• Member Since 20th Mar, 2013
  • offline last seen March 29th

Bpkyle777


I'm proud of my work, but... Writer's Block is the biggest and most terrifying problem any author has to face, especially alone. Sorry for inactivity lately.

T
Source

In the months following her return from Nightmare, Luna locked herself away in her room. Despite her best efforts, Celestia could not coax her sister outside in an effort to reintegrate her with the modern ponies. The Princess of the Sun was not willing to simply stand by and watch this time as Luna fell to ruin, but the younger alicorn was making things much harder than they needed to be, only raising the moon and mindlessly wandering the dreamscape in her self-imposed exile.

The eldest mare's list of ideas was nearly run dry when a strange Rough Collie suddenly appeared out of nowhere in the middle of the royal gardens, wounded. Celestia saw this as an opportunity to get her sister to make a new friend. Luna, however, does not especially care for canines, only seeing them as day-running, mindless mutts.

The only problem with that is... I'm not quite as mindless as she thinks I am.


A/N:
This is a test to see if I could do a non-romance story. My writer's block has been acting up something fierce, so I figured that maybe some work on a different story like this might help me.

EDIT 6/30/18: Progress on the rewrite of my other story, PP&F, has slowed down again, so I'm gonna see what I can do about this one since I can actually post these chapters as a write them, instead of writing the entire thing then posting chapters on a steady schedule.

Some inspiration was taken from A Feline's Point of View by Zman537, a wonderful little story that, if you've never heard of it, you should feel ashamed for not having read yet.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 29 )

Nice concept. I would love to see the stunning reveal of the dogs intelligence :D xD

6326697
Thanks! And don't worry, it'll get there.
But only after some *cough* innocent pranks *cough cough*

6326739 Muahahahahaahhahaha, the pranks must come first!

I already liked "A Feline's point of view" and I'm looking forward what you have planned for your story... maybe a little crossover with Felix? Would be interesting to see how they react to each other XD

I'm looking forward to more. When the next chapter satisfy me, I will give you a Fav and Thump Up.

6332160
Hmm... Maybe not in the main story, but perhaps a bonus chapter of some sort? :ajsmug:
Though, not without Zman's permission of course. :derpytongue2:

And thanks for the fav and thumbs! I really appreciate it!

6332267 A Bonus chapter is a good idea. Maybe a "Crossover Special" for reaching the 10 chapter mark or something like that ;)

And the Fav and Thump gives only when I like the next chapter. Don't get me wrong, I'm pretty sure I will give a Fav and Thump Up, but that's my (self-set) rules when I read a new story.

I am intrigued by this story, BAM liked and faved.

I'ma put this on my recommended stories!

After this Chapter I can only say... Please do more! I can't wait when Jenny tries to prove she is not a normal dog.

make your dreams come true.
Just,
DO IT!!!!!!!!!

Holy banana pudding, that hurts!

Gotta love anyone that uses non-standard curses. Especially when they avoid profanity. Makes them so much more hilarious! :rainbowlaugh:

This is a cute concept; I can't wait to watch it play out. It will be interesting to see if she ever slips up and her intelligence comes into question along with more back story for her and drama between the two. I am definitely watching for more!

She smiled as she raised a paw and booped Celestia on the nose. That is my sacred boop of thanks. I am forever grateful.

Well, I think it's safe to say that this story will be good.

Why she pretended to be an ordinary dog? It's extremely stupid and against her own interests! If she'd be recognised as creature with mind, she'll have much better treatment and much less problems in the future!

6446898
While I know my planning and methodology for wring this story is very rough, bare in mind that, to some extent, she still believes this to not be real and instead thinks she could have fun playing along with this "dream" or "fantasy" or whatever it is.

Also consider that aside from basic telepathy, she has no indication as to the extent of this world's magic, so she would be unaware of how much help these ponies could be at the moment. What if this were taking place in our world? Would a sentient dog receive proper assistance from any human if it let them know of their intelligence? Or would the human freak out or have it sent to scientists or exploited for money in some form or another?

Sure, we may be able to comfortably say that these ponies are not like that, but SHE doesn't know that. Better to err on the side of caution than risk unfortunate circumstances.

They say a canine is a pony’s best friend.

Canis Lupus Timberus...
Definitely a pony's best friend :trollestia:

Hmm. I like it. Although it could use a bit of editing, mostly for flow. But stuff that's easially fixed with an editor that's through and knows whet they're doing. I'd offer, but the stories I'm already editing are getting to be a bit much.

I'll be waiting to see how this goes, and hoping that you can in prove the flow/grammer hickups a bit.

6448510
Thanks! Mechanically, I feel like I do really well in terms of spelling or grammar for the most part, but I've known ever since my first story, "Past, Present, and Future," suddenly got popular that I really needed a proper editor, especially for flow, as that is something I know I need a fair amount of work on. That, and detail, and the prologue was my attempt at working on that aspect.

But I do really appreciate your comment. I know I get some nice ones every so often, but it's nice to have a down-to-earth, critical one here and there so I know what I need to work on. Thanks again!

MORE CHAPTERS :pinkiehappy:
you can't leave such a well written story to gather dust:fluttercry:

He's most likely just one of those write a few chapters and let it die people you know those people who never finish anything I think the latest episode of MLP sums it up you know Fluttershy brother I've come across quite a few stores I like but never get to finish because the Arthur Let It Die:ajbemused:

good story by the way I hope you finish it:twilightsmile:

7293189 I have a distinguished feeling that this is fatally wounded and is starting to slip away.

Your doing great, get back when ya feel like it yea hear' :ajsmug:

Is this dead? I only just found it, and I want more :D

MOAR CHAPTERS PLEASE!!!!!
um... If you don't mind
*grinning squee*

Login or register to comment