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DemonBrightSpirit


I dream of a man whose hopes never end.

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A devastating blaze sweeps through Ponyville, leaving desolation in its wake. Now the citizens of Ponyville are left to pick up the pieces of their shattered lives and find a way to move forward.

A special thanks to my proofreader, RaylanKrios.

Chapters (9)
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4045857
That's quite a bit of praise! You make me blush.

The teen rating is there for a lot of reasons. As for gore... Well, I'm hoping to get away with not using the tag, but it may be called for in later chapters. The romance kicks off next chapter, but you aren't getting any more spoilers than that. :raritywink: As for the adventure tag, that will slowly come about in the next few chapters.

As for sad and tragedy, well, sad might be good for a great deal of the chapters, but I'm not sure there will be enough to warrant the tag. I'll mull it over. Lastly, I don't want to give away too much by discussing the tragedy tag, so I'll leave it at that.

4129674
I'm relieved to hear that the characterizations were good. Applejack can be tough to write for, and the Apple accents are no easy task, either.

This tale never fails to impress - I honestly believe that you are one of the most underrated authors on this site. I really can't wait for the next chapter.

> In UNDER 10k words folder
> 10k words exactly
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I'll just leave this here....
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Wow that was intense! Oh no the Cakes and poor Rarity and Sweetie Belle!:fluttercry:

This is so awesome! I'm favouriting this! Awww poor Scootaloo, Rarity, Sweetie Belle, Applejack and the Cakes :fluttercry:

Yay Applejack's alright! The Apple family is portrayed exactly like how I think they act like. Can't wait for more! :twilightsmile:

I think Rarity, Sweetie Bell, Rainbow, and Scootaloo should move to Sweet Apple Acres during reconstructions so the three fillies will always be together and comfort one another. And Rarity needs to remember that her parents would have wanted her to save Sweetie more than them.:fluttercry:

Man, you really know how to write a dark story. This latest chapter almost made me crying. I'm looking forward on what the next chapters will bring. I wonder how Pinkie's affected by the Cakes death. And can Sweetie Bell accept that her parents are gone? Will Scootaloo survive (oh please don't let her die, my heart will break D:) and if so will she wake up or be in a coma? And how is Apple Bloom coping with the suffering of her friends and with the dead of Silver Spoon? I have to know what happens next and who exactly caused the fire. Please, do carry on, because this story's simply amazing!

Great story, you really make the reader fell the chaos and despair of the situation.:applecry:
really wanting to know what will happen to pinkie and the babies :pinkiesad2:
:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

I rarely go for Dark stories but this one managed to catch my interest. It feels harshly realistic and the writing is good.

This is the first Dark-tagged story I've upvoted in quite some time. Not bad, dude.

Quite an interesting and well written story. I hope to see more soon.

Laughter is miserable, Generosity is stuck in a tight spot, and Loyalty is worn thin and doubting herself... this is bad. I hope Twilight, Applejack, and Fluttershy can help their friends.:fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair:

Damn... if some villain wanted to break up the Elements of Harmony... they seem to have succeeded in at least causing strife among the group. But I can't wait for the arsonist to be found and brought to justice. I think Rarity in particular wants to GIVE them some pain until they can't take any more.

A good story thus far, the plot is interesting and easy to follow and your representation of the characters is on par. I shall be looking forward to reading this progress when it is updated.

Can I slap twilight sparkle for being a meany pants to the whole scootaloo and Rainbow situation?

Keep up the good work.

-Frost :pinkiesmile:

"If she kept this us". I think you meant to say "up"

Interesting story, here is hoping it gets updated someday.

I have to say it. "What in the Blue Blaze's?".

Awaiting future chapters.

I like this story. Really nice narrative you've built here. :twilightsmile:

Keep going. :pinkiehappy:

I'll just leave these here...

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A fitting soundtrack.

Hmmm, no mention of Tirek, so could this be a prelude to his return????

Intriguing. Though going by a comment of yours about a previous chapter starting the romance, then the talks where they now share a loss of parents... I'm suspecting the romance is RariJack. :trixieshiftright:

An excellent chapter, looking forward to more!

“I hope Twilight throws him in a dungeon and throws away the key.”

No, you snap a magic nullifying ring on him, chain him up in the center of town, and pass out baseball bats to everypony he hurt. And then you have Luna sic every bad dream she can find on him when he passes out so he never knows peace again.

I hope there is some good news soon, nothing seems to be going right for our heroes.

Its been a very long while. Is this in the dead chapter?

6441532 Not dead, but currently on the back burner, so to speak. I've been working on other things. However, I've cleared just about every other side project. I have one short story that's getting close to done. Once that is out of the way, only Inferno and HeartBeat will be left to finish. Hopefully I'll be able to devote more effort to this story at that point.

“Are you here to make mommy better?”
:raritycry:

I also find myself wondering if Spike is immune to smoke inhalation... the dragon in Dragonshy breathed out the stuff, so ash is probably not an issue, and carbon monooxide might not be. Shear lack of oxygen OTOH might be (perhaps even more so if he has an 'internal furnace')...

If he is resistant to smoke (and he definitely IS to fire) and Twilight kept him out of the action... that is going to sting her heart later.

Merciful Emperor... What could have caused this?

Sabotage?! whoever did this shall regret it!

What happened to Spike? No mention of him at all so far.........:pinkiegasp::twilightoops::raritystarry::flutterrage::ajbemused:

4129674 I agree, I have a few questions I'd liked answered...

This is great! Really, really intense!

Throne, you're just stacking up the feels!

God, it taking all my willpower not to burst out crying!

5113773 I agree, I'd also like to give whoever did this a piece of my mind...

You have definitely gotten me hooked!

:twilightoops: Spike what are you doing?
:moustache: He hurt Rarity he hurt Ponyville!
:applejackconfused: :fluttercry::pinkiesmile::derpytongue2: It's Spikezilla
:duck: I always liked him extra big, So powerful, so large, So fashionable.
:facehoof: If he was a dog I could sic em on him!:raritystarry:

An update, short but to the point. And a filly Sombra? I kind of like that.

Damn, Blue Blazes, his parents, and the whole cult are screwed up!!! Now, if his sister is just a scared filly brainwashed by the cult I hope Twilight can rehabilitate her.

6845125 I would be perfectly fine with this, it's not like fire magic is much good against Spikezilla.

This chapter has been sitting in my tracking forever, and I finally got around to it. Interesting developments. I like it. :3

My predictions: Blue Blazes' sister is againt the cult so Twilight ends up protecting her... but then the sister ends up backstabbing her...

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