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Ponyess


I just recently started to write stories directly towards the FiM actively, though I have been writing for years, publishing numerous stories at Mibba and the eventual pony story, as far as to the MLP

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A new establishment had opened next door to Berry Punches bar. I could ignore it, but the services were just too alluring.

I had gone to look closer. What I found sure is a shock, but it isn't repulsing me.

What is available is referred to as; 'Scratching'. I guess I could have a go.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 33 )
Comment posted by Toffee Bean deleted Mar 15th, 2014

Wooo, first group fic!

An editor might be needed but im too tired to judge properly at 2am.

Also chapter is too short. :fluttercry:

4084789 Hope this will be enjoyable in the long run.
some pony had to be first, could as well be me?
4084797 I gues I can see the first part.
it's the first chapter, and nothing will stop me from editing, or adding to it, even after it is completed as a story.

It isn't as i it will be taken down or deleted, unless the site goes down. Take your time.

btw; how long chapters would you prefer?

4084813 I think 2 thousand words is a good standard size.

I will follow this for now as the concept intrigues me

4084820 very few of my chapters reach that word count.
Yet, if a chapter asks me to put in more words, I'm not cutting it short, just because I reach the word count, just as I'm not adding words for filler material, if there is no point in making it longer.
To me, a chapter have a natural begining, action and end.

4084853 I hope I can keep it interesting.
should be more scratching forthcoming, too.

4084853 Theres a group dedicated to it actually. Just that Ponyess is the first one to get around to actually writing a story based on the concept.

4084912 another, aside from the one I just posted the story at, which seems to have you as the latest to join?

Some of us can be pretty quick writing, if and when the Muse is around.
a chapter wouldn't have to take all that long, even if it is long enough for you to enjoy it.

4084885 thanks for the info, but I never said anything assuming a single author...

OMC I can't belive it somepony opened a maid cafe in ponyville:heart::heart::heart::raritystarry::raritystarry::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

4090914 they're bound to open up all manner of establishments in Ponyvile, they're expanding.

Now there will be yet another reason for ponies to want to live in Ponyville.

just hope you enjoy the story too.
4085102 oh ok.

I had gone to look slower.

I don't understand what this sentence is trying to say. I think you might want to take a step back from storytelling for a little while and practice basic sentence construction instead.

4101851 if it is what I think you mean, it's fixed, and the context should have explained it?
sorry about this stupid typo.

Sorry for the late review but good job on our first story!

4130317 then you're enjoying the 'Adventure', as far as you've read?

4131180 then I hope you'll enjoy the next chapter, just as much as the first.
It's even slightly longer then the first.

4131601 Next chapter may explain a few things, even if you may think it is later then preferable?
oh well, at least now you'll get a better idea of who is in the story.
4084797 not a 2,000 words, but longer then before, and it may be longer, once I get to editing it into a more desent shape, once I get more into what is going on.

Ahh this is nice and poor pinke she was place knto a scricht coma love it cant wait for tbe next chapter

4132412 "Script Coma"?
"scricht coma" ??

there will be a new chapter coming up rather soon.

4133539 scratch coma is what I ment

4133624 ah, ok.
she certainly did enjoy her scratching, which is the idea of the story.

Oh god this is so suggestive. And hot. And kinky. Kinky Pie :3
Also I don't quite get it, human girl with 3 inch naked tail? What? And are these humans even sapient? I kinda discovered this group by reading YHaY and I'm not sure about that now.

4293469 thanks.
I guess it could, even if this is a family friendly establishment, rather then one of the ... bars?
sugestive .. :pinkiegasp:

I may have left the sapiency vague on purpose here.

if the story helped you find the group, I guess it wasn't all that bad?

if it said inches, I'll just have to goover the details, again? :facehoof:
I think Ithe tail was measured in feet.

4293825 3 feet tail WHAT. Maybe it was feet actually. YHaY is good, I was questioning the sapience of the human girl.

4294059 3 feet would be a rather proportional tail, right?

For now, I've made then clever enough to handle both scratching and feeding at the same time.
They don't speak while scratching, or while ponies are close by.

I felt that if it isn' stated in the story, it could work as a back story for the group, leaving others free to chose as they please, without contradicting.

4294652 now im superconfused. why does humans have tails?

4294738 I like them to blend in a bit, so I chose the once featured to have thetail and hooves.
As I recall, I pot up 4 choices, half of which are just 'Regular' humans.
If your pony prefer a regular, male or female, they're available too

Maybe I should feature a Pony choosing a regular, just to make the point? :scootangel:.

4294763 I guess I just missed that part where humans were both tailed and tailless.
Edit: they have hooves, too? I should re-read it I guess.

4295058 It is mentioned on the 'Menu', where you choose scratcher.

yeah, both hooves and tail.
I thought the details went well together, even if I guess some may thing otherwise?

If you missed the hooves, I guess you weren't paying enough attention?
text without any details is pointles and boring to me at least.

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