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Mykneebescratchy


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As Twilight and her friends experience love and begin to find a groove to settle within in life, Celestia has to deal with her insecurities and a conflict begins to form on the horizons of Equestria. A strange new cult of ponies begins to arise, and they have malicious intentions as they attempt to burn Equestria to the ground. Can the Elements of Harmony stop something they can't shoot at, or will all of Equestria fall to ruin.
The story is only teen in case I go overboard or something, so as of yet there is no intense gore (maybe borderline gore), and if there ever is (intense gore that is) it won't be bad. Also as I develop this story more I realize that there may be sexual themes, however they will only be implied, but I am just letting you all know. This is a shipfic and it contains or will contain FlutterDash, RariJack and TwiLuna. So hopefully there will be no surprises.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 14 )

Just a suggestion from what I've seen so far; (The short and long descriptions, essentially.)
Good on you for actually writing a short description that sounds interesting. But... most people who click to any sort of fic prefer to(Generally, at least) find out a bit more about the fic itself. Yeah, what you added is nice to see towards the end of a description, but something about the story itself is what most people look for.

Anyway, I'll give this a read here in awhile. (Sorry if I sound like an :yay:. Just felt I'd suggest something that could potentially help out.)

Edit: Not my personal cuppa tea, but definitely not a bad story in any way.

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No worries, I am glad to get some feedback. I plan to change the long description once I get a bit more in depth with my planning. I just need to get my ideas all ironed out and then I shall make the long description just as interesting (if not more) as the short description.

Edit: Well I think I pretty much have it all straightened out now. And thank you, your comment got me inspired to do just that!

This seems promising.
I don't have a ton of stuff to critique, cuz I'm new as well, but hey, seems pretty solid, I hope this turns ourt well!
P.S. I have a little first fix of my own, read and review please?
Wish I was there,
-NAME REMOVED 007-

Good.But rushed.
Needs proofing and editing.

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Ya I really rushed to get this out before I got to busy. I plan to make slight changes and such once I get a bit more time.

I am glad that people are enjoying this! :pinkiehappy: Also I would like to thank everyone who has provided feedback! Cause it is really helpful to know where my writing needs some work, and how I could improve this story!

COOL whens the next chapter coming out? Cant wait read!:pinkiehappy:

The wind roars across the empty rampart that is the comments section. Alone, the author has no choice but to comment on his own story. :raritycry:
I just want to know what I am doing wrong and what I am doing right... but until then I shall traverse this wind torn plain... alone.

The night went on.

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I want this Fluttershy, but i want it now!!! :flutterrage: Man, Assertive Fluttershy is the Best Fluttershy!

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Ya, thats what I was going for! And I would have to agree, assertive Shy, is best Shy. Also thank you for taking the time to comment! :pinkiehappy:
Edit- Love that Zecora implication pic!

Really cute chapter! Also, i got i little error:

“How about we get up and make some breakfast Dashie, and then head to the market. I have to get Angle a reward for being a good bunny.”

Angel. Just that. But, good chapter. Give me some "awwwwwws!". I can't wait for the next!

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Thanks for pointing that out! I have fixed it up. Glad you are enjoying. :pinkiehappy:

And I'm still waiting for that one... And I never got it... :applecry:

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