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Princess Celestia never knew what it was like to be feared. Sure, she knew of the anxiety of those meeting her for the first time, but that was a given. That wasn’t true fear. She knew of the fear of defeat shown by past villains she had brought down, but it was never true fear of her or her actions.

This colt, though? This earth pony who just appeared in her castle? He fears her. He fears her above all else, even death itself. Not even Nightmare Moon was feared this way. So why, oh why was this little colt so terrified of her? What had she done? How can she ever hope to alleviate her little pony of his pain, if her very presence causes him to lock up in terror?

Just where did this colt come from?

(So imagine a character from a grimdark story (ideally the victim) ending up in canon Equestria, and you pretty much have the premise behind this story. Do be warned though; this is much darker than my other stories, mostly because of the setting the aforementioned character came from. Seriously, when I thought of a victim of a grimdark story, I really wanted his old home to be as grim and dark as I could make it.)

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:pinkiegasp: a foal molestation version of equestria :trixieshiftright: interesting idea i wonder how this will play out maybe hell scream something like dont rape me or something ill admit it now id probably laugh

I like where this is going I require moar chapters

WRITE MORE NOW!!! I need to find out what happens or I will go crazy :pinkiecrazy: I :heart: THIS STORY!

Humm now I am curious if Empress Celestia's student is a princess too....

Hmmm... will follow to see where this is going. Any idea when a second chapter will be out?

I like so far! Will be waiting...

torture, rape, child torture, child rape, jaywalking, necrophilia, brainwashing, forced incest, rape-murder, cannibalism, racial extermination, and littering.

Jaywalking!? LITTERING!!? THOSE FIENDS!

Great story, keep it coming.

Interesting. Gonna love seeing Celestia try and comfort the colt while he wets himself at the sight of her. I always like those kind of things, warm my heart, especially once they reconcile.

... maybe reconcile.

Well then... that.. just happened. I`m intrigued; please, do continue this.

... holy fuck. Holy fuck. :twilightoops:

Normally I'm not at all a fan of ponies being this absurdly mean, but this is clearly AU and we have the true, kind ponies in the story as well. I want to see where this is going, and how far the anti-Empress spears will find their way into their asses.

I find myself in such a position that I want this story very much. But I also want the other one very much.

So: Damned if you do, damned if I don't.

Hey, this actually updated! I didn't have high hopes for it, but I was wrong, as seen here.

Good lord, this boy was fucked up. :twilightoops:
Lulamoon doesn't mess around. If a Royal Guard slams snout-first into her, he'd better have a will. Shit, the entire force better have their testaments ready. :trixieshiftleft:

FINALLY my gods man what took you so long but god story keep updating

I have a feeling that the Element Bearers wouldn't be a pleasant sight for AU Lulamoon.

Welp... time to get them body bags ready.:ajsleepy:

Finally. I won't accept any excuses for why you haven't updated this since like a year ago. :ajbemused:
I need MORE.

Holy Celestia, this updated! I gave the first chapter a do-over read and it looks so good so far!

This colt was more shook up than a Polaroid.

J-Jesus...I mean...damn...This is so beautifully written, but at the same time so dark. This is probably one of the darkest stories I've ever read. I really want to see where this goes.

Please, for the love of all that is holy, WRITE MORE OF THIS STORY!!!!!

Please write more of this! PLEASE! This is to amazing to go onto Hiatus or be Cancelled!

Yay, it updated and... oh damn, pegasus? Those Tyrants better get a rainbow to the face.:twilightangry2: Celestia and Luna in names only.

And... Alter-Trixie's there as well? Oh boy, her meeting up with one of the sisters - or presumably Twilight - could end up a lot messier than Coal Dust. Still waiting for him to meet the sisters.

This story is so dark light cannot escape its surface... It is magnificent!

I really, really hope this is continued

*hopes you come back sometime soon*

Sadly, some people have lives for seemingly the sole purpose of spending their time elsewhere rather than write pony words.

5317083 Sadly those people also seem to write the best ones.

5321801 The world is filled with terrible coincidences.

Jeez can we go back to continuing this fanfiction?

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I'll try, but given this whole fic is more of an experiment on my part than anything else and that the majority of my inspiration and time are on another story, updates are likely to be nightmarish.

I won't just leave it cold and alone in the streets, though, don't you worry.

Comment posted by Desolate deleted Apr 18th, 2015
Comment posted by Desolate deleted Apr 18th, 2015

5728159 Good luck on continuing Philosophy, maybe once you are done with that story (which is my favorite crossover) then you can see how you have improved as an author, while writing any story you could always come back to this one and write a chapter to see how you have progressed as an author, just a suggestion, this is an experimental story afterall, anyways good luck.

A year since the last update, and about two months since the author last logged in.

I'm thinking it's dead, Jim.

IF THIS FIC IS DEAD THEN I WANT SOMEONE TO CONTINUE IT!!!

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You're dead too though :(

5321801 I think that the multiverse is real, and in this particular one, whenever a fimfiction autho has a good and original (or at least well written) idea/story, they get right up to the/a good part, and then stop writing. I kinda want to write something like this, but I know that I'm an amateur witer at best and I can't do character interactions. The best I can do is copy "Today was a [adjective] day" which is kinda sad.

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The stuff some of us read is usually much more twisted than this. I mean, you didn't even cut to what Luna did to the colt!

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"Tonight, you become a stallion~"

Someone's a major pedophile and perv.

Please continue writing this its a great story i like it it has its perks alot of people want you to continue it plz do it ill help edit just finish the story plz

This author was last seen in the site in 2015 so the chances of this story coming back are almost zero.

Still good for the occasional reread

When I start reading this story I instantly knew it was going to be a great story and the first two chapters were so good i couldn't wait to see the third one until I noticed the last updated was 5 years ago but I'm still going to put this into my watch later cos this is a story I hope gets updated a somepoint

When the next chapter?

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