Chapter 10: Agreed
“What?” her host’s voice echoed through the door. “Does it have to do with our imminent demise?”
“Yes, it does,” Nightmare Moon said. “You’ve faced something like this before, haven’t you?”
“I have,” Luna replied. “And you don’t stand a chance.” She sounded smug.
“Then you will die with me,” Nightmare Moon sighed. “Are you really going to be that stupid? The only chance either of us has is to fight it together.”
Luna harrumphed. “At least I’d be free of you.”
“And then what would happen to your human friends?” Nightmare Moon examined a mental hoof nonchalantly, despite the fact she didn’t actually have a mental hoof and even if she did, Luna couldn’t have seen it. It was a matter of bearing, and bearing affected voice. Everypony knew that.
Luna’s scrunched muzzle could be heard (again, despite the fact that she didn’t actually breathe; the mental realm was a strange construct at times) as she drew in a heavy breath and let it out. “Fine. How are we going to work this?”
“It’s already attacking my mind,” Nightmare Moon said. “I can hold it off for a little longer; while it’s preoccupied, burn its vessel. Then it will have to break off or reveal itself.”
Luna stiffened. “Kill the human?”
“There’s nothing left of his mind, Luna. He died when our assaulter used him as a stepping stone to us.”
“How crude,” Luna said distastefully. “But again, I suppose he always did lack magical tact. I agree to your plan so far, but there’s only one problem.”
“And what’s that?” Nightmare Moon asked, one hoof poised to open the lock.
“What happens afterwards? There’s two of us in this body, and there’s only room for one.”
Nightmare Moon felt her spell beginning to unravel. “No time to fuss over the details!” she urged.
“Details? That’s more than a detail,” Luna protested.
“Again, we don’t have time for this, even if it was so important as you insist it is.” Nightmare Moon rebutted, throwing the door open. “The spell is ending! We can talk about this later.”
“Oh, and we will,” Luna promised darkly as she stepped forwards.
“I’m looking forwards to it, dear Luna,” Nightmare Moon laughed as the spell failed. “I find our “discussions” so much fun. But for now, go!”
And with that, Luna cast her first barrage of spells just as the second-last defenses shattered.
Several spells hit a shimmering golden barrier, absorbing into the field, but under the well-put-together attack, it shattered, allowing one, final hex through. The spell hit, reducing the man’s—puppet’s—head to a fine ash and removing his brain as a staging point. As a side-effect, his jacket burst into flame and began to burn hungrily.
The assault slackened, and then dropped off. “I see you’ve gotten your act together, Nightmare,” the attacker chuckled. “Well done. I’ll be seeing you later.
“I’m afraid you’re outmatched, though; this little fight was really just to get you to destroy the puppet—nothing but a skirmish, if you will. If you’re fast enough, you might get a little tidbit. Level the playing field, perhaps a titch. I do love games—but not fair ones!” He laughed crazily. “Have fun, dear little cousin!”
He left with one further statement: “Let the games begin.”
Nightmare Moon quickly slapped a blanket freezing spell onto the burning body, quenching the flames, but as she did so, the magical fields stretched, finally bent beyond their limits. The magical duel had completely drained the nearby fields, and their inflexibility caused some serious backlash.
For any other beings, the field would have been unusable long ago. Desperation and millennia of experience, along with decades of practice, allowed one to draw on a field far beyond the usual. But using magic with a field of that sort could cause some very serious problems, as it literally siphoned the field away and weakened it.
It had never happened before, on Equestria. The field had been drained, and occasionally even depleted for years at a time. Even Equestria’s greatest mages, however, had never seen such an event. In fact, they’d never even theorized it.
The magical fields broke.
There was an almost-noise like a rubber band snapping, but a hundred—a thousand—times louder, and everyone on board winced as it bypassed their ears and stabbed into their brains, scouring away what little magic was held within and leaving everyone with varying degrees of headaches.
However, it was much worse for Nightmare Moon and Luna, for they were at the center of the tear and their minds were infused throughout with magic. She only had enough time to see Luna get hit—the poor mare had been blindsided, unaware of Nightmare Moon’s spell— and realize what was coming before it was upon her.
With a flare of purple sparks, the magic tore at her—Luna’s—their—horn and the mind beyond as it retreated and took with itself every vestige of magic from every last inch of the USS Hornet. As armed naval personnel and Marines began to pour out onto the deck, leveling their guns at everyone and everything except the President, the alicorn fell to the ground, smoke curling from her horn and ears, eyes wide open and glassy.
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Oh dear...please let Luna be okay...
Write longer chapters. Seriously. This is getting ridiculous.
Also, indents are your friend.
Ow, that's gotta sting. Like BAAAAAD.
Gonna call it right now. Either the two become their own beings, or nightmare becomes sort of like Yami in that she follows Luna like a little shoulder angel/demon. Either way, I hope it becomes like Wandering moon in that they start to get along. The idea of NM being simply misunderstood and lonely appeals to me, and fills my heart with feels.
Either way, great job and great story.
Oh, and one more thing:
please?
Nyu~
I'm considering unfollowing this. The plot's not the least bit what one would expect from the premise of Luna being met by Neil Armstrong on the moon and being taken to earth. That right there would have been more than enough interesting story and plot, why drag this unknown entity that of course can wipe the floor with NMM into it, completely shattering my suspense of disbelief? It just feels contrived and silly, sorry to say.
well lets hope Luna is well, so another very intersting chapter
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Using another enter hit would be advised as well.
4710598
I wouldn't say that's as necessary as the indentations for new paragraphs, but you're right, it'd certainly help with readability.
Too much block text. :P
4634243 You don't understand guns at all do you?
4634274 .....Well, you are obviously a fucking idiot. Good day sir, there is no hope for you now.
