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Schrodinger's Pony


The Great and Powerful Trixie has never had friends. When a well meaning doctor reveals this is a serious medical condition, she resolves to go about fixing it, by stealing the Elements of Harmony from Twilight Sparkle. But the Elements are more than just fancy bling; they're concepts. To steal them, she'd have to steal the very essence of harmony from their weidlers. Fortunately for The Great and Powerful Trixie, she has a cutie mark in dreaming. Can she, and the group of ponies she hopes to call friends, steal the Elements of Harmony from Twilight and her friends?

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 21 )

Well this is...something. Trixie is a sociopath and gives murder a go. Interesting. I'll be following closely.

this sounds intresting but first you dont have to say the great and powerful trixie becouse it realy gets annyoinh after well the first time and you need more detail but the concept is intresting so keep on with the story but ya be more like:duck: (thats called duck lol) and less like:applejackconfused:

Thanks Trip Trillby and pleaseworkforonce, for being the first two to comment on this story. I know I don't have to keep repeating The Great and Powerful Trixie. It's supposed to be annoying. She's annoying. I'm glad you think it's interesting, I hope you like what's to come.

This is looking to be a cool story. Keep it up.

I love it. I love it already. I'm glad I decided to see where this went, because I'm very pleased.

Sweet. I like where this is going. Cool story.

Uh oh, looks like the good guys might ruin Trixie's plans. I hope Trixie and her 'friends' will be able to get what they need in time while their in Twilight's head.:pinkiehappy:

Yay! You're actually rooting for them! :twilightsmile:

That's the trick with writing villain protagonists, you have to make the audience root for them. I was afraid that wouldn't be possible with ponies like Blueblood and Trixie. :trixieshiftright::moustache:

-The Greant and Powerful Trixie looked around.-
-but I could enter the dreaming too, and ask her."-
-Pinkie Pie flopped off of the train's caboose as it past by.-


:applecry: Five chapters in... and all you can comment on is the spelling? :raritycry:

Thanks though. That Greant would have been distracting.

Most certainly not! I'm just working on other stories for now. But there's no way I'd abandon this gem of a story.

Good, cause I freaking love Question Mark. Best OC I've seen in a while.

... ok from the last two i now

1. the whole story is based of inception(duh) and,
2. "Meaty Fleety" i believe to be a spoof of Hannibal Lecter, am i right?

i just wanted to get that out of the way. good story, but it's starting to get a bit creepy with how trixie is acting... and i like it.

Yup. Meaty Fleety is based off of Hannibal, though he draws inspiration from other sources, as you will see in the next chapter. :ajsmug:

:twilightsmile: I'm glad you like it. I'm glad you like a Trixie who isn't some redemption seeker with a troubled backstory. :trixieshiftright:

413226 Maybe for Blueblood, but, for me, Trixie is one of my favorite ponies, so it's not that hard to root for her when she's the anti-protagonist...

More please! I loved the movie, and I am loving how this is panning out!

--crying! in fact--
*In fact

--“Oh no.” Sweetie-...-her. “Rarity’s--
*“Oh no,” Sweetie-...-her,

--“It was only --
*It was only

I really hope this story will pick up again soon.


Because you manage to write Trixie as a compelling antagonist. I've said before to people that I don't mind seeing Trixie as the villain as long as she's a good one. Sadly, far too many fanfics set her up as a strawpony, so very generically evil but not very good at it, just to make it easier for the protagonists to beat her completely without breaking a sweat. Sadly, not everyone seems to realize that kicking a three-legged puppy makes you look less than good.

Here? Trixie is driven, determined, and competent. She has a goal and is singlemindedly working towards it, using every resource she has - very much like her canon counterpart. She's not a buffoon with delusions of grandeur who believes in her own lies, but a savvy operator with a plan.

Of course, everyone knows the old adage: No plan survives contact with Pinkie Pie the enemy. But that's okay, because whether the protagonists are heroes or villains, a story needs conflict and unexpected elements to keep things interesting.

As for the rest of the team, they are a wide spread of characters to keep things interesting, but I think in particular Cherry Jubilee chills me the most. Trixie gets called a sociopath, but at least she's aware she has a problem she wants to fix, and treats her allies as friends already even if she's not fully aware of it. Cherry sees other ponies as things to collect and play with, and goes out of her way to cause trouble for others out of personal satisfaction, both established traits of sociopathy.

I say good work. I really hope you'll take up this story again soon.

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