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hmmm awesome fanfic ^^ can't wait for more.
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Thanks! i shall keep brainstorming and making more chapters!
man, i wish i knew why people dislike my story. if they hadof told me i could work on improving
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Some people will hate your story just because it has "Rape" in it, but in this case it might be grammar to. Did you find that person to proof read for you?
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Agreed, this HAS potential, huge potential, but the grammer is whats bugging me
Hmm alright. Sorry for my huge error i created
4050862 Well I like the story so far
4045788 and hey Schorl
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hello
to all of those that are reading and or watching after this story i will be busy so it may take a little while to complete the next chapter. i have a LOT of work this week and other things that i cannot miss like the day your born in which case means i will have a lot of time to spend with family etc
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well happy birthday then. I can't wait to see what you come up with next. One word of advice, it might be nice to know what Cloudkicker did to get in trouble and perhaps who her slave was before she was enslaved herself., maybe have the two interact with each other. Just suggestions, don't feel like you have to do this.
Guess I'm following you, I'm also glad Mistress Schorl likes your story. I do hope to see more of this story ^_^
interesting
It was good, but about halfway through, you forgot a lot of capitalization, along with unusual paragraph breaks. You may want to go through and fix the many many errors that plague this fic.
Was she trying to free someone else' slave? In which case, she deserves this for stealing their property. If she was trying to free her own slave, I don't see what the big deal is, unless they were nervous about their secret getting out.
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First off. Sorry for the EXTREMELY LATE replys, ive been too busy to even get on.
As for your question, she tried to breakout another slave she didnot own. The first arc of equestria trainers society points it out as im attempting to keep this story in canon with the original. Im going to set this story to hiatos until i can finish other important tasks before going on to this story
Except some grammar errors the whole thing is pretty good.
I'm looking forward for the next chapt! :3