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I must warn Gaben...

Gaben Newell approves

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This comment section is now all about Gaben.

Happy Mother's Day!

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Yaaay! Happy Mother's Day!

4367339 Imma read this to my mom tomorrow!

Nice, very nice, yes.

So, if it's incomplete... What happens next?

Also, there are two Twilight Velvet incest fics in the feature box right now... Is this just a really weird trend?

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I can only assume you'll be needing that clip again

PLOT TWIST. Hahaha omg i did not expect that.

What happened? GABEN HAPPENED!

Sparkle incest story? yay!

Sparkle incest story written by Shakespearicles? OFUCKYES! :D

Liked, Fav'd, and ready to read!

4367479 Mother's Day tomorrow.
4367605 I suppose it kinda is my thing.
4367482 You are correct.
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"Shining, if you be good, and not tell anypony about this, and we can have one last 'special hug'. But not until NEXT Mother's Day!"

NEXT Mother's Day

Dang it! We had this great little wincest fic going, and you just had to ruin it with the whole "brother/sister is actually her father/mother" thing. One of the more irritating tropes in the fandom.

Big Brother, Biological Father Forever.

Bravo! Bravo!
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This was a very good clop fic.
Thanks a lot!

This was actually surprisingly good. The narrative voice was great, and that was what made the story, but the list of small errors and paragraph pacing was way confusing. There were a couple cases where there were very obvious spelling mistakes that could have been caught with a single editing sweep, and once where asterisks were used to display an action, which is the biggest sin of narrative.

Your voice as an author is brilliant. This story just lacks the polish that it needs to be something really good. It's there. It's just not quite there.

Note: opinions not based on sexual content or opinion on consensual foalcon.

[edit] Also, look up dialogue tags and use those in the future. It makes dialogue so much easier to read.

4368198 Thank you for your input. I'll give it another look over.

Now every time I see that damn acronym, I will always be reminded of this story.

10/10 would read again.

Ah yes, Mother's Day, the day when Twilight Velvet and Shining Armour clopfics rule the Featured Box!

Eh, well written, minor errors, and a bit of a twist... I think? Certainly not bad... but I can't say it's 'great' either.

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Yeah, you put it perfectly.

After that she barren.

Skip to 1:15

WAT A TWIST!

Big Brother, Biological Father Forever.

what

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4369000 Don't forget that Twilight Velvet with futa Twilight is still up there.

This story got an unusually good rating for an incestuous, foalcon clopfic, I'll have to read and probably enjoy it now

Hohohoho....wait does that mean Velvet is Twilight's 1/2 grandma?....and how old are the characters anyway? I mean one could say Shining is 12 (13 at the end) and Velvet is 28-30

I had wondered why no mention of Twilight and because the show never says how old the characters are I just always assumed Shining was like 2 or 3 years alder for some reason? Anyways I guessed the ending as soon as I read he never pulled out of his mom. But even though I saw it a hundread miles away I still liked it.

I think you would do well to write a story about Appleblooms origins next . . .

what intrigues me the most is that this story is tagged "incomplete" so maybe in the future we get a special chapter of Shinning celebrating a very special mother´s day

4369492 or she/he forgot

Welp, I'm just gonna go over to the corner and cry myself to sleep, thank you very much.

4369629 I'm torn between whether that was an unironic plead or a sarcastic growl. Either way was funny.

Also, why are there stairs in that house? I thought the Shakespearicles way was to rocket jump to the second floor[!]

this... this is my new canon

4369284 I'll add that.
4369338 I think it's been done: Have a Link
4369744 plea
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My only issue is that this ended so soon.
Will there be any more?

4369939 *Looks at story status.*
Incomplete

"Gee, I don't know."

4369946 Some people don't mark stories as complete right away, so I was just making sure.
That being said, you've made my night.
Truly, you are the strongest writer of our time.

Interesting plot, great build up, fantastic ending, and wait...wait...a creative twist on B.B.B.F.F?!?!
KA-BOOM! Best Shining Armor clopfic ever. In the name of the great movie "Hot Rod"....There's the flavor!
I give this 2 hooves up /) /)

dat ending gave me a head fuck more I DEMAND MORE

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I do believe the front picture is a bit...... forward and.... not very safe for work you may want to change it before someone reports it, and I promise you it will not be me

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They're just hugging

4370550 I'm very sure.

4369492 Well it's posted close to mothers day and real life next year it will be mothers day again and little Shinning is going to be one year older and a little bigger.

I wondered where Twilight Sparkle was... I totally saw this coming somehow.

4370550 It's a very special, adult, kind of hug, isn't it?

I challenge you to make a Tirak (whatever his name is) fanfiction clop fic. If you can make it somehow arousing You will be forever in my eyes the bestest clop fic ever. Cause that is one ugly monkey!