The first thing I did after shutting the door to my new home was groan in pain. With the adrenaline from my fight already beginning to wear off, the pain I felt in my shoulder was worse than ever. In front of that crowd, I held it down. But now, I let it out.
Quickly tearing off my red tank top before it got anymore blood stained, I examined the wound. The gash couldn't have been more than four or five inches long, but the blood was still steadily seeping from it. I needed some bandages.
Pushing my door open, I briskly walk outside and quickly catch sight of the same pegasus who had spoken for the gang's former leader.
"Yo!" I exclaim, pointing at him with my right hand, "Mask pony! Yeah, you. C'mere!"
He trots over to me quickly, scratching the back of his neck with his hoof. "Okay, the boys and I aren't exactly sure what a cheeseburger is, but I'm sure I can find a pack of smokes around here. Also we've got a few mares around here who would probably more than happy to-" He stops suddenly, recognizing the pained look on my face then his eyes slowly moving to the blood beginning to seep through my fingertips.
"At this point... some bandages would be nice."
"Yeah, looks like you fucked up your arm pretty good there." He states. "Well, you're in luck. We've got a unicorn who more or less functions as our medic around here. I'll take you to her."
I follow him to one of the smaller buildings in the camp, where a dull green colored unicorn mare tends to my wounds.
"So..." I start, feeling like I should at least try to make conversation, "you got a name, mask pony?"
He looks a little surprised that I'm showing interest in him. He hesitates before pulling down the bandanna. His coat is a light brown, and his mane is slightly lighter than that of his coat. His eyes are a dull blue, but those don't catch my attention nearly as much as the knife scars running all the way up his fore hooves. It looks damn cool. Well, cool for a miniature talking horse, I suppose.
"Razor Blades." He replies, before raising one of his eyebrows. "You're that statue from canterlot gardens, aren't you?"
I can't help but crack a grin at his realization.
"What'd they call you?" He asks, pondering for a few seconds. "My parents took me there as a colt... something about being crazy... Insanity! That's it!"
I shoot him a deadpan look.
"But that can't be your real name, right?"
"Name's Vaas." I tell him. "Vaas Monte- Ah!" My words are cut off as the mare who was tending to my arm casts a wave of green magic over it, stinging me where my shoulder is cut and causing me to wince in pain.
I grab her by the mane with my good hand and bring her face inches from mine. "What... the fuck... did you just do?" I growl as her eyes fly wide open in fear.
"I- it- it was just a healing spell!" She stutters. "It sp- speeds up recovery and numbs pain. I'm sorry if it stung! I- I should have warned you."
Razor Blades clears his throat. "So, uh... Vaas. After you're finished getting patched up, I'll give you a tour of the facilities. How's that sound?"
I stop glaring at the mare and nod to him. She works easily twice as fast now, and I'm out of the building in a few minutes. In a few more, I'm in the clearing and Razor is pointing out the buildings and what purpose they serve.
"That's the armory." He says, gesturing to one of the smaller buildings. "It's not unusual to find some weapons in caravans we rob, so we store 'em in there. There's more than enough to arm all the ponies around here."
"And... how many are here and ready to fight?" I ask.
"I'm not sure, exactly." He ponders this for a few moments. "... Probably between eighty and one hundred ponies."
I grinned. I could have managed with far less, but that would require stealth. And honestly, I'm getting a little sick of sneaking around. I feel like blowing something up.
He pointed to a group of three larger buildings. "That's where most of us sleep. A group of us watch the camp during the night while the others rest."
I nod, motioning for him to continue.
"Alright, you've already seen the where the medic stays..." He trails off as we continue walking. "And this is the mess hall."
"The what?"
"The mess hall." He repeats as I raise an eyebrow. "Where we eat. Besides that, most other buildings are used for business, whatever that may be. We tend to cover a lot of professions around here."
"Speaking of eating, I'm... kinda starving."
"Oh, right. I'll tell somebody to bring something to your place."
I show my thanks with a grin before retiring to my house. It isn't long before I'm fed. Mostly fruit, but something's better than nothing. I unlace my boots before throwing myself on Bull's old bed. It isn't too soft, but for me, it's more than enough.
One thing I never though I'd miss while I was stoned was... sleeping.
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After waking up sometime around noon, I walk outside with a bounce in my step. When I reach the clearing in the middle of the camp, I gesture widely with my arms, catching the attention of several ponies.
