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Twilight Sparkle is the best student a teacher could ask for. She tests 100% on every test and is never late for an assignment. Since her mentor is Princess Celestia, the leader of Equestria herself, this is quite the accomplishment. But with that being the case, Twilight has also left no time to her personal life at all, making textbooks her life. So, the princess sends Twilight to Ponyville to study abroad and learn about the magic of friendship. On the same night she moves, she suffers strange dreams and finds herself in a dark world of night filled with monsters threatening to kill her and those close to her. Can Twilight use the power of persona to save the world from destruction?

Cover art by who149.

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 50 )

Amazing! Although, I think you should put Alternate Universe, and probably Dark under the Category's.

Being a huge fan of Both Persona and MLP (duh), And for this being very well written in nearly every aspect, I give this 5 Figurative Stars.

On story note, I like how you made Spike Basically the equivalent of Teddy, while keeping 3's sort of atmosphere.

pretty good:ajsmug: hope to see more:pinkiehappy: great idea anyway.

Also, your free not to use this, but I went and made some cover art, just in case you wanted it :twilightsheepish:

i51.photobucket.com/albums/f387/who149/Personaharmony.jpg

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Thank you very much for the art ^^ but I already have an artist working on that. Sorry!

OBJECTION!!!! :flutterrage: :twilightangry2: I have read a story online that links directly to this!!! Please, explain yourself! If you want, I can find a link to what I read, and bring it here!!! So tell me, why the hay is this almost exactly like a story I read?

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You have? Did it happen to be on DeviantArt? Cause I put it up there, too. Under the username "lazynerd". If that's not where you found it then I'm rather confused :rainbowhuh:

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Its Alright, it was actually more something I wanted to do :twilightsmile: Only really took me about 5 minutes.

Sorry about flipping out, though. Researching it now! :trollestia:

O_O This doesn't seem to be from DeviantArt! http://m.fanfiction.net/s/7258803/1/ And it isn't your name! When did you post your story on Deviantart?

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Just yesterday. Though to be fair the style is very different and they've taken a different direction with it. After a quick scan it seems that they are just re-telling Persona 4 with the cast of MLP. Same concept with ponies meet Persona, but two totally different stories. If you still need convincing then future chapters should be just the thing you need :raritywink:

Erm...Persona 4? :twilightsheepish:

Anyways, I apologize for raging! How can I make up for it?

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No need to make up for anything! It was an honest mistake. Although if you insist I suppose you could track this story and give constructive criticism every now and again :twilightsmile:

Intriguing. Proceed.

And I am vastly amused you cast Derpy as Elizabeth.

So are you going by the anime or the game?

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Do you mean which story am I retelling? If so then I'm actually trying to make an original story with this concept. It may not seem like it right now since Izanagi was just brought in and Spike was introduced exactly how Teddie was but I promise those will be the only similarities that aren't staples of the series... at least intentionally. :twilightsheepish:

If you mean by how the story will flow then probably more like the anime.

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Fair enough, I never played the game itself so I wanted to be sure. Additionally the producers are planning on adding another episode to the anime based off of the True ending of the game, so all together it should be 26 episodes rather than 25.

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Really?! Oh thank Celestia! I just saw the 25th episode and was really sad they didn't even hint at the 26th episode! That fixed my day! :yay:

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So what happens next? I mean it would be interesting to show Twilight's social status throughout the fic.

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Well I can't tell you what happens next! You'll just have to wait until the next update. :twilightsmile: Though I don't think I'll be worrying about those stats in this fic. Maybe a joke or two about it. We'll just have to wait and see!

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Pinkie breaking the fourh wall and shows Twilight her stats?:pinkiehappy:

Well, I'm not really sure where to start the criticism you wanted....maybe how quickly Spike reacts and tries to save Twilight? At first, he was being stubborn, then demanding that she follows him to save her life. Quite a different course, if I may say. I can't wait for the next update! :rainbowkiss:

Wow...:rainbowderp:
I don't even know where to start.
This is deep and awesome.
The story flow is smooth and amazing.
Wow.
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Augh, I hate when things like that happen.

But yes, please do continue!

"It's strange that I'm only a grammar nazi when correcting people. When I write it's like I forget basic English XD"
Actually it's not that strange. I'm like that too.

In this Mythopoetic approach, which views the Major Arcana as a journey through life taken by the character of the Fool (the Fool being the first card, or the zero card, of the Major Arcana), the Wheel of Fortune represents the intercession of random chance into the Fool's path. The card represents the forces that can help or hinder the querant suddenly or unpredictably.

