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Awkward Elipsis
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Im in
I like it!
Ok, you got me! I liked that story! Although I don't usually read many fictions from the YHaY universe other than MadMax's works, I actually quite enjoyed this one. Looking forward to more!
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You could've atleast asked me first.
You've got my divided attention.
I would like to see him post-fame. After all, you already have somehing going here.
Also, to make this popular, you're gonna want to put more tags. More tags=more visibility=more views=more "popularity".
It worked for Obama didn't it?
Woah, never mind. I spoke out ignorance on this one. Didn't look at this hard enough.
Just do what you were doing.
How about both? Phantom: the rise & phantom: the Equis dimond
Alright. Apart from a few grammar mistakes, this looks to be an interesting read. Keep at it.
This would be an awesome story, I recommend continuing it.
Imagine the faces of all the ponies when they realize that they've been robbed by a master theif who's Human.
Seriously, this is very interesting and I hope you continue it.
Continue the story!
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I actually had roughly the same idea, I'd say slightly before you had it, but I'm not sure, (I'll settle with concurrently). However, I'm not going to post mine until I'm quite a few chapters in and invested, due to my inability to work at a steady pace. The good news is that mine doesn't share much in common with either of these, other than the thief bit.
Uh, I'll read this later* I've got homework I'm putting off.
Here's some advice. Make sure the heists are clever. After all he's been a thief for nine years or so. Meaning he should be clever. Also was it only me that was reminded of the rhythm thief game when I heard phantom thief y'know because of phantom r.
holy crap this is a good story...
3983521 Yeah *sweat drop*
. With two stories and Exams closing in, I can't keep up.
AN UPDATE?!?! no idea what i'm reading any more though, time to reread
WHAT IS THIS STORY!!!! NEED TO REREAD
Ooh! Freshly updated! Favorited and upvoted, you should continue this.
4449341 I am continuing this
I just had school, so I didn't have time.
P.S. I don't need to work, so I have a whole lot of time to do stuff
4450598 You better, boss, this is the good stuff! I'm quite fond of the YHaY 'verse and old heist shows so this is a very welcome addition to my reading list.
Please don't keep us waiting for so many months again. 
Eagerly looking forward to more.
4450888 I'll try not to
Good chapter. But I can't help but wonder how a mystic vampire would fare in this situation? In my opinion they would easily decimate the griffon populace and conquer the world, due mainly to them being immortal and having the ability to use magic COMBINED with vampiric might. That's just giving the Hulk psychotics, not something that can be brought down easily.
so will this have supernatural elements like the game thief did? I wonder if that certain stone had anything to do with there primal condition. cause that be epic if scary!
And the plot thickens... ((I really must remember that the next time Celestia haves some cake))
Anyhow, another intriguing chapter.
Story is good so far. Could use some work in the execution. Avoid starting multiple sentences in the same paragraph with the same word, and use active voice when you can. Favoriting to keep track of this.
4661219 Noted, thank you
Another good chapter. Keep up the good work.
It seems to cut off abruptly at the end...
Also, it's quite convenient that Sawyer seems to know sign language
4916371 yes, yes it is. . . For both of thos-*abruptly cuts off* =3
And Sawyer is quite intelligent. He is an inventor. At least, that's my logic.
Ok, thanks for pointing that out. I was planning to put another sentence(can't remember what it was going to be) but I think I decided not to... I'll edit it if I remember.
i'm ok with this
Awesome
Casa De La Boom... Tina... oh Buck, I know this girl...
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You do do you?
5081420 Oh yes, I do. Not complaining, just saying I see a lot of explosives in Phantoms future.
was that a borderlands 2 refference
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Gas bombs that cause melting? That sounds like Thief 2.
Sentient- able to perceive or feel things, something that all most animals can do.
Sapient- Wise or attempting to be wise, also may refer to Sapience; the ability of an organism or entity to act with judgement.
Other than that nitpick good story so far and I hope the housemates end up being side characters.
5112945 thanks, I truthfully didn't know the exact differance
Do you know exactly where I used sentient instead of sapient so I can fix it?
5112967 I would show you but I'm on my phone right now using data, otherwise I don't have internet. So I have no idea how to do it. One instance is in this chapter when they meet madame Armando when she asked if Trist was talking with Phantom.
Prologue during breakfast with Trist after Goerge's short appearance (what happened to him anyway?)
Chapter 3 when the tribe gryphons appear
Chapter 4 when the tribe gryphons catch Trist
5113198 thanks
And about George . . . No comment.
So scandalous...
5120541 I know right? I had problems already when I turned into two!
Just imagine three
dat reference to the original storyline tho.
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I. . . I don't know if I should be happy, or afraid from your comment. . .
EEERRRRGGG!!
It's not Lead (Pb), It's Graphite (Carbon/white clay mix) It's only called Lead because the ancient Greeks generally used a lead stylus to write in wax tablets.
Lead was known to have adverse health effects by the time pencils came into use. Besides, Lead doesn't leave as dark a mark and is much more difficult to erase than Graphite....
Sorry, it's just a peeve for me.
<Nagging voice> "You'll get Lead poisoning if you chew on that pencil"
<Me> "No, if you get Lead poisoning, it'll be from the paint."
So I'm thinking that gryphon at the bar would be a good first target for Phantom.
Good idea, but could DEFINITELY use a editor.
He's 13? Well he's hardly a man yet so nothing for him to be embarrassed about, also hell he's young, the youngest protagonist I've read about. (that interested me) doesn't take much thinking to realize that our dear human would be different. Unless 2 year old foals are capable of writing and speaking on his level.