Pinkie stuck on earth

Pinkie pie breaks through my T.V and get stuck on earth and somehow I end up trying to find a way back to Equestria for my least favorite pony

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Phantom240

Phantom240 #1 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

Oh my god, what did I just read? Did ANYONE proofread that beforehand? Is English even your native language? Though I always love humans in Equestria or ponies on Earth, this story is just riddled with bad grammar and mechanics.

Human hybrid

Human hybrid #2 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

850485
No one proof read I just writing a whole lot of fictions until I get one right so expect alot of nonsense from me

Marine Magic

Marine Magic #3 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

Good story but I have to agree with Phantom240 about the grammar

Human hybrid

Human hybrid #4 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

850789
I didn't read it yet so I don't know what you mean

Ecthelion_Yuda

Ecthelion_Yuda #5 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

If I might make a suggestion, one of the first things you should do on this site is get a proofreader. There are even groups on this site dedicated to proof reading and finding people who are willing to proofread for you. Either that or you can ask a friend or family member to read over it, just to make sure that the spelling and grammar are up to scratch. Poor spelling and grammar are heinous crimes among many bronies here, so for the sake of your stories I recommend it.

That said, this story does have real promise. I always like stories about Pinkie breaking the fourth wall in dramatic circumstances, so once you patch up the spelling and grammar, I can see this story becoming pretty popular.

arandompenguin

arandompenguin #6 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

850836
You haven't read it yet? Are you referring to your own fiction? I usually don't mind if the grammar is bad or whatever, as long as they actually try to fix the mistakes but not reading your own story before submitting it is just plain lazy...

terrycloth

terrycloth #7 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

850485 I think you're exaggerating a tad? There's lots of mistakes, but they're things like missing commas and capitalization and typos, not ESL stuff.

Human hybrid

Human hybrid #8 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

851042

I typed this off the top of my head so there's really no thinking

851113
Only a tad

arandompenguin

arandompenguin #9 · Jul 3rd, 2012 · · ·

851155
I write off the top of my head too, I'm not saying you don't think about your work, but since you're going to release it into public the least you can do is actually read through your own work and look for obvious errors, if you can't be bothered to look at it, what makes you think others will be?

jwolfe