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Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash create a plan in order to get their long-time crushes' attention, Rarity and Applejack, respectively, at a Pinkie Party, by pretending that they are together. This won't fail, or will it?
Attempt on TwiDash. Will be receiving any kind of reception.
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Hmmm...looks interesting.
The last part of the story, Rarity and AJ and Shy, I don't understand what bet they made.
" Hah, Rares, I told ya! Rainbow was going to be the one! "
Means what?
You left it incomplete because you're going to write more (I wouldn't mind) or you forgot?
Loved it by the way...
....Dash, Twilight... You do know that Applejack and Rarity is dating... Right?
4084745 I'll add some more details.
Awesome! I've never seen this concept work before now, and you pulled it off with ease! I really hope the incomplete tag is correct and there will be more...
... you sneaky little...
ME GUSTA
Awesome
I LOVE IT!!!
So there will be more, hopefully explaining the bet. This was cute, I liked it.
4086592 I shall do this, when I get the time.
4085828 Nah, don't be angry. 'Dashie's a universal term. Let's face it.
I don't see why I. Should be angry. As much as I'm starting to like twijack, I'm still a big Twidash fan
This went pretty well. You shouldn't sell yourself short. I'll probably be bad at shipping once I get to. In my Fic.
This was good, and I highly enjoyed this
Not bad, not bad at all.
It's fluffy and cute, that's all you need for a shipping story.
Of course there are other ways of writing shipping stories, but fluffy and cute always works.
4088494 Thanks for the rather open hearted feedback, dude.
This is cute, but I really recommend getting a proofreader or editor. There's quite a bit of awkward phrasing here and there, some in/on confusion and a couple of inanimate objects/places that are referred to as "who."
4089725 Oh sorry. I'll try to have one and fix those errors. Thanks for the feedback.
Loved It!!!
Incomplete? Unless you're actually going to take this in a unique direction, I think that tag should be complete, unless I'm totally misreading things here.
Either way, a nice little story. On the off chance that there is going to be more... Can't wait for more!
4101544 Well... I'm trying to find the time to write a small epilogue on how Rarity and Applejack made their plan.
If you think you are so bad at shipping? you should read my story's, now that's bad
Anyways this is interesting and i will be keeping taps on this. And no this is not bad, done correctly it has the potential to be rather good.
~Tobben
4104586 The problem is, that I ain't good with romance, and all of my other fics were humanized. That's the reason of my self-deprecation.
Ummmm is this done or not? the ending to this chapter was really rushed and seems like the end of the story?
Absolutely love it!
Good fic, nice storyline though I think the grammar and language used in the latter half needs abit of work. Started to feel abit rushed at the end. There are sentences that feel descriptive for the sake of it and as a result, only makes the story longer and less fluid. Still a great piece though
Eg. In this case, you seem to be forcing out a character instead of implying it. We all know that Fluttershy does not do well with crowds, so just the action of 'curling up' will do fine