Drapney is a member of the Clairetti, an all grey coated, blond maned, and winged race known (and unknown) to posess the increadible power to destroy everything they touch. After many generations of honing and training, the Clairetti have learned to control this power, and become fierce and dreaded warriors. Drapney, being Derpy's sister, has spent many days and nights trying to find a way to bring Derpy back home. Derpy though, has lost memory of ever being with her family, and is long lost in the world of the Day.
The war between Day and Night seems to be endless, a constant battle to decide who shall reign supreme.
The Day Realm, consisting of now everything between the Crystal Empire to the boarder of the Bad Lands, is a realm of counterfeit happiness, and lies. The Day Realm was created to free the Ponies from a world of pain and misery, but at the cost of it all being a lie.
The land of Night, containing the lands beyond the Everfree forest, is a land of freedon and truth. Here, there are wars, there is pain, but it is reality. In this realm, the Ponies live true lives along with the pride of knowing that they have worked hard for everything they own. Here in the Lunar Republic, life is as it's always been, True, and Old.
Luna is pained at the fall of her sister, but stands tall for her subjects. Even though she doesn't want to wage war with Celestia, she must carry on for the lives of those who live within the Solar Empire. They are hurt, but they do not know it, even Celestia has fallen victim to her own realm.
I'm liking this, can't wait to see where it goes
Well... I'm afraid I'll need to see more of this... soon I hope. Take your time though... I would hate for you to rush and publish something less enjoyable because of your haste.
Just to let you all know, I'm nearly finished with the first actual chapter. Now my goal for the chapters I write is at least 2000 words each, so they'll be kind of short, unless I decide to make one that is much bigger. I'll try to produce one or two Chapters a Week, maybe. We'll just see what happens. I'm glad you guys like it.
Well... you misspelled Draighholl's name at the beginning of a particularly long paragraph... also, more please. I am fully intrigued by this story now and will happily wait for new chapters to be posted. I love the characterization of Luna and Nightmare Moon as being both the same and different and I like Drapney. Then the hint at Zecora was pretty clever. That is all!
Thanks for pointing out a misspelled word, I'll fix it right away. I highly appreciated the input you have given me, it's truly made my day
As for my next chapter, I won't have a chace to work on it this weekend, so it may take longer to produce. I do expect to have it done or nearly done by next Friday or Saturday depending on how long it is. As always, you should keep checking in just like any other story to see if something new does come up
Just some good news, Chapter 2 will be much, much longer than the previous two excerpts of text I have presented to you guys; mainly becuase I finaly have something to write extensively about, an event of sorts. I expect it to be longer than 4000 words, but I'm not entirly sure exactly how big it will be. It might seem cheezy when you read it though, because it's a rewrite of something that already happened, but I end up changing the outcome, and thus change the course of the entire story for the rest of the tale to unfold. It's taking longer than I had expected to do all of this, so I correctly apologise. I still expect to make my previous prediction to have it uploaded on the week end.
Hope you enjoy it.
Tagged for interest. I like the premise
I've really got to publish these chapters sooner. I usually upload them sometime near midnight, when nobody's around to read it when it's fresh on the front page. if you all could, without going too out of your way, try to publicize this story, but only if you find an genuine interest in the story. I would highly appreciate it if you guys did that for me
4043267 2,000 words is longer than most one-shots.
4094208 I guess, but the good stories have much, much bigger chapters. It shows that they are more creative, or long winded, or both. I try to make my chapters at least 2000 words, because if not, I don't feel like it was an effective chapter. But, anyway, we'll just see what happens, like I stated earlier. How are you liking the story?
4096122 Too awesome to be true. OR IS IT?
Anyways, Celestia is evil!
Ruler of evil! Tells lies to deny the devil.
4097328 Glad you like it
And yeah, Celestia is evil, but she has an almost justifiable reason to do what she does. Do you like the idea that Celestia is actually evil, because I think it's a pretty rare concept that no one really decides to go with.
