I always found it more fun to go full tilt with out holding things back, but it would make more sense for this character.

It feels awkward to be the third wheel, doesn't it?

Oh McCarthy

That ruins the moment.

4743636 but I tried so hard
Eh, like I care. Don't even like clop.

Wow, a threesome with the exact same girl. Nice

...what she had meant about smell; she scent of sex was intoxicating.

I think you meant to say "the scent of her sex was intoxicating".
Not sure, but hopefully that helps.

You get 10/10 moustaches for this story.

For some weird reason, I couldn't stop giggling throughout the whole Flash and Realight trying to figure out how to teach Princess how to rut. Oh well, just the kid in me I guess. Enjoyed the backstory for the Reals as well.

even though we'd made love, we were like two perfect strangers meeting for the same time.

The word collapsed as Flash reached up, under the edge of my shirt, and stroked the small of my back.

That was just too weird for right now.

she scent of sex was intoxicating.

*first

I don't know which word is missing here.

I think you are missing a me here.

*the

5401713 Gah. See, this is what happens when no one is willing to proofread my smut. "The small of my back" is a real thing, though; it's the indentation in the middle of your back just above your hips. Some people are sensitive there.

You wouldn't be available to proofread chapters in advance, would you?

I'm really enjoying your writing. I have taken a keen interest in Sunset Shimmer after the second movie, and your later stories in this series turned up in a search (or were they featured?). Despite having no interest in Flashlight shipping, I started at the beginning, and I'm glad I did. Not because of Flash, but rather the two Twilights. Their thoughts and motivations seem well fleshed out and fairly believable. (Princess is a little tougher to read, since her motivations seem to be in conflict.) Also a sucker for a darker turn of events, such as the mirror being destroyed.

I'm digging the (hopefully intentional) symbolism and implications you've created in your work. The one that struck me the most so far was Twilight rejecting Princess's offer of half the candy crown. Directly rejecting the Magic of Friendship. Had a feeling things wouldn't go too smoothly after that.

Anyway, stopped on this chapter before bed last night, and apparently my subconscious decided to write its own ending of the events so far. Not too many stories make more than a bit appearance in what churns in my dreams, so you're definitely doing something right. Weird dream crap to follow, feel free to skip.

Twilight doesn't get back in on the action that night, which hurts her far more than she tries to let on (I'm sure she was wearing the "It's fine" face). To avoid her hurt, she decides to throw herself into a project. This time, its a quest to deal with the Threat from the Sky. (What exactly the Threat is, was never clearly defined. I suspect it was a meteor swarm though.)

Twilight's a unicorn at this point (because dream), and she shortly bumps into Trixie (also a unicorn). Twilight knows she needs as much help as she can get, and certainly can't afford to pass up a unicorn, so she convinces Trixie to aid her. The two of them prepare (and search?) for the Threat, crisscrossing the countryside on magical pegasus wings. They venture further and further out, eventually making it to the Middle Lands (shrug).

There, Twilight discovers something she rather wishes she hadn't, a castle. Upon the thrown sits Princess (as a human; nice consistency brain), wearing her recently recovered crown (it had been lost in the aftermath of Equestria Girls). And now that she's fully stolen Flash, and given Twilight a taste of what she'll never have again, she plans to summon the Threat from the Sky.

So Twilight was right all along. Someone was trying to ruin her life. Unfortunately, it was her (now) evil twin.

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Twilight rejecting Princess's offer of half the candy crown

Someone noticed! All this practice is paying off.

I'm digging the dream. Given the way my own mind works, I've logged that as a canon Fidelityverse AU. (Which means you're about three AUs deep.) I'd love to hear what you make of Sunset and Shimmer when you reach them.

And no, to my knowledge, none of these stories have been featured. Given the subject matter, I can't imagine a scenario in which they would be.

"Pubic hair traps the chemicals secreted by sweat, enhancing the smell that tells your partner that you're in an aroused state."

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