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Liar

Applejack has lied to her friends one too many times.

She has to stop this now.

Chapters (2)

Chapter 1 - The Liar Within · 15th Mar 2014 · 2,446 words
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Chapter 2 - Truth Will Prevail · 17th Mar 2014 · 852 words
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Mad Maudlin

Mad Maudlin #1 · Mar 15th, 2014 · 1 · · Chapter 1 - The Liar Within ·

Interesting idea, though I think it could be pushed a bit further particularly concerning AJ's coping mechanisms for the psychological stress. This is something I've wondered about myself: How AJ dealt with all the daily situations where full and complete disclosure would be... ill advised.

Also:
"Applejack only revived word of it yesterday" should probably be 'received'.

Ephraim Blue

Ephraim Blue #2 · Mar 15th, 2014 · · 1 · Chapter 1 - The Liar Within ·

4086430 Fixed it.
Also, I don't understand what you are saying.
No offence.

crowscrowcrow

crowscrowcrow #3 · Mar 15th, 2014 · 1 · · Chapter 1 - The Liar Within ·

Nice story, though I do agree with 4086430
Seeing it explored a little further might have been nice.

At about half way through this story, I was starting to wonder if Applejack had some kind of gift here that made her lies come true. But in hindsight that really did not fit the facts.