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Rose Quartz
My favorite characters on the show are Applejack, Rarity. And my favorite episodes are Sweet and Elite, and Rarity takes Manehatten. And I want my stories to be famous like Cupcakes and Bubbles.
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Diamond Wings you are going to put this story to complete since is the end of this story or is there more chapters to this story and i like it
Love it
3975030 No its over, I just forgot to change the status
3975327 ok
A very nice short story. I like it.
I like this story, Very nice.
This was nice.
A little bit hasty maybe.
And once again the day is saved, thanks to... Derpy Hooves!
Sorry I had to get that out of my system. Very short but really cute. I like The Great and Motherly Trixie... not as much as Fluttermom but still fun.
3987275 Thanx, and Derpy is awesome
Trixie is pregnant? When did that happen? And who was this friend she banished? That last bit kinda worried me.
Glad derpy found her. N kinder mare, save fluttershy, could she have asked to find her. Though I am wondering why derpy was out in the rain in the first place. It can't have been to deliver some mail.
Anyway, glad I favourited this, it's already got an interesting start and I look forward to reading more
I agree with dream 1990. I'd rally like to see more.
I also really wanted to see derpy and her family helping trixie through the last three weeks of her pregnancy an d afterwards. The jump to six years later was kinda a bummer in those regards
I liked this, don't get me wrong, but it seemed way too short. It had a good beginning and it seemed like it was going somewhere with derpy taking trixie in.
You still get a like from me, but please put something between the six years later. Maybe a few months later after the birth and trixie's gotten her home and is thanking derpy for taking her in when she needed it
4103953 The friend she banished was Twilight, remember from the magic duel
Oh, no. :( This text was so bad that I can't comprehend how it was even allowed by its author to be published here. I knew something was wrong when there was a major spelling error in the first paragraph. It only goes downhill from there. And then, there is the strange way the story just concludes while offering nothing of substance. Making her into a single mother makes her look worse, not better. How is her situation actually better than it was; how did it happen? This was the same as just saying, 'the princess moved away and lived happily ever after; the end'. What are the situations and relations between the other characters? What were their significance or the purposes of retelling the past from Trixie's point of view? Why does she have a first person speech when this was not the way she spoke in the past? Why not bring up the 'apologetic Trixie'?
Overall: The spelling/grammar needs work and the story is muddled.
3/10
The story was running at ludicrous speeds! Seriously this story condensed a lot of plot into two small chapters.
I like the idea behind the story but the bad execution spoiled it for me.
Nice Idea.
But it is right - it is really rushed. For the thoughts behind the writing just deserve some more details. And a depiction of the missing 6 years would also be fine.
Some more dialoge between Derpy / Family / Trixie would be nice, some explanation why it is better now (has she a job, or do she live with Derpy now?) This things really would help.
After all - needs work but nice to read.
And... dr timeturner whooves didn't say a thing. aaawwweee !!!