This story is a sequel to Immoral Immortality
Every action has an equal and opposite reaction, and so when Princess Cadance gives birth to her firstborn foal, Skyla, another princess, Asher, also emerges. But Asher hails from the Changeling Kingdom and as such is used solely as a replacement while her fellow changelings kidnap the real princess. Asher goes about her life acting as a princess, and once she becomes a filly, she begins to realize that she was never meant to be a changeling. As a side effect of having a mother who switched from a pony to a changeling, Asher herself swings the other way around, wishing she could have Cadance and Shining as her real parents and that the scheme never happened. But before long, the royal couple finds out, and chaos might just ensue...
Sorry if this may have been done before, but I found out about a Changeling Princess only after writing this. So sue me. xD
Not bad. You might not want to reveal so much of the story in your synopsis, though. As well, the narrative progresses a little too quickly. But it's a good start.
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Okay, I can change the synopsis, then. I normally don't do things so rushed, but for some odd reason, I felt the need to.
i agree. it's moving quite fast and it lacks much...excitement? while i LOVE the idea theres not much detail in it. it's like watching a video in fast forward. sorry, i hate to be a critic. people hate me because it tell them how i feel
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Maybe it's because I tried writing it all in one night. I'll try to spread it out a bit more in later parts. Sorry about that, though.
I like this story! I'll be watching it.
Where does the comedy come in? So far, I can only see the adventure.
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I mean it more in a sense that it isn't a tragedy like its prequel. I'm using it in the more dramatic "happy ending" sense. I can put some comedic parts in there, though.
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Mm'kay. Whatever needs to be done.
Yeah, this was a tad overly complex. Shining also struck me as a bit out of character.
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Hence why it's not one of my prouder works.