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Applejack goes to serve her sister and cousin lunch at their clubhouse and hears an...interesting occurrence.

Rate Teen just to be safe.

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“And that's how you do it,” she said, panting. “Phew! Look at me! Now I'm all sweaty!Now it's your turn Babs.”

Missing a space.

Now other than that small and insignificant error in grammar, it was all well and good (Except for the strange structuring of the paragraphs.) It was really nice and pleasant to read and actually managed to grace my features with a smile. It was well told and would perhaps consider reading more from you. Good day.

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I fixed the mistake. ^^

Much obliged, good sir. :twilightsmile:

preparing to fix to lunch

I am not sure how the fit comments applied here, but it was pretty funny. :ajbemused:

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Thank you for the good grace of a reply. May success find you.

Good day.

Applejack goes to serve her sister and niece

Babs Seed is Apple Bloom's cousin. That makes her Applejack's cousin, as well. Not her niece. Just saying. :applejackunsure:

On another note, Applejack has a dirty, dirty mind. She should be ashamed for thinking of what she was thinking of. :trixieshiftleft:

Although to be honest, there's a bit of cognitive dissonance between Applejack's fantasy and reality. I mean, how did Apple Bloom hurt Babs with an apple press? Also, did Applejack have "the talk" with her little sister or didn't she? It's kinda hard to tell. :unsuresweetie:

It's alright for what it is, but some parts just left me scratching my head. Especially since I didn't think it was all that random. It's just a double entendre joke. Not all that zany. And trust me, I've seen/written some pretty zany stuff on this site. :duck:

Um... Babs isn't AJ's niece. They're cousins.

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Yeah, I know I realized that too late...sorry. I went and fixed it though, but on a darker side, it sort of implies something else, doesn't it...


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Her hand slipped and she got cut, is what I had in mind. Sorry if I didn't make that clearer in the story. :/

All I can say is
:facehoof:

4079857 lol That's the idea.

Thank you for reading. :twilightsmile:

Well.... This was interesting....

INSTA-LIKE-BUTTON-SMASH!!!!!

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You're too kind. :twilightsmile:

4080258 Well, no, cuz I'm normally very, very critical when I review something. But this, I found hilarious. On the other hoof... Maybe I am too kind sometimes...

I'm sorry, a simple "It's nothing" or "no problem" is never enough for me...

Aj should have just left and how do u do the pony emoticons

...so what does applejack have in her room?

I have a rather busy schedule so I'm very glad I finally found a nice short story I can read without taking up too much time.

Also my favourite part was the line

"But they were cousins! Not that Applejack had any problem with that, but they were still only fillies!"

So AppleJack doesn't have a problem with cousins being together, eh? I wonder what she's been up to off screen :rainbowkiss::heart:

I was really hoping this wouldn't be the old, tired gag about two people sounding like they're having sex but actually not.

I mean, it's just done.

I knew the gag was coming, but I always like trying to wonder what exactly the two are doing before it is revealed. Keeps it interesting. This one made me laugh a bit. However, I lost it at this line:

But they were cousins! Not that Applejack had any problem with that

:rainbowlaugh:
Care to explain?:trixieshiftright:

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The Apples like to keep their seeds inside the orchard. :raritywink:

Hell yeah! This was an awesome story. I'll have to promote this. :pinkiehappy:

Thanks!!!! :raritystarry:

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You're more than welcome, my friend. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by dieteticchutoy3 deleted Mar 31st, 2014

Ohmigod so funny! Poor AJ.:facehoof:

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Done right!!! :rainbowlaugh:

I.. :rainbowlaugh: I-I.. :rainbowlaugh: I just.. :rainbowlaugh: I can't even.. :rainbowlaugh:

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I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^^

At first I thought they were doing it...

The ending caught me off guard SOOOOO badly:rainbowlaugh:

Get 'er done!

I'm gonna maek a comic out if this!!

If you let me.

6244927 Oh by all means. I'd be flattered. ^_^

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