"Everyone... pony, whatever." I pause in thought for a few seconds before screaming at the top of my lungs. "Can I have your attention?"
The crowd swells in size. Eventually, all the ponies in the camp have gathered around me, waiting to see what I have to say.
"For as long as any of you can remember... you have lived under the rule of the princess." A couple nod, but most just give me blank stares, unsure where I'm going with this. "But ask yourselves... What have the princesses ever done for you?" A murmur starts, ponies quietly asking each other the same question as me. "Nothing. That's what." A shocked silence follows.
"For as long as any of you can remember... your rulers have given you nothing." I hang my head, as If I feel sorry for them, before raising it, a small grin on my face. "But today, I'm going to offer all of you a way to change that." They stare expectantly at me. I've got them right where I want them.
"All of you..." I gesture to the entire crowd. "Can show the princesses how little power they actually hold." I raise my voice. "We can pillage Ponyville! The little town will fall at your hooves! From there, we take Canterlot! Then we take all of Equestria!"
They gaze at me, stunned. I sigh. "Aren't you tired of being bandits? You could be kings! Queens! Each of you could have your own castle!" This gets them excited.
"For as long as you can remember, Celestia has enslaved the minds and bodies of ponies just like you. Our swords will not stop until until the princesses fall to their knees!" The crowd roars as I scream. "I AM VAAS MONTENEGRO, AND I WILL LEAD YOU TO GLORY!"
I spread my arms wide.
"TODAY, PONYVILLE! TOMORROW, EQUESTRIA!"
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We hid in the foliage around the edge of the forest. The town in easily visible the distance.
I turn to Razor Blades, he's beside me, a pair of knives in his hooves. "They're all clear on the plan, yeah?"
"They should be." He answers. "You explained it three times. You walk in front, everypony else follows behind you. We don't attack until you give the signal. During the attack, everypony's free to kill, steal, rape... pretty much whatever they want as long as they don't harm these six ponies without your permission."
He holds up an old flyer for the grand galloping gala, pointing to the six mares in one of the pictures.
"Oh, and no fires." He adds.
I nod. "Good."
I begin walking out of the bushes, gun unholstered, knife unsheathed. The other ponies slowly fall in behind me. The weapons they carry vary. Everything from curved swords to heavy war hammers. Most are stallions, but there's a few mares thrown into the mix as well. Their colors vary as well, but they all have on thing in common. They all wear red. Some have red vests, others have red bandanas over their mouths or over their foreheads. A few simply have red wristbands.
It must have been quite the sight, an alien creature with a huge allied force of natives dressed like him, simply marching to wherever he told them to go. We walked like this for a little while, until I saw what appeared to be a small cottage on the outskirts of the town.
I motioned for the group to stop. "Stay here for a second. If you hear anything loud, come get me."
If I was lucky enough to have guessed to who lived here, I'd easily get one of the ponies I was searching for.
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Rainbow dash sighed, holding her bruised hoof close.
"I'm so sorry Mr. Deer kicked you, Dashie!" The yellow coated pegasus exclaimed. "He's normally very nice."
The two friends were currently sitting in front of Fluttershy's cottage. Rainbow Dash had decided to stay the night and continue to help her friend take care of her animals, but the job seemed to get more and more dangerous as they day went on.
"It's no big deal." Rainbow Dash replied. "I'm just happy that it wasn't the bear who managed to hit me."
Fluttershy's face suddenly brightened. "I know! I left some lemonade in the backyard. I'll go get some for you."
The cyan pony attempted to get up, but her friend quickly held a hoof on her shoulder. "You just stay right here and relax. I'll be back before you notice."
She sat back on her haunches with a huff as Fluttershy happily glided away. So far, there had been no sign of this insanity guy, but it was always fun to hang out with her friend. The two didn't really have that much on common but that didn't mean she-
Wait. What was that noise?
She could've sworn she had heard, some sort of muffled sound. Like... yelps. After debating for a few seconds, she decided to go around back and check it out.
She stopped immediately when she rounded the corner and saw the scene before her.
A tall, bipedal figure with a mowhawk and freaky dark circles around his eyes was currently holding her friend off of the ground, his paw covering her mouth as he held her face inches from his and spoke very intensely.
"You!" Rainbow dash growled, her eyes narrowing into angry slits.
He turned to face her, seeming a bit surprised. When his eyes focused on her, he broke into a grin. A grin with sharp teeth.
