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pinkshadow369


Just someone trying his hand at writting. Laziest person I know. If anone actually ever likes what I read don't get to attached.

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What would happen if the anti-christ of all people, was sent to Equestria? Would they help him get over his tragic past? Or will his past cause the peaceful land to become a battlefield between him and his sins. With Equestria as the prize.
Hello everyone, this is my first story done on fimfiction. so be nice and like/favorite. Or not. For tags im gonna tell you some stuff here. it is an adventure. it is some slice of life. it does have comedy so don't worry. and at some moments it can get kind of dark.
Other than that im just anxious to finally get this started. ALSO! if anyone is interested in doing my cover art that would be great. You wouldn't believe the stuff I had to go through just to get nothing. So if anyone can help that be great.

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 29 )

Not bad in my opinion. I would like to see more.:derpytongue2:

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Thx. Updates every Sunday as long as I can help it.

sweet thanks for the info.

if the elements end up effecting him ill probably be disappointed because i think he would be too strong for them to effect him

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You'll see next Sunday. It's gonna be a long chapter.

This sounds like a crossover. Is it a crossover?

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I hope not. The idea was original by me. If it resembles a crossover than allow me to say it's not. I try to do my best at original work. I'll eventually be creating even more stories as soon as I get a cover art. But once again to answer your question, NO, this is not a cross over. I hope I have not sounded rude or offensive in anyway I'm just informing you.

im trying to figure out why he was so nice in the beginning then all of a sudden started being bad but still nice will that be explained too

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The reason why is because he wasn't fully antagonized. You'll see more reasons why shortly but over all he will dominantly be a bad character.

Interesting read. I just stumbled across your story and this first chapter is rather good. I found the fight scene difficult to keep track of however because you kept using he and the other guy. I'm looking forward to reading the rest and wish you the best of luck!

Hmmm where do I start? Good first chapter developed the plot and characters in a way that fits them. It was fast paced in the beginning and a little forced. And I get the feeling that lucifer after getting to know dinky would start to tone down the cursing. Few spelling mistakes here and there but again rooting for you across the Internet!

Another great chapter. Nothing of note to point out. U wonder what's gonna happen at the sleepover?!

Very funny chapter. Not as many grammatical and spelling errors as before so congrats on the improvement. While reading this I couldn't help but want to yell at Lucifer for scaring the kids like that with the meat. Again looking forward to finishing this tale!

Great chapter and fight scene!
Loved how you made an effort to change his personality with this scene~
“I always heard girls found men's ass to be cute, but this is taking it too far.” He thought to himself. And then he spoke his mind. “Why are you looking at my as-flank like that?
Found that hilarious! And what do u mean the next chapter is when it gets intense?!

And the plot thickens! It seemed to me like good writing when you had Lucifer going through the halls and interacting with the different ponies he came across. Especially the guard and how he questioned him with a controversy like that. Keep it up and stay strong!

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Thx. Nice to get some appreciation.

Well done! I have to say that chapter was a big step towards the finale of this piece and what a piece of art this has turned out to be! Lucife has progressed from a stubborn jerk to a man on a mission and I just love and can't wait until this story updates again! Keep up the good work!

Could use a teeny bit of editing, other than that the story seems good if slightly confusing and hard to follow at times.
You get half a crow in a barrel from me :pinkiecrazy:.

Comment posted by Imperium Bedlam deleted Jul 30th, 2014

Great story I recommend everypony to read it if they get the chance 10/10:rainbowlaugh:

Positivity reigns, I'll give it a read...

damn. whens the next chapter?

You...
must...
write...
more! :((((

Don't know if the author gets this but it's this Lucifer a Fallen Archangel like in religion or just the Anti-Christ?

Pretty good story so far. I'm sad that it's not the Archangel Lucifer but this Antichrist version seems to be alright. I hope you make the next chapter soon :twilightsmile:

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