4097449 Yes. I hear Celestia is----- So, not allowing someone to speak to defend themself when doing a rushed court and killing her is JUSTICE? Even thinking LOGICALY(?) THAT IS NOT JUSTICE!
I see Celestia is Evil related stories and Luna is Twilight's Mother type stories, but what about BOTH?! Or FLIPPED?! OR BOTH OF MY SUGGESTIONS!
4097780 Hmm, maybe
Four bits for a muffin!? This is highway robbery! I am disappointed in Pinkie... surely she has been corrupted entirely by the Day.
4100939 I thought four bits was a good price considering all the ingredients needed to make a muffin, but I see how it looks like a lot, and I almost agree.
Cool, me likey.
Cannot wait for next chapter.
Next chapter....... Please.
Yeah, so, the next couple of chapters are going to be mostly world building, as I go around and talk about some of the different Houses. If you want, I can make an optional chapter dedicated entirely to the Houses, that way I won't have to take space out of story writing, and you get to know in depth the different Houses, maybe even debate which one you would like to a part of
Oh god, gonna go to Discord so he would help find the Elements of
HarmonyChaos.Just gonna... go to the next story while I wait for next chapter.
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FlakrethNo, wait... Falkreath. Right? Yeah.4115302 Falkren
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Oh... I may be thinking Skyrim.
Ohwell.
I'm sorry Miss Nightmare Moon. we regret to inform you that Discord needs killin...
It's weird to think about ponies of any kind eating fish... but it is rather interesting to say the least... I will think on these carnivorous ponies. Before you say it I imagine that the Pegasi on the Day side probably do not eat fish because Celestia is crazy evil and won't let them have the highly nutritious Omega-3 fatty acids.
4115754 I justify the fish eating thing because the Pegasi have really small amounts of bird DNA, thus their wings. In that case, they would eat fish occasionally, but you're totally right about the Pegasi on the Day side.
4100988 Well part of it is that you never just make one muffin with all those ingredients. then another is wondering what the inherent value of the Bit is set at. Equestrian economy is not something that is easy to explain... I haven't even figured it out yet and I'm crazy enough to waste my time with such a foolish endeavor.
4115849 You didn't need to justify it to me, I kind of figured that bird DNA or something similar would be the case.
Poor Day ponies... never getting to enjoy a nice seafood dinner... I want some prawns right now... Or a nice piece of tuna.
4115935 Yeah, I do too
But then I decide to go back to writing.
4115993 Hey me too... as far as the writing thing goes... which kind of sucks, I have two incomplete stories that I really want to work on but my inspiration is pushing me toward an entirely new story... fortunately it's a one shot so it won't derail me for too long... I hope...
4116016 Well good luck to you.
I'm going to go check them out, I want to see what you've done.
4116059 Well thanks, admittedly I haven't done much, but I'm having fun and in my opinion having fun makes for far better writing.
Well, I forgot to put the Chapter number and title at the top of each chapter. I'm going to go edit that right now.
Wow, Those of the Voodoo are very, very powerful.
Dang....
And now we are getting to the exciting part! Discord gets to be scared of Nightmare Moon, Zecora gets to be scared of Pinkie, and Pinkie gets to time travel in order to inadvertently create a Pegasus super race! I am about ready to explode a second time.
Yes! Lyra is gonna help Twi! Or already did and Twilight just needs to free herself now... I am loving the representation of Lyra and I'm excited to see how this all plays out.
DAYUM BADASS!
I like the thought of Luna and Nightmare Moon being one being who live in peace, it's a very fresh take on their relationship. I also would like to point out one tiny, almost insignificant error, i noticed. At the very beginning of the scene between NM and Luna you said "Ruff time" it, again, is a tiny error and really doesn't matter, but i just wanted to point it out. Overall, i like it, keep up the good work! :D
it's throat and dusty.
it's come on or cum on.
it's named.
it was the ground because floor refers to the ground of an inside room.
actually, she cleared the sky in approximately 7.3 seconds by my calculations.
it's several not sever.