Stomp

Big Macintosh arrives by train to the heart of Equestria with a produce delivery and high hopes of leaving with the heart of his special somepony; but prepared to leave empty hoofed if he has to.

Almost mindless Big Mac/Luna shipfic

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ponytrash

ponytrash #1 · Feb 20th, 2014 · · ·

I think it's interesting in the least. I'd gladly read more.

Bobby Dole

Bobby Dole #2 · Feb 21st, 2014 · · ·

I liked this. A very cute, but serious talk with a nice insight into Luna's own feelings of being a stranger in a world she once knew.

Other than the grammatical and spelling mistakes that were distracting ("...and he continued resumed his pace.") I enjoyed the way the story unfolded.

GivingSpider

GivingSpider #3 · Feb 21st, 2014 · 1 · ·

3974391 Thanks

3978589 probably quite a few fixes I need to make aside from the one mentioned
Thanks for pointing it out for me

Isaac The Red

Isaac The Red #4 · Feb 21st, 2014 · · ·

You got a decent dynamic going, Big Mac seems more the straight shooter with honesty at his core, so secret dating wouldn't work for him. Luna's unsure demeanor makes sense, especially with her still only being back for at most a few years. since her banishment. So keep up the good work, and lunaxmac will prevail! :D

You do need to proof read a little more though, grammar was kinda slapping me in the face sometimes.

GivingSpider

GivingSpider #5 · Feb 22nd, 2014 · · ·

3980698
Thanks for the feedback
And yeah...my grammar suffered in this one

Isaac The Red

Isaac The Red #6 · Feb 22nd, 2014 · · ·

3982952 Good story though, I like it so far. :3 just needs some polish.

Unkownbrony

Unkownbrony #7 · Feb 25th, 2014 · · ·

Great story now i have to read your other ones.

GivingSpider

GivingSpider #8 · Feb 25th, 2014 · · ·

3998938
Thanks

ThePianoMan

ThePianoMan #9 · Apr 4th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Usually I don't support stuff that goes against my head cannon, but this has changed my mind...

Not many can change my mind either.
So you know what...this story...
It's cool in my book: addin it to mah favs!

Excellent story. I always find the "classes of society stories" very entertaining.

Nanaki23

Nanaki23 #10 · Aug 1st, 2014 · · ·

Awesome! Also it takes the Noble loves the commoner theme very well and plays it straight but in such a way that it doesn't feel cliche, cheesy, or overdone! 5 out of 5 faved.

Traveling Soul