One day when it is raining heavily outside, Twilight decides to raid Spike's comic book collection and play a while as the Power Pony, the Masked Matterhorn.
She finds herself in the story of how one of the most dangerous villains in their Rogues Gallery came to be. Spurred on by Matterhorn and molded by the Mane-iac, this new villain is unlike anypony Twilight knows how they came to be opposing her.
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Wow!!! This was great. I loved every second of it. I'm kinda sad that this is a one-shot because I want to know what Twilight did to Pinkie Pie for lying to her. Great job!!!!
Great story, this definitely deserve a like.
I just hope that I will find another story about the power ponies this good, but I highly doubt it.
This is Awesome, better then awesome but I don't know what's better than awesome.Omc Omc Omc, yay*Screams*
Okay, time for a review
The story itself is pretty neat, and I do like the creativity used in building the OCs for this work. The theory that Matterhorn uses an artificial unicorn horn was pleasantly unexpected, and I really like VINCENT as well. The story progresses smoothly, and I don't have a whole lot against it. There were a few hiccups I had to figure out on my own because of the grammar, but it wasn't too hard.
That being said, the single-most problem I have with this story is Twilight herself. The problem started the moment she became Matterhorn, and ended right when she left the comic. So, pretty much, the entire time she spent as Matterhorn.
My problem is that, while Twilight certainly isn't perfect, she seems a little too easily angered by the other ponies, and it made me question whether I liked the portrayal of her character in this story or not. I've resolved to remain indifferent, so it wasn't too much of a turn-off for me, but it certainly didn't feel right. And maybe it's just me. But I will openly admit that I felt like her having frozen that one guy and then bucking him right out the window without a second thought was exceptionally cold-hearted.
Beyond all that, it was still a fun little read, and I'd definitely recommend it.
Nice story! I really hope to see a sequel. It's rare to see an anthro fic so well written, usually the genre is overloaded of sex or gore. In this case I've found a good equilibrium between action, description and comedy and the veiled sexual allusions give a nice touch at the story.
4083746 Thank you. Now I do agree that the scene with the iceblock and the window was a bit of a cold-hearted moment for Twilight, but I will do my best to explain why.
Twilight hadn't expected the story to go on for so long. The last time she was Matterhorn, it was for a brief hour or so, maybe two. This felt like it went on for a number of days. Twilight has been known to want things to be over swiftly, not to mention that she gets a little uppity when things doesn't go her way. I also always felt that Twilight doesn't like it when someone snarks at her, like VINCENT did at her with every single one of his lines.
In addition, when people play games, they tend to change their personality, giving themselves freedom to do as they please without it affecting anyone in the real world. Now Twilight wouldn't normally do that but my proofreader didn't see any problems with it and I didn't notice myself.
Plus the guy was threatening her to hang her up like a salami and cut off pieces of her. I wouldn't be nice to him in her position.
4085893 I honestly do not expect myself to give this a sequel. I got a current story going on right now and I wanna finish that before I got off into more Power Ponies stuff. If I go into it. Also, my focus never was on the sec or gore, just the humor of the show itself set in an anthro style. And I felt it just wouldn't feel right without someone saying they weren't happy with an outfit revealing their big butt.
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I might be more willing to understand that all if the personality shift wasn't immediate. She literally got in like three solid lines of inquisition, and then immediately and constantly threatened to alter his ego.
Which, for me, didn't seem right. I actually found his lines to be funny, not annoying. I almost thought her relationship with VINCENT would be to the effect of Bruce Wayne and Alfred Pennyworth. ( the old cartoon I watched growing up, Alfred always had a quip to say, and Bruce typically reacted positively, sometimes with his own quip even. Granted, Bruce had negative reactions, but that was usually when the situation was super serious. )
While I suppose one might argue that Bruce and Alfred have known each other for years, while Twilight and VINCENT mere minutes, I might argue back that Twilight came into the comic with the intention to have some fun. I don't expect her to be all smiles and sunshine, but her fuse was just way too short for my tastes. Being a fast-thinking intellectual herself, I'm surprised she didn't first try turning it into a game of "last Laugh" before getting angered by him.
For me, as a whole, Twilight just seemed cold to the comic book world. Like she didn't care one way or the other, as long as she got to have fun. And, from all that I read, she didn't even enjoy herself there. Going off of this, I couldn't possibly imagine her picking up an enchanted novel ever again.
4086646 I will actually consider this if I ever make a sequel or something related.
In the world of your fic, are the comic characters real people with real lives and tell thoughts and real emotions? Like, in the works odd your Equestrian, are the charecters in the comics able to thin and feel just like Equestrians? Because if they are... the writers at Enchanted Comics are being morally wrong.
4086958 Could you do a sequel to this? Where Hobby and Matterhorn go to his home and make love. Based off the Batman comic scene with Batman and Catwoman.