It can also represent the underlying order that the Magician attempts to master. The letters on the wheel were intended by Waite to mean "Rota Taro Orat Tora Ator," which he "translated" (this term used loosely) to: "The Wheel of Taro[t] speaks the Law of Ator [Hathor, or Love]."

Through its cross sum (the sum of the digits), it is closely connected to The Magician and The Sun (cards 1 and 19 of the Major Arcana respectively). Each represents a break with the previously established order: the Magician starting the journey; The Wheel of Fortune introducing random chance; and The Sun reborn from the underworld.

Copypasta'd from Wikipedia. I think Twilight would naturally fall under The Magician in this approach to the High Arcana (The Fool would only naturally apply to a newborn who knows nothing) so the relation of Fortune and Magician makes sense in the context of Applejack and Twilight. If I may speculate, Applejack will have to be convinced to step out and take a chance, to spin Fortune's Wheel with no guarantees where it'll end up in order to save her farm... and possibly herself.

As for who will form the Magican S-Link, I'm going to put in a guess for either the CMC (collectively) or Trixie, if she happens to show up before the Nightmare Moon incident, which I'm pretty sure you have picked out for the climax.

I am most interested in meeting everypony's shadow.

By the way I was wondering why did you choose Ditzy instead of say Lyra?

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To be honest I just thought it's be cool if she were Igor's assistant. It was one of the first ideas that came to mind with this fic. No really deep reason, just thought it'd be a cool way to put her in the story. :twilightsheepish:

Annnd now I want to play Persona 4 again. Listening to the track while reading this helps the feeling too. :twilightblush:
Anyway good chapter, wonder who's going to be next to be sent to that world.

Why is this not more popular?

I mean, its well written, deep, long. The only downside is that its a while between the updates.. But I've seen fics that are complete garbage that get the feature box, and something like this that is this well thought out and worked on is hardly noticed? :rainbowhuh:

Anyway, as said. Amazing fic! i love every bit of it and nearly jumped out of my seat when I saw an update!

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I... Umm... Thanks! :twilightblush: I really don't know what to say to that kind of praise. Sorry for the long time between updates, I'm the worst procrastinator. Yes, even for things that I would use to procrastinate with I procrastinate. As I said in a blog earlier the next update will probably be quite a while as I work to get this on EqD. I won't put a Hiatus tag on it since I will be working vigilantly on it, but there could be a very long wait time for Chapter 4 depending on how fast I can get help editing this outside of my two pre-readers.

oh boy wait till rainbow dash gets involved.........can;t wait for update.....:ajsmug::twilightblush:

This is the best thing I've ever read in a while.
Where do I start?
The writing takes the 'next level' narration that other stories imitate but can never get just right.
The midnight hour from Persona 3 plus the facing yourself of Persona 4 is always a good combination.
Plus, it's a... well, realistic version of events in Ponyville that makes sense if allowed the right dimensions.
Whatever you're doing, you're doing something right.
Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

Finally, a new chapter!
Unfortunately, I made the mistake of trying to cram too much into one chapter. The word count is a little shy from the first chapter, but the amount of things that happened in this chapter began to pile up to the point that I'd end up with a chapter longer than chapter 3. While that wouldn't be a terrible thing, I'd rather leave those longer chapters for the finale of each arc. As a result, scenes feel emotionless at times, or too rushed or what have you. I hope I was at least able to make what happened convincing and within reason of the characters and the situations they were in. My judgement cannot be trusted, however, since I would be overly harsh of my work. That's where you guys come in! Criticism is welcomed and encouraged!
Also, an announcement. I have now set deadlines for my updates. I will attempt to write one chapter every two weeks. By every other Saturday (U.S. time) you will have a new chapter to read. Setting a deadline should keep this story on my mind and thus written. From here on, I promise no more slow updates!

Well, this certainly got my attention. You can bet your bottom buck that I'll be keeping an eye on this.

Uh oh... I have a feeling AJ's going to "kill" Twilight for hurting Caramel even though Caramel was the one to bring up the bad news.

Awesome chapter. End was actually pretty surprising. Love every bit of this :twilightsmile:

Hmm, this was nice. The only complaint I had was that she should have noticed something off through another subtle hint during at least one of the dates, but even then that is more of an insurance tactic to make sure he revelation doesn't feel forced. However, since you foreshadowed the revelation a bit in the beginning this nitpick is easily ignorable and no editing is really required.

At any rate I look forward to what Caramel has to say about this when he had been dating Twilight right up until the confession. I think I know what he is going to say, but I want to see how you have him say it. Your writing, while not poetic or having a large word count, manages to do the job well with a nice, Persona-y flavor while the characters remain as true to the show as they can, given the crossover nature of the fic.

