Before her banishment, Luna established a colony in the hope that it would reinvigorate the broken kingdom. Dozens of orphans disappeared off the streets, not missed by most. Though Princess Celestia searched Kingdom of Equestria for decades, the Children of the Night were never found.
A thousand years later in the small town of Ponyville, Scootaloo receives a visitor carrying a grim message. What starts off as a journey to help a dear friend quickly becomes tangled in a conflict that has been brewing since before the rise of Nightmare Moon. These are histories not archived in any marble library in Canterlot. These are stories of seafarers and inkeepers, of orphans and griffins, and of an ancient race that Equestria has long tried to ignore.
Based on the Children of the Night music video by Duo Cartoonist.
Pre-reader: TheGreatEater
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Beautiful also.
Thanks. Hope I can keep up this new story momentum.
Please keep it up...I really liked it...
Interesting story so far. Hope to see future chapters up soon.
4285284 Thanks. I'm trying to maintain a regular update schedule as much as possible. Glad you like the story.
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well that was intestine real fast
Shit about to hit the fan real quick x.x, I really like the gryphon family xD
This fic needs more views, it is good and the story is good!
4697128 Thanks for the comment. Glad you liked it
That cliff hanger!
4820541 Originally this chapter was supposed to cover everything up to the next morning, but then l realized that would make this chapter almost as long as the last one. I think this is a good place to stop for this week.
i love the end with Luna , even if she was a bit cold or un-forthcoming. She still cares a lot and would protect them in her own way
I was thinking about doing the exact same thing.
Hey you try and eat me then all bets are off.
5009905 Usually it's not a bad policy, but in this case you just made it angry.
And you won't like this thing when it's angry.
A beautiful ending if not somewhat creepy at the end (hope Iron Will keeps a tab on his goats)
I still say that the Thunderbird has nothing to complain about.
She tried to feed two foals to her chicks and ended up losing one of the chicks because of it...I say lesson learned.
Don't want to lose a chick then don't feast on foals.
Took all night, but I finally finished reading this fic.
The first chapter has some major problems with telling instead of showing, but it's only really in the first chapter. It gets a lot better.
The characters are all fairly convincing and well-written, and I enjoyed the griffin family quite a lot. It's clear early on that we don't know everything that's going on, which can work for or against the story, depending on the reader. I like a bit of mystery, even if we're not given nearly enough clues to work it out on our own.
Even though it didn't really hook me in or make me feel compelled to keep reading, it was still a good read.
A decent adventure, with some good world-building.
5674118 You read it all in one night?
Whatever made you do that?
Thanks for the comment. Because this took so long to write, I think my writing style changed at least a little from beginning to end, and hopefully for the better.
I'm glad you like the griffins. They were really fun to write. Grace and Gina were my favorites, along with the Master. I also liked Cabbage, believe it or not.
For now this story is finished, but maybe in a few months I'll come back to it and smooth out the kinks. This is a first draft, so everything you see was self-edited for grammar and syntax only, and I haven't gone back much since the time of publishing. I'm pretty happy with the overall plot, but there's still a lot of room to play. Like you said there are some details that come too early or too late, and some details that didn't really come through. But I find it's easier to polish a story if the story exists in the first place.
Thanks for reading!
5673109 To be fair foals don't look all that dangerous, and Rain was sick. Also, she's a bird of prey with a 10m wingspan and can move more clouds than a whole weather team. And she shoots lightning. Who's gonna argue with that?
Um, I'm enjoying the story so far, but something in this chapter struck me as very off. You said Scootaloo and Rain were heading east to the coast, right? It said that a number of places... But then the sun set over the ocean! Are you having the Equestrian sun set in the east?
5683206 You see, if Saltlick is on a peninsula and there's a part of Horseshoe Bay that's really wide so you can't really tell the and then...
Nah, that's me getting east and west mixed up. Good catch.
5683206 I think it's because I'm so used to the West Coast. Those sunsets were really memorable for me, so I just associate that kind of sunset with the sea. Anyways, fixed.
Not good, not bad... It was sometimes hard to follow, but it was not bad 6/10... Even so, there is something I don't really understand... They really think they could take Equestria? Is not like Celestia is alone, Twilight and Candece are also Princesses. And Discord is on their side, even with a army of Alicorns they could not defeat him.
6029857 Not good not bad? I'll take it.
The way I see it, a war with Equestria would have been a close call. It would be a disaster, but if anyone could defeat Equestria it would be the colony. The colony has a larger combined population, by far the most advanced navy, better weapons and more alicorns (if they agree to cooperate). Sylvanocians are all but forgotten in Equestria, so there won't be many defenses against their unique type of magic. Luna would feel conflicted, since it's her sister on one side and her children on the other, so she might refuse to take sides or even side with her children. The biggest threats would be Celestia and Twilight, but their power is not limitless.
Also, a few centuries earlier they fought from the east coast all the way to Canterlot once, so there's that precedence.
6031458 What about Discord? Is supossed to be "reformed" with just a snap of fingers, they could find themselves back, or the ships transformed in paper.
6031928 This was conceived before the whole Tirek thing. Before that, Discord's loyalty wasn't set in stone. And Dreamweaver is also kind of a magic-stealing megalomaniac with an army.
Also, you can't really plan for the embodiment of chaos. You just can't do that.
6039940 True, it was not in stone, but hurt equestria is hurt Fluttershy and that is not something Discord could very much like. They can't plan about Discord but they need to very well think that he could be a BIG problem
Ok this is going in a completely different direction than I thought it would
Holy shit
7741978 Wow, how did you dig up this thing?
Glad you're enjoying it though.
Though it took time to read due to working nights this story kept me captivated much like one of the other fimfictions I enjoy so much, past sins....you are a very talented writer.
Not the ending i expected, but surley it is a good one
So far this is interesting. Looking forward to seeing the rest
Hands down one of the best stories I've ever read.