Twilight Sparkle, the protégé of Princess Celestia, visits Canterlot. She does not go to visit her mentor however, but rather to entertain herself with her secret obsession. Classical music.
A certain mare in the orchestra catches her eye, and has held it for a very long time. Today, she decides to meet her. For better or for worse.
A huge thank you to Auramane for the initial pre-reading, editing, pre-reading the improved chapter version, and still being an awesome person!
Most editing and help with dialogue was done by SubShock. Thanks pal!
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Awww, poor Twily, you're not ugly...
This was a nice read, and I actually kind of like Twi-Tavia.
There are two things though:
You wrote 'help' twice.
And then, do not put periods before 'said Twilight' (or something similar) when you write dialogue. Put commas.
Example:
Instead, do this:
Otherwise, good job!
twilight and octavia, my two favorite ponies... this I must read... soon.
Nice to finally have more Twitavia around here. Hope it finally catches on.
I wrote my own TwiTavia for some of the same reasons, and I can definitely appreciate the ship. Good show! Thumbs up for you.
I like Twi-tavia, I just wish there were more full-length stories for it instead of one-shots and cancelled-fics. Anyway, pretty good, and I can see why Twilight thinks herself ugly. Seriously, nearly 4 milkshakes and she was still hungry for dinner? Someones a fatty.
Reading this has turned my heart to mush. Its great.
Never enough TwiTavia in the world. Bravo.
4001663 Thanks for pointing those errors out. I can't believe I forgot about the comma before dialogue thing. Agh!
Glad you enjoyed the fic.
Any plans to take it further? Just finished reading it and... yeah... more would be lovely
The only way it could be better is if Luna was in it somehow, thus having my top three favorite ponies <3
Why is Twi's stomach growling at the end? She's been downing shakes like a madmare. Unless it's from discomfort from being so full, but then why is she hoping to hurry to dinner?
4005159 I'm sorry, but I have no plans to do so currently. I might come back to this story in the future to expand upon it if I get a solid idea on where to take it. The possibility shall always be there.
I liked it, but I think Twilight went on about being ugly far too much, it felt like you stretched so far that I couldn't take it seriously.
Great story hope you expand on it someday
Finally got around to reading this and it was a quite nice.
My only nitpick is that Twi felt a tad over dramatic when putting herself down.
4577859 Glad you enjoyed it!
It was supposed to be dramatic, but it might have been a little overboard I'll admit.
Great little story here.
Have a like! I do wish there was more twitavia out there, but this was a good one. A little on the dramatic side of romance, but that seems to be what you went for. Either way it was a nice story and it was good to see the happy ending.
Really though... How are Twilight and company not national celebrities after all they have done? Even after season three and such Twilight is still for the most part ignored. I can only guess this is simply because the writers don't want to tackle such issues or something. Anyways this was a good story.
4696086 Thanks for reading! I did want it to be a bit dramatic. I went a little overboard, but that was kind of intended for entertainment value.
As for them not being celebrities, the show kind of also portrays them as unknowns. When they went into Manehatten, in that episode with Coco in it, nobody there paid them any attention at all. I don't know why authors don't capitalize on it though, it has lots of story potential.
Wait... what? Twilight and Octavia? Omg omg omgggg ♡♥♡♥♡♥