4710761 you don't understand the element of imagination and creativity at all, do you?
4710172 its sort of a mix between the chapters and the interludes i find. i found the chapters boring as fuck, and i found the interludes the highlight of my day. this is sort of in the middle. its acceptable but not brilliant
4710765 I was about ready to defend you because I myself believe that technology (even that possessed during the classical era) could defeat an army of magic wielding ponies, but this argument has completely stripped any respect I have of you. Someone who is willing to resort to insulting someones intelligence just because they have a disagreement destroys what is beautiful about debate, and someone who does that has no respect from me.
4710172 Yeah, I can't say I enjoy the OC either.
4710765
They have MAGIC.
At equal technology, if there were no good defenses against magic, we'd be crushed in a few weeks, and probably extinct at several months after invasion, remember, at equal tech they have good defenses against nuclear weapons.
4711186 Im honestly a terrible debater. I obviously have just ostracized myself from even the other people that believe that humans can beat the ponies.
4711603 Well maybe if you weren't being a humongous jerk you wouldn't have found yourself in this situation.
Also you used the pony OC generator for a profile picture, that is like a bad karma generator right there.
Indentation would be appreciated.
4634243 Now, for a real debate. Please ignore my previous shit headed "argument"- It is clearly shown in several episodes that magic is not a "Win all" button that defeats everything instantly. One of my favorite arguments that i see everywhere is the fact that Chrysalis defeated Celestia relatively quickly, not to mention that Shining Armor's shield fell within a minute after being rammed by Changelings. The royal gaurd appears to be royally incompetent (See what i did there?), and have the worst equipment imaginable. Gold is extremely malleable and overly heavy, meaning it is literally the worst material you can build weaponry or armor out of. Also, Spears are most certainly NOT made for hooved creatures. Besides, what if Earth's physics negate magic and substitute Equestria's physics with it's own?
4711611 I have now posted a real debate. Please excuse me being a shithead there. I have never tried to truly debate with a person that believes in OP ponies.
4711630 Good! I am honestly surprised, I don't always see people admit a mistake online. In fact seeing someone admit that they did or said something wrong is so rare that I have started to classify such an act as a trope used in romantic drama anime. Glad to see someone admit their mistakes, you are forgiven.
4711649 Thanks.
4711649 It's just I see this EVERYWHERE, and It annoys me so much.
Cousin hu? Interesting.
too short.
4710615
Technically either one would be accurate, and both is redundant, but putting in one of the two definitely needs to happen. It's a very simple bit of editing that goes a long way to improving a story's readability. Personally, I prefer putting an extra space between each paragraph for online documents like this one, but an indent would work just as well.
4712572
I'm the Head Coordinator of the Redundancy Department of Redundancy. Trust me, I got this.
I'd go with both, simply because redundancy and overkill are your friends.
4712914
lol. It's true. There is no kill like overkill
Now that's good first impression.
"Cousin"? Obviously someone Luna knows. Maybe an alicorn renegade who was disembodied and exiled for his crimes?
4710048
I am planning on writing some longer chapters now. Also, the indents seem to not transfer over from Microsoft Word to FiMFiction with copy-paste. Not sure why, but I shall endeavor to indent future chapters.
4710172 Totally agree.
I was very exited about Luna gest coming to earth, but now there's all this *flails arms around randomly* getting in the way of what I'm actually interested in. How you could make the jump from "finding Luna on the moon" to "super powerful ancient Equesteirn mucking about on Earth" I have no idea. Really you don't need mortal peril to make a good story and trying to shoehorn it in can really hurt a story.
Fact is when I vastly prefer the interludes over the actual chapters then there's a problem. I came to this story to read about Luna coming to earth and interacting with humans. If that's not what this story is actually about, sorry to say I'm gest not interested anymore.
What is the point of writing 4 stories when you won't even put the effort into one of them to format it properly for online reading?
I mean the story is still fun, I guess, if vastly different from what I was expecting, but please present it better.
Loving the story, and I appreciate the time and effort you put into writing it. If I may make one suggestion, double spacing your paragraphs makes things a lot easier to read.
Sigh Lost any and all interest in this story. This seemed like it would be an interesting "How does Earth deal with a Pony Princess" Story and now has weird magical entities and Russian Spies. Not what I favorited for. Un-faved.
4714260
For you -
and I'm not talking about the grammar...
Ah what a shame it is. I was enjoying the whole 'how would earth handle an Equestrian princess' thing. Now we've got some other super natural beings other than Luna/Nightmare moon.
I'll still read it, though. Just a little sad it stopped being what I loved it so much for.
4714563
I agree, but I'll stick around for now. Maybe it'll get better. *Shrugs*
In the meantime, there's going to be a tad bit of relations-issues in the future for poor Luna.
4714563 Seconded. I ploughed through the original stories loving where it was going. I figured this might be another 'Progress', Luna vs the Microwave crossed with Apollo 13. When the spy stuff was added I figured it as a B plot, James Bond style. But all this mystic, secret magic monster crap just wrecked it. It just wasn't needed.
To be honest, it feels like you ran out of ideas for the James Bond plot, and decided to pull this in to keep the story going. Sort of, 'I'm not sure how to do the cold war spy stuff well, let's make the main antagonist a mind controlling monster instead.' Sorry if that sounds derogatory, but that's what it feels like. You've written a fun idea here, and I want to see it continued, but my suggestion is to stay with the 'A' plot, Princess Luna interacting with Nixon/NASA/'Murica, and let this spy/supernatural thing be a bad dream.
Damn...All I can say. lol
Nightmare Moon sharing a mind with Luna but being a separate entity reminds me of tulpas. Fun beings, them.
Too bad most people would think of them as insane. 
Then again, we're all at least a bit insane on the inside.
Discord.