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One night near Las Pegasus Cheese Sandwich gets a slightly odd Cheesy Sense and sets off to Ponyville to find out what the doozy is about. There he reunites with Pinkie Pie, who is just as energetic as ever. Though there seem to be certain feelings between them, that keep intervening with their friendship.

What was the Cheesy Sense really about after all?

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Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 67 )

That was good. I can't wait for the next chapter. Best of luck with it.

4072581 Thanks! :twilightsmile: I'll start working on it tomorrow.

OMG! It was great! Very short but still great! It made me want to read more! Please write more soon! Pretty please! :pinkiehappy:

4072885 But of course! Thanks for complimenting! :twilightsmile:

OMC!!!!! This is the best story I have ever read so far I give It a 100/10!!!!!!!!!!!!!

4074512 I'm so glad you like it! Stay tuned for more! :raritywink:

Oh boy. Cheese. RUN AFTER HER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Great chapter.

I have already commented it on deviantart but well... As I said before this chapter was fantastic! Especially conversation with Mrs Cake! I hope that you'll update soon! I can't wait to read another chapter! :pinkiehappy:

4083122 Thanks! That really motivates me to continue! :pinkiesmile:

Cheese Sandwich you idiot! You never go though a mare's trash!

Still though, I started laughing as soon as I read that. I knew in my gut it couldn't end well.

GIVE ME ANOTHER:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

Okay thanks :rainbowkiss:

*SQEE* SO. FREAKING. CUTE!! :pinkiehappy:
I :heart: THIS SO MUUUCCHH!!
:twilightangry2: Cheese you'd better go after her or
I WILL NOT SHOW MERCY!!

Amazing, This is my favorite ship in the show!

4090813 Thanks, it's my favorite too! (obviously) :pinkiehappy:

4090372 Thanks! Check out the new chapter, it's done! :pinkiesmile:

That was nice. I liked how you had Rarity meddle to find out who it was. Great job with your writing.

I love your story. Cheese and Pinkie are the best couple! Your writing style is amazing too! Keep being awesome.

Still absolutely cute! Actually it was so great that I didn't even notice when this chapter came to an end. There will never be enough CheesePie for me I guess. I can't wait to read another chapter. Please update soon! :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks y'all. :pinkiesmile: The next one might take a little while. I'm trying to think up better ideas for it... :twilightsheepish:

I find it absolutely hysterical that whenever Pinkie has a crisis involving her love life, she ends up going to Rarity! I thought I was the only one to do so, but it appears not!

4098981 It seems like the most logical place for her to find help in that kind of stuff, in my opinion at least. :twilightsmile: Or for anypony for that matter, since Rarity is basically the only one of the main cast to be somewhat experienced with love and stuff. :raritywink:

Absolutely love this! Can't wait for you to update! :pinkiehappy::heart:

Now that was quite interesting. I mean the whole difference between Cheese's and Pinkie's reactions and what they think or do. Of course Cheese himself confirmed that he is happy that Pinkie is now his marefriend and "he had been freed from the restraining chains of friendship" but still he acts a bit weird. Like he is not totally sure about this relationship or maybe his feelings. Now I'm more curious what will happen next. Please update soon! :twilightsmile:

I get the joke. Great job with the chapter. I wonder though what is up with Cheese? He is nervous about having a marefriend, or is he not serious into being into a relationship.

It was 15 minutes over 12 am.

A stallion's yell could be heard from downstairs: "Dinner is ready!"

A bit of inconsistency here.

Amazing! Can't wait till next chapter:pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! Your comments always make my day happier to go through! :pinkiesmile: The next chapter is on its way!

:rainbowkiss:gushes over shy cheese

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*self-promotes shamelessly*

I really like shy Cheese, too, and that's probably one of the reasons I'm writing this fiction in the first place. I'm also planning on making a story only about Cheese being shy after this is done... :twilightsmile:

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Why are they having dinner at 12 AM?

Comment posted by Alto Spark deleted Apr 24th, 2014

Aw. Cute! I don't know why I didn't draw the connection between this and the story on DeviantArt, but I was just reading it this afternoon and squealing at all the intense cute. I'm actually getting kind of fussy about my CheesePie, so this was one I was happy to read!

4118098 by the way that shy cheese picture was absolutely adorable *squee* :yay:

4121281 Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

4120538 Glad you like it. :twilightsmile:

Love love love!! :pinkiehappy: Can't wait for the next chapter! :heart::heart::pinkiehappy:

This chapter was funny and quite confusing. Still I'm curious about Cheese and his rather reluctant attitude. Also I think you made the relationship between Pinkie and Twilight a bit too cold. But that's only my opinion. Anyway the story is still very interesting and I can't wait to read more! Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

Great chapter. Twilight, why do you have to question Cheesy sense. Great job with the idea of it being an earth pony thing.

Cheese is just a tiny bit OOC, but great fan fiction and can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

4134409 This chapter was kinda just build up to the next ones, so it might be confusing. :twilightsheepish: In my head Pinkie doesn't like it at all when somepony questions her responsibility, like in the episode Baby Cakes. And for Twilight... well, I think she would do anything to get important information, even ignore her friend, if that was what concerned you. This is my first fic ever after all so don't expect wonders... :applejackunsure:

4137982 I'm planning on explaining why Cheese has been acting that way in later chapters.

4138473 If that is how you imagine the whole thing about Twi and Pinkie I can totally understand that! :raritywink: And about the fic I don't expect wonders but here you're doing great! I love your story and it's very good for a first one. As I said before, keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

They seemed hungry enough to eat an octorok. :trollestia:

(Also, you know that 12 AM is Midnight, right bro?)

4173975 Oops :derpyderp1: I don't use the 12 hour clock, so I didn't know. Thanks for pointing that out! :twilightsheepish:

Not half bad! Looking forward to the upcoming chappies. :twilightsmile:

Edit: 4174054 Oh, and hehe, no worries! Glad to be of service! :pinkiehappy:

I really like this so far, it's adorable! I'm going to keep reading now.
Only criticism I have is that you seemed to switch tenses a few times there.

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