"Me." He answered. His voice didn't sound like any pony's she had heard. It was weird and scratchy.
"You're going back to Canterlot Gardens, freak."
He let out a quiet chuckle in response.
"Put my friend down. Now."
He responded to this by dropping Fluttershy on the ground, roughly. Then, as she attempted to get up, a boot collided with the base of her skull, hard.
Rainbow's eyes flew wide open as her friend slumped to the ground. Vision turning red, she let loose a scream of rage and flew at the creature, hooves outstretched.
BANG!
She wasn't quite sure what happened next. One second she was flying, then there was a loud noise, then all she could concentrate on was the pain that tore through her right wing. This caused her to lose altitude, hit the ground, and skid a good ten feet before coming to a rest, vision swimming. She was vaguely aware that someone was speaking, although she couldn't quite make out what they were saying.
"... Take blue bitch... hideout..." She strained her ears. "The yellow... too."
She felt two pairs of strong hooves haul her up roughly before her vision faded to black.
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Twilight Sparkle was quickly pulled out of her library by Rarity. The white unicorn was eager to show her friend a new line she was working on, and maybe get some constructive criticism.
"Rarity, hold on a second." Twilight said, stopping and pointing with her hoof. "I think something is going on in town square."
It was true. A large group of ponies had gathered in the centre of town. Pushing through the crowd, the two friends quickly saw what was causing all the fuss.
A group of about twenty royal guards had arrived in Ponyville. What caught Twilight's eye, however, was not the guards, but who led them. Standing in front of his soldiers, was a white unicorn with a blue mane. Unlike the other guards, he wore no helmet and his armor was much fancier than that of those he commanded.
"Shining Armor? Is that you?" Twilight asked, having made her way to the front of the crowd.
The commander made a double take upon seeing the lavender unicorn. When he recognized her, though, his face immediately brightened.
"Twily!" He exclaimed, motioning for her to follow him. As she started walking, he nodded to a pair of stallions, who immediately began reassuring the crowd that everything was going to be fine.
"What are you doing here?" She asked when they managed to make it out of the circle and stood on the edge, where there was a comfortable absence of ponies.
"The guard isn't supposed to show up for at least two more days!" She exclaimed. "And I never expected you to be here, of all ponies. Aren't you really important?"
"It's not like I'm the captain." He tittered. "Yet."
"But still, what's with the early arrival?" She asked, eyebrow raised.
"Well, I convinced the princess to send us early while she finished combing the city. She's not leaving a single stone unturned." His tone turned serious. "With how unpredictable this guy is supposed to be, she thinks he's trying to bait her into leaving the city undefended."
Twilight nodded. "That makes sense."
A small smile grew on his face. "Besides, what kind of brother would I be if I didn't protect my little sister?" He reached out a hoof and ruffled her hair.
The purple mare swatted it away, laughing. "I don't need protecting! Do I really need to remind you of Discord? Or Night-"
BANG!
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God damn, I'm a good shot. First, I hit that rainbow bitch right in the wing as she was flying at break-neck speed towards me, now I hit this guard straight in the neck. The purple one reacts pretty much exactly how I expected her to. She jumps at first, when she notices her brother choking on his own blood, she collapses on him with her hooves over the bullet hole in his neck. She's trying to stop the bleeding.
That's cute.
Walking up to her, I kick her swiftly below the ribs and laugh as she gasps for breath. Then, I place my boot on the side of her head, forcing her to stare into his eyes.
"Do you see this, hermana?" I growl at her. "You probably think I did this, thinking I'm the bad guy, thinking- thinking I'm just some evil fuck who just kills stuff for no reason."
This guy. I swear, I've never seen anyone choke for this long. He's a fighter.
"But the thing is... the thing is, Celestia aimed this gun." I wave my pistol in front of her eyes briefly as tears steam down her face. "I just pulled the trigger."
Finally, the guard dies. As the life leaves him, I see her horn flare to life and fill with energy to do some sort of teleporting spell or something.
That's quickly stopped as I bring the butt of my pistol down on her head.
Looking up, I see that my ponies moved in as soon as I fired. By the look of it, they took the guards completely by surprise. We've lost very few, and not a single royal guard is standing. Meanwhile, all the little civilian ponies run around the streets in terror. A few of mine are still looting the bodies of the guards. I point at them, then to the feeing crowds.
"Don't just stand there! Go on! Enjoy yourselves!" With that, they disperse, all committing varying acts of sin.
