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Dragomeere


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Vinyl Scratch wakes up on Hearts And Hooves Day with plans for the greatest day ever for her and her sweetheart Octavia. But something feels wrong, very wrong. Her sense of foreboding is confirmed when she turns to her horror and sees something she wished she never had to lying next to her in bed.

Image source: http://c-cain.deviantart.com/art/Sound-of-Silence-286865456

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Comments ( 82 )

WOW, such a beautiful story you wrote there :)
I'm really impressed by the writing style too
It touched me ;)

3955099 Thankyou! I'm glad you enjoyed it :pinkiehappy:

Progression of events...

:pinkiehappy:...:pinkiesmile:....:pinkiehappy:...:pinkiesmile:....:pinkiegasp:...:pinkiesad2:

...If intended, then well done! :twilightsmile:

Seemed sudden, little to no foreboding, but it still works and is quite fantastic!

3955646 I'm glad I presented the emotions well :pinkiehappy: I'll have to work a little more on the build of events next time. Thank you for reading! Glad you liked it!

Great story and writing.:raritycry::derpyderp1:

Great story, bu change the chapter name.

3956086 Thank you, glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

3956340 I didn't really have an idea for the chapter name so I just went with good ol' Chapter 1. Glad you enjoyed the story.

Judging from the picture at first I was like 'ok so Octavia broke vinyls goggles, I can see how they could be sentimental. this is gonna be funny as hell' then I was like 'oh....' :applecry:

3956780 :moustache: Thanks for the read

3956823 You sir! are welcome. It's always great to read a good fanfic now and again.

3956877 Glad you liked it!

That was beautiful.:applecry:
It felt sudden but I guess it's supposed to be sudden considering the lesson at the end.

:pinkiesad2::fluttercry::fluttershysad::raritycry::raritydespair::applecry:WHY DOES EVERYTHING HAVE TO BE SO SAD YET BEATIFUL ;<DAMN IT...Very good story man that was so touching and well written...Well imma go sit in the corner of my room and cry myself to sleep
Also the reason this is also so sad to me is because i have gone through this many times with my family and people i never thought i would have to say goodbye to.Well what's born must come to an end:applecry::raritydespair:

3957747 Yep! That's the point of the lesson :twilightsheepish: Glad you liked it! :yay:

3957914 I'm so sorry to hear that :fluttercry: similar reasons were actually part of why I wrote this story. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

3958993 it kinda reminds me of the movie leap note i think is what it was called(not my life wise)i just know it was something-note...Really good romance movie and it always gets me

3960337 Never heard of it. I'll have to watch it if I see. (that one guy that doesn't have Netfilx. Lol.)

3960514 The movie was called notebook i found it i have it on dvd it is a really good movie
seriously

3960768 I'm sure someone I know has it. I'll have to track down a copy and watch it.

this almost exact same thing happened to me, I just started dating this gal, and (well tomorrow it will be 6 years) i went to call her to set up a date after Valentines went SO WELL (sarcasm) and her father and he told me she was gone when he went to wake her up. So this particular reason is why i cant watch/read most sad stories involving death or anthing of the sort. but today I feel a bit melancholy knowing what tomorrow is.

Why do I find this funny?

3969744 I'm so sorry to hear that :fluttercry:

3970773 I must say comedy wasn't my original goal with this one. But whatever works for you i guess.

3970809 I think I need to see a doctor.

3969744 I could be so mean to you right now.....
Also you made a couple grammar mistakes.

3976139 Where? And sorry, I didn't mean to come off as rude.

3976502 " 't'his almost exact same thing happened to me, I just started dating this gal, and (well tomorrow it will be 6 years) i went to call her to set up a date after Valentines went SO WELL (sarcasm) and her father, and he told me she was gone when he went to wake her up. So this particular reason is why i cant watch/read most sad stories involving death or anthing of the sort. but today I feel a bit melancholy knowing what tomorrow is." (A real grammar nazi could probably do better then me) (Did you think I was 'talking' about your story?)

3985545 I did actually. You had me going for a bit.

I love your story, but I find that if there was a bit more detail on the story and what had had happened i think I would have connected more. But great story and good idea:pinkiehappy:

3988100 Thank you! I'm glad you like it. :pinkiehappy: I'll try to work on the details more next time.

That was really nice, but it's called hearts and hooves day. and it's special somepony not valentine.

3996397 I totally missed that when I re-read it. Just fixed it. Thank you for the read and the grammar check :pinkiehappy:

oh:raritydespair: my:fluttercry: god:ajsleepy:

awesome:rainbowkiss:
:twilightangry2:
:twilightsheepish:

4059180 Glad to deliver your daily dose of recommended feels. Glad you liked it :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading!

WHY!!!!!! That made me cry and I understand the message perfectly thank you for writing this. This story is the best yet.javascript:smilie(':fluttercry:');javascript:smilie(':pinkiesad2:');javascript:smilie(':raritycry:');

4067450 I'm glad you liked it and hope I didn't make you too sad :pinkiesad2: Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy:

The surgeons got my feels removed.
Wait.
WELL THEY'RE BACK*sob*

vi...vin.....VINYL :raritydespair: Thats it im calling Doctor whooves, im not losing another one.

oh god this reminded me on when my dad died last year :fluttercry:
the story is beautiful non-the-less :pinkiesad2:

4087990 Oh my gosh, I'm so sorry for your loss :fluttercry:

Thank you for reading and enjoying :pinkiesad2:

The point of the story is a good one, I know we've all lost loved ones, but I feel the story itself could use some work.

It just kind of, jumps around, not really getting any particular point across... Such as when Vinyl finds Tavi dead beside her. Theres no reaction on vinyls part.

Anyway, too tired for a proper review. Night.

4089370 I wasn't sure if everyone would like the writing style, it's not something that's happening at the current time (except for the last paragraph). It's Vinyl's thoughts back to the time that the events occurring in the story had happened. I thought that a few details should have been left out since she might not want to remember them all. Anyway, thank you for the read!

4089436 No problem. But if you were aiming for something more in the past, well... It's hard to get right. Good try though. Practice makes perfect.

4091240 Any suggestions for future stories in the same format? I'm always open to suggestions.

4091647 I got nothing. Sorry mate, but my inspiration tree is being tapped by my job... As it stands, I can't go anywhere without a notepad because I'll forget something while I say it... hashtag army life...

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