Sweetie's Aromatic Aspirations

multiple bronies

multiple bronies #1 · Feb 26th, 2014 · 13 · 1 ·

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i don't know what I just read, but it creeped me out and made me laugh at the same time.

Hazy Answer

Hazy Answer #2 · Feb 26th, 2014 · 8 · ·

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Does this really need the mature tag? It was bizarre (in a good way), but I would have thought the teen rating would be enough.

tomer3392

tomer3392 #3 · Feb 26th, 2014 · 5 · ·

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4004874 Your avatar pic, is perfect for this story cover art.

Nataniel

Nataniel #4 · Feb 26th, 2014 · 3 · ·

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Your stomach growled, not even having breakfast yet for the long day ahead.

Well, I guess I can eat these here mares.

cue sexytimes music

Brother Roga

Brother Roga #5 · Feb 26th, 2014 · 2 · ·

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Oh boy...

And this isn't continuing? Jeesh! This should have at least one more chapter!

fire flash

fire flash #6 · Feb 28th, 2014 · · ·

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ok kinda random but it was funny
it definitely needs at least one more chapter

poditom199

poditom199 #7 · Mar 2nd, 2014 · · 1 ·

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WTF?

Vixavior

Vixavior #8 · Mar 2nd, 2014 · 3 · 1 ·

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Well, that's a thing I guess

This is one of those stories that I'm happy with, but pinpointing the exact reasons was hard. Strictly as a reader, this is not my usual fare, so I was apprehensive about the whole thing going in. It's certainly up there on the 'I'm not sure if I need a shower or cigarette' style stories. Maybe it's because I've been compiling all of your stories into one crazy universe, but between that and the build up, the payoff was both delightfully comedic and satisfying.

I like the dynamic camaraderie and this mystifying (but welcome) dual relationship between the mare-pair. There's trust between the two that supports a strong foil. There's a pointed possessiveness and youthful irreverence that comes across strongly with Sweetie. It's a good fit given that Fluttershy really seems like the best pony to keep these antics out of the limelight and kowtow to Sweetie's possessive traits. Basically, it's a chemistry that works.

I love the walk through in particular. On the surface it's Cutie Mark Crusader curator material, but underneath it's a great use of a sympathetic literary surrogate. After all, I have no idea about it, Fluttershy doesn't either, my guess is that a fair number of readers are in the same boat. So the reader experiences the material objectively, while still getting to side with the 'you' in the story regarding how all of this would appear to a person walking in on the situation. It's something along the lines of creating a bridge while maintaining plausible deniability which I appreciate.

Now, as a personal point: this is about the only format of story that could get me even vaguely curious enough to give the topic a chance. A second person story with the focus shifted from 'you' to some other character gave me a nice degree of versatility in accepting the premise of the story as something I would even be involved with. By removing that choice to participate, it removes the awkwardness of condoning the behavior. But more importantly, the subject reverts to the second person viewpoint it's also a whole lot less uncomfortable than associating the same olfactory senses with, say, Hoity Toity/Big Mac/etc.

Anyway, thanks a ton for writing this up Hand-Made! It's tremendously amusing, entertaining, and... enlightening