Grabbing the purple unicorn by her mane, I drag her behind me as I set out in search of the three other ponies I was looking for as a small smile grows on my face.
An entire town to wreak havoc in. This is going to be fun.
I am sorry I ever doubted you. You have totally captured Vass and all his gory glory.
Hmm......I need more time to think about this before start to like it.
Haha ! Crazyniess at it finest !
OK, that's depressing as fuck from Twi's side. Meanwhile, Vaas the Arse is being completely mad, as expected.
Well... I can't really say that I was ever too emotionally attached to Shining Armor anyway... even if it is sad...
You may want to add the sex tag if you are gonna add (implied) rape
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Ah, good idea! I'll do that right away, thanks.
Yes, you should read my stuff indeed. :D
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Shining Armor is dead.
A LoHAV story with no fucking around. Liked and faved.
I actually hope vass wins because honestly hes pretty god damned badass
Oi, if they harm my Octavia there'll be hell to pay!
"It wasn't that we just wanted to fly, we chose to fly, out of pure passion."
-Second Lieutenant Chastely.
Otherwise good chapter, bullet to the neck is gonna ruin anyone's day.
so fun i swear, more chapters!
though you should have shot of twi's horn. mabye when you get to the camp you can take away thier horns and wings(and applejacks legs) then shave 'em bald.
then you can rape 'em, repeatily.
Embrace you insanity and use it for more insane filled fun!
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Brilliant!
Good so far. Small mistake in your Spanish though.
"Do you see this, hermano?"
should be
"Do you see this, hermana?" Since Twilight is female.
This is one awesome chapter!
I'm loving the shit out of this guy.
Straight to the point, no pissing around. Kills who needs killing and move on, just my style.
... Am I the only one who noticed that he killed Shining off the same way that he killed off Grant. Which would turn Twilight into Jason... Or am I just over thinking this.
GREAT STORY BY THE WAY!!!!!!
4332811 Oh my God, yeah. I didn't notice that
Oooh, this is going well!
And that white bastard is dead!
I'm very pleased!
Now I wonder, what will be Cadence's reaction?
(I kinda want her to be Vaas' slave, hmm..... yepp.)
Well, continue!
-Zeph
Insanity at its finest!
Hit just got real and I like it.
I wonder what'll happen next though?
Anyway, good chapter and I can't wait for the next. :D
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Lol, it'd be pretty cool if Twilight had to go through the same things he did as well.
Becoming a monster in order to save Equestia, that itself would be an interesting story.
Good job on pointing that tid-bit out.
When fighting his ennemies, you wrote him well, never talking too much, but when he does, he yells and talk crazy shit.
When with allies, you keep him a little too tame. In the game, he's not giving death threats to his 'friends', but he keeps a very intimidating presence, and you better watch what you say when you're around him.
Try to recreate that when you write him.
He's mad, but in a very specific/scary way.
For his behavior towards his allies, watch at 3:40.
Also I saw a typo, where you wrote fluttershy instead of Fluttershy.
I need to play far cry 3 again
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Here's hoping we have Vaas talk to the girls about the definition of insanity...
Cheeseburgers. Haven't you seen the new episodes? Burgers and fast food are now canon.
watch out for Vaas he'll enslave your arse
You have balls dear author.. Yes you do..
Not many would kill Shining.. I'm proud.
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Actually, I've been a little behind on my watching of the show as of late.
i swear your doing an amazing job portraying Vass i keep seeing him saying this kinda stuff in the game so good job keep it up. /)
~ Techsol
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...............rubs eyes.........
i see three major issues here. A- shining armor not casting a shield around ponyville the moment he entered town. he can cast a shield of canterlot, a actual city. and he knows there is a murderous mosnter running about and his sister is in danger. it makes no damn sense that he wouldn't.
B- i see what you were doing there, but there is an enormous difference between the game and this. in the game the pc is compeltely vulnerable. he has no weapons, no combat training, nothing. however here twilight not only has combat experience, if mild, but she is far from helpless. she has the capacity to kill vaas in an instant. if she has the magical horsepower to lift an elephant size enemy, she could send a human flying with a flicker of her horn. i will admit i cannot say she would or would not respond with violence than fear, but she is capable of both and the question is which is more likely.
