Princess Luna: “We are heading for Appleloosa. We wish to meet with Chief Thunderhooves about affairs of state. Along with some ponies who are censures about a new wind turbine project. Also the town is opening a new cheery packing plant.”
I am Russell Dickson. I live and work in Maysville, KY with my family at Magee's Bakery. I like to write stories form time to time and thought I would try MLP
Princess Luna: “We are heading for Appleloosa. We wish to meet with Chief Thunderhooves about affairs of state. Along with some ponies who are censures about a new wind turbine project. Also the town is opening a new cheery packing plant.”
Dude. You need an editor.
I'm not going to lie, the grammar in this story is atrocious. However, it certainly does not deserve seven dislikes. It is a far cry better than a lot of the crap thrown up on this website. It isn't great, but it isn't bad either. Also, it's spelled "great", not "grate".
If you studied up a bit on grammar, then this story really could be
grategreat.I'm giving you a thumbs up for support of your creativity. You certainly have a good imagination, and this many dislikes does not do your creativity any good grace.
4044424 That one of the reason I took this up so that I could be better at spelling and grammar.
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*a editor
4164598 can you help me find one?
The pages are a bit short. I'd advise making it longer. Also, I agree with 8542Madness about the grammar and spelling. I MIGHT edit the story if I have time.
4187966 I will take all the help I can get.
4187966 What do you mean shot?
I mean the fact that the last chapter is short.
4198333 What would you recommend?
I'd recommend you at least make it a couple paragraphs or so.