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Zanem-Ji


Weird Lesbian. Military Pegasister. Founder of "Let's Make You Known!" Group. Lover of Video Games. Writer of Pony Words. Shazzam.

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It has been two years since Applejack died and Pinkie Pie took Applebloom in. She has done her best to raise the little filly, and has a true love for her, but the fact still remains;

Being a "Just found out we're related!" cousin, isn't the same as being an actual, closely bonded, sister...

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 18 )

please add more chapters to this story and i love it

Short and sweet, normally I prefer longer stories, but this one is quite exceptional.

...... These aren't tears.... They're liquid pride.... Or someone has onions....:applecry:

I smell a sequel or at least more chapters.

Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: A Broken Family And A New Cutie Mark
Grammar: 9/10 Nearly flawless
Pros:
*The "fight" between Apple Bloom and Pinkie Pie the emotions where spot on.
*The white chrysanthemum fits Apple Bloom's name perfectly.
Cons:
* Big Mac abandoning the farm... could have been expanded on... It just seems a bit ooc...
Notes Section:
I really had a hard time finding any cons to really talk about so you did a wonderful job with the story. I don't think you need to expand the story beyond a one shot
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story: The Last Keeper of Harmony

Do you even know what AiE is?

5520872 Yes, I do. And Idk what you're talking about, because I didn't add it into any "Anon" Groups I've been recently been encountering stories being put in the wrong groups on purpose, and without my permission. I'm still trying to figure out what's going on.

5520872 What does the writing in your avatar say?
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

5549135
"You gonna get Brainhorn'd"
I don't know what it means. A friend made it for me and I've just been using it.

5549135 Unfortunately, I can't because it's too short of a one-shot...

But thank you for thinking it was worth sending it in!! :pinkiehappy:

Memories of a passed loved one aren't a burden--rather, the burden is the pain held in them that layers sadness and pain over times that should be remembered with joy.

Fortunately, it looks like Apple Bloom will be willing to let Pinkie Pie teach her that.

This was an outstanding story. There are plenty of great one-shots, but emotionally intense one-shots that are this short are rather harder to find.

5663532 It makes me smile to know that you have found another one of my stories a delight to you! It's for readers like you, that I shall continue my best to produce more!! Thank you for you comment. :twilightsmile:

Finished reviewing story for the Goodfic bin: unfortunately, due to what I think is just the story trying too hard to make me sad, I'm rejecting it from the submissions folder.

Decision is here.

I'd love for this to get some kind of sequel detailing how the others reacted to Apple Bloom getting her cutie mark.

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