C- i will admit you characterize vaas well, yet you underwrite and underrepresented all the of the characters. that is not good writing. you cannot write vaas as competent and everyone else as incompetent. whether hsining armor not raising his shield, or the idea that vaas can hit something as fast as rainbow dash with any accuracy. it would have been better if he threatened fluttershy, thus taking advantage of her element, than him suddenly having the ksills od Deadshot.
largely my biggest issue is that i an incapable of seeing vaas as ANYTHING resembling a threat. discord was turned to stone because he was too powerful to bind or just kill.
io know what you might be thinking. you are tkaing into account we never se her defeting villains. the problem with that is she has ruled a kingdom that is in a world chock full of monsters, demons, and tyrants and she sitll stands strong today. a mishap with a surprise changeling attack and a plant that had stolen a power far beyond her own are not significant considering her track record.
put simply i think you are missing na oppurtunity. celestia and luna are too powerful to kill or even begin to hurt. basically him beatin either or both princesses has the logical possibility of the joker killing a green lantern or doctor fate. and likely celestia would have had a millenium of experience and know how to disable a hostage situation. like teleporting the victims away, casting a shield around them, or showing just how powerful she really is and scaring the bleeding FUCK out of people. and it is actually more intelligent and safer to presume she has that capacity than to say just becase we don't see her do it that it is impossible. that owuld make criticism to every spells tiwlight has done. she learned from celestia after all.
put basically you are missing the oppurtunity to flip the game on its head. in farcry you play as something of a lone wolf against a superior organization, which vaas is part of. here vaas is a lone wolf set up against a norganization even more powreful the the pc in farcry. basically he should be acting like a guerrila, attacking from the shadows and hiding, knowing full that if either regal sister shows up he is dead in seconds, cause that is accurrate.
argue what you will about how much the ponies themselves could match a human, though you would likely lose every time logically, but the alicorns are beyond human without question.
4332371 ...........it is fucking around. shining would have set up a hsield moment he arrived in ponyville. so yes it is.
I'm loving this story so far!
The "at" in there, I don't think it's meant to be there.
You forgot to capitalize Fluttershy's name.
I don't have much to say about the story, except that shit is gonna hit the fan. I suppose I could have imagined this happening, you know, since Vaas is quite accurately described as the embodiment of insanity. Still, it may just be me, but I'm not going to like imagining what the carnage will look like. But my brain has a mind of its own.
This is what it has come up with:
-50% of Ponyville's population, at the very least, are casualties.
-Of those, only 30% are fatalities.
-70%+ of male casualties are fatalities.
-Only around 5% of female casualties are fatalities.
-All the rest of those casualties are taken prisoner.
-Of those that made it out, 10% make a beeline for Canterlot or the nearest guard post, 20% go for Fluttershy's house, and 70% run to Sweet Apple Acres.
-Those that went to Fluttershy's cottage scatter when they see what happened. It doesn't matter where, just anywhere that's away from Ponyville.
-Those that go to Sweet Apple Acres are sent hurrying out of town with a bit of food, with Vaas's goons hot on their tails.
-There are no foal casualties: they are the first to make it out. However, 100% of elders are casualties.
As for the surviving Mane 3...
-Applejack makes a stand at Sweet Apple Acres. She sends Applebloom and Granny Smith away, while Big Mac stays behind.
-Rarity runs towards Carousel Boutique as soon as Ponyville is attacked. She orders Sweetie Belle to run.
-Pinkie Pie, at Sweet Apple Acres, does...something.
I think that is all it came up with. Strange, huh?
This story is amazing!!! I like the way your portaying Vaas so far. And I love the fact that you killed off Shining Armor so early. So far I don't see the issues other people are seeing, like Shinings sheild. It really depends on how long he's been in Ponyville for me. You don't immidiatly set up a defense when you get somewhere. That tends to cause panic with the civilians. Anyway, before I start ranting over other flawed Issues people are pointing out, I just want to say keep doing what your doing. Because this story is awesome!!
That was awesome!
Great chapter! I can't wait for moar.
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Look, dude.
I appreciate what you're trying to do here, but I'm going to write the story my way.
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4337115 shurs. all i can say is that a character is only as great as the character that antagonizes him. if you only write vaas competently and not making the other character equally if not more so dangerous or competent, then it will reduce the impact of his victories and even his defeat. one thing for shining to not set up a barrier and get shot, which is out of his character and makes no sense. another for him to set up a barrier and vaas figuring out how to get past it. that way it shows vaas overcoming an actual challenge than shooting a character written to be a bit of an idiot.
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