why not.
Just keeping track I'll post again when I actually read it.
4103142 The qwerty keyboard is actually a horrible keyboard layout; other configurations are up to 700% more efficient on time and words-per-hand. (Type `7000 words with your left hand on qwerty while only ~200 with only your right) The keyboard layout was made for maximum factory output, unlike the plover layout, which is made for speed and accuracy.
I know the story seems fairly dormant since its first release almost one year ago, but considering how many comments there are and views that have been registered, I'm surprised no one else has pointed out or fixed this egregious typo.
It is literally in the first sentence of the first chapter. Not a great first impression to make.