I also saw the bit about the story Twilight read. I am not sure HOW this fits in, but I think I know what it is dealing with. I sincerely look forward to the culmination of that little subplot.

In other comments, I love the gag Spike made about sending letters. A stroke of brilliance, I have to say. Your grammar is good and I couldn't notice anything glaring. I hope you keep this up until its finish!

Haha, that was a good chapter. I saw Caramel's surprise coming though, sort of. I wasn't sure who he was feeling sad about, the filly or Big Macintosh. But so far so good. Keep up the good work. :yay:

Finally, Chapter 5 is up! And guess what? Chapter 6 is getting posted just after this! Yes, I figured I'd apologize for being late twice for these chapters by posting them at the same time. I think I've gotten back in my writing groove, so the updates should be coming much more smoothly.
I don't really know why, but I really like how Candy and Cotton turned out. Maybe it's just how they interact with each other. In any case, I do want to keep the idea of these two under lock and key in my memory so that I may hopefully use them in the future. Maybe not in this fic again, but in the future regardless.
I hope this chapter has been worth the wait. This went through roughly three different drafts before I was finally satisfied with where it went and how it got to the resolution. Happy reading and as usual please comment with your thoughts and opinions! Criticism is always appreciated.

And now for the second update of the day, Chapter 6! We finally have the persona and fusion system explained here for everyone's understanding and not just mine. About friggin' time, right? And guess what? We're finally beginning to move away from the Apple family! That only took 6 chapters!
Before the Dream World section kicked in, I was really afraid that this chapter was going to be short. Suddenly, though, I started really getting into it again once the 1vs1 fights between Twilight and the shadows started.
When deciding what to do for the first fusion I discovered that I kind of lucked out with what would've turned out with Big Mac's and Caramel's social links. a little history on Makami: It is a divine creature in Japanese mythology. It resembles a spell tag used to ward off evil. Makami follows this tradition by mostly guarding homes from fires or thefts. However, it was feared to be a people eater despite the protection it brought.
I find this applicable to Caramel's situation, not only with the irrational fear some people have towards homosexuals but also for the fear he had towards himself because he was a homosexual. He lived each day as happily as he could while helping out his Apple family, but also lived in constant fear of what he was.
And then I looked at his skills, which turned out to be very defensive with his only real attack being Agilao. This screamed Big Macintosh for me with his desire to protect his family at any cost. On a side note, Makami's Counter skill was inherited from Rakshasa, in case that needed explanation.
I also have a question to go along with this story. While writing I can almost never keep Igor's ponified version in my mind and instead just imagine his normal self popping up with his dialogue box. I did the same as I imagined the knight and ghost shadows, both of which are commonly seen in the Persona series. Do any of you crossover writers do the same thing? I personally just find it easier to keep Igor in character when I imagine his human self speaking across from MC.
And with that, happy reading, comment, yada yada.

The Hanged Man.
Interesting.
And yes. Igor makes a much better human than a pony.

Regarding Chapter 7...
It will probably be late. How late, I'm not sure, but I know I won't have it up by Saturday. I've been under quite a bit of stress lately and I've hardly gotten much written. Just a fair warning for all those who may have been expecting it to be on time for once.

Ooooo... I rather liked how this all turned out! Good chapter! Worth the wait, even though I sorta put off reading it when it came out...

It wasn't anything personal I swear! I have roughly 90 chapters to clear out of my favorites queue and I got intimidated!

Worth it to read this though.

I'm a huge fan of both Persona and Pony, but while this was well written, I feel like it was kind of just going through the same motions that the two series have (same reason I couldn't get into Fallout: Equestria or Silent Ponyville). Then again, I've only read chapter 1.

Though with the release of Persona 4 Arena and P4G, I've been thinking of doing a crossover of my own. >_>

This really is an under viewed story. I really like it and I can't wait it see where this will go. I am interested in how your fusion system works. I look forward to more. Also, I just started Persona 4 a week or two ago and I've already put over 26 hours into the game. And I'm only on the video game guy. It's a great game, but if you aked me what about it makes me lose track of time when I'm playing it, I would have no answer. However if you asked me that about this story, I could say that I stayed up until 1a.m. reading it because it is good.

I felt like there needed to be a place for Persona and other MegaTen stories to be placed so they are easier to find, so I made a group for it. Hope you don't mind, but I added your story to it. And here's the group:
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/198120/persona-the-group

ā€œIā€™m gay!ā€

That was unexpected.

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