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AlliePastel


To be continued...

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A month after the events of "Pattycakes 2" and Fluttershy is starting to see the effects of her experiments unravel. Likewise the decision Scootaloo made the faithful day during Fluttershy's game are starting to catch up to her and grief is approaching fast on her mind.

This story is based in part by the series original author:
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Pegacorn+Ondacob

Cover art done by: http://hourglass-sands.deviantart.com (FillyScoots42)

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 77 )

Not a bad continuation, but it seems like too much of a stretch to assume either Scootaloo or Fluttershy are having second thoughts about what they did to Rainbow Dash. Especially considering Fluttershy's jump in Pattycakes 2 into villan territory was really out of left field to begin with.

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The best way I can describe Fluttershy's reaction is just imagine taking care of somepony else your age. It might be a nice bounding experience at first but doing it weeks on end would grow tiring. :ajsmug:

*folds hooves*
Hmmm.... I'm going to have to see more before making an opinion.

Comment posted by Darkentrophy deleted Mar 2nd, 2014

Well, it seems that, in this story, finally, Pattycakes!Fluttershy and Pattycakes!Scootaloo have done like Alexander.

New drinking game: Take a shot for every new paragraph that starts with 'Fluttershy'.

Great! I'm glad you chose the ending where Scootaloo wins the game and is set free, instead of drinking that foalmula and is forced to be held hostage. Can't wait for more!

4024169 Any foal who'd try that would end up soaked before the story was half over :P

It was more or less scootaloo's fault for transforming rainbow into a baby not fluttershy's

Strawberries Fields Forever reference, eh? I don't know why, but when I noticed the reference, I aspected something bad happening.

Not that it seems so far.

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The next chapter will focus a little bit more with Rainbow Dash if that tells you anything... :ajsmug:

Comment posted by ARBPW deleted Mar 9th, 2014
Comment posted by ARBPW deleted Mar 9th, 2014

Well Scootaloo I haven't seen my real parents in 13 years

Rainbow Dash should really be a lot more angry with Fluttershy for what she did. Fluttershy basically tried to erase Rainbow Dash's personality, leaving her as a blank slate.

Scireanima

This sounds like a crasis between "scire" ("to be aware, to know,) and "anima" ("soul",) thus meaning "Aware/Knowing soul," if translated a bit freely.

Which is fitting, considered what it does.

That said, good chapter, awaiting next one.

I agree with SuperPinkBrony12, Rainbow should have been a lot more angry.

I'll also say it should have been more of a gradual change back, rather than all at once.

Comment posted by AlliePastel deleted Mar 16th, 2014

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You see, Fluttershy used the Foalmula potion as the base for the Scireanima potion. As you recall the Foalmula potion she made in Pattycakes 2 was instantaneous. So naturally I assumed it's counter drug would do the same! :twilightsmile:

:pinkiehappy: i like it good chapter

What's happening to rarity right now is she free or is she under the foalmula

hmm it feels like RD is planning something

Comment posted by bright foal deleted Mar 23rd, 2014

Loving the story, but the feels man the feels:fluttershyouch:

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Alright, so let me just give my two cents here! :twilightsheepish:

Dislikes:
1. I have an editor but he disappeared, I'm actually looking for another AB/DL author and if you could direct me to one I'd be really appreciative.
2. I'm aware of that whole simple sentence habit I have and I try to avoid it when I can.
3.The weird part of Fluttershy's rape-esc activities play into the story so just role with it.
4.My mistake (Thanks for pointing that out!)
5.It's implied that Scootaloo starts to assist Fluttershy.
6. I believe in either "Pattycakes 0" or "Pattycakes 1" it's mentioned that Fluttershy has the desire to take care of somepony else. Of course when she meets Scootaloo she'd obviously give up her obsession to meet the needs of the filly that actually needs her. There's also the element that Rainbow's month long regression could have taken a tole of her.

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Thanks for recognizing the effect I'm trying to portray in the characters! As the story progresses you'll see the story's "Pattycake" side come out more. That's all I'll say for now. Anyhow, thanks for the feedback! :twilightsmile:

I'm sorry Oliver, but I have to stop reading.

Don't get me wrong. Your stories are interesting.
But here's the one mane objection I have:

You're contradicting and undoing pretty much everything that was set up in the Pattycakes 0-2. I don't really see much in a series if the sequel undoes everything the others set up, instead of building off of the previous works.

Standalone, it's fine, I guess. But when I factor in the other stories... Pattycakes 3 just kills it for me. I may return sometime....

will there be a seqal? or whatever to this at one point I really enjoyed it :pinkiehappy::scootangel:

Man these characters are bipolar o.o

I like it! The first Pattycakess freaked me out. This has a more fluffy, soothing touch!

The story was ok, especially considering it was a sequel to a sequel, but the grammar gave me a headache..... But not bad. :unsuresweetie:

not bad



4197284 and i agree I want more :scootangel:

Comment posted by SudokuBrony deleted May 12th, 2014

"The midday air was refreshing; the wind blew across the glistening green grass shaking all plants attached to the earth. Emerging out of the semi-dense woods Fluttershy and Applebloom we caught admiring the beauty of Celestia’s great lands.

“Hey Rainbow Dash, do you ever think to yourself that there’s more to life than what we talk about?” Scootaloo said carefully avoiding a small wild flower with her step."

Umm what? :rainbowderp:

It was a nice story, to say the least. It made me think of acceptance and denial. Nice work!

9 out of 10. :yay:

4048546 In Scootaloo's defense, it WAS Fluttershy who concocted that curse. So technically, it was both of their faults. But, you do have a point.

Still trying to wrap my head around Rainbow's... "Personal actions...":rainbowderp::rainbowhuh:

This reminds me of my own life when I was 3 my parents got into a fight and got divorced. With their busy lifestyle they did not have time for me and sometimes abused me. Finally a neighbor noticed this called the child abuse hotline, and my parents were arrested and I went to a foster home.

You got the begining pretty wrong:ajbemused:

I'll give this story an 8/10 rank::derpyderp1:

...her mouth tasted of the foalmula she'd missed so much...

Um... A.) I don't think Fluttershy likes foalmula anymore. B.) Foalmula is tasteless. You might wanna look that over.

4094541 She's most likely free.

4037991 Foals shouldn't even be drinking alcohol to begin with.

I... Dont know how i feel about this. Like Angry, Confusion, and sadness wrapped in one weird ball.

YES A GOOD ENDING RD AND SCOOTS ARE OK

Comment posted by Wolffress deleted Apr 2nd, 2015
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