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Twilight is busy dealing with the bureaucracy of being a princess. When Spike comes home though with a new chemistry set, will Twilight be able to pull herself away from her duties as a princess to help take care of her duties as a sister and a friend to Spike?

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An enjoyable concept and read, I did however, come across a few issues.
First paragraph, Zacora.
Later on Spike started started talking like he was raised by the apples (an' kinda') instead of by princess Celestia and Twilight.

Sensing the alicorn’s confusion, Spike

The world may never know what came next.

Seriously, cute little fic with it's heart in the right place, but it needs a fine-toothed combing for typos. I'd be happy to send this to some groups if you'd give it a good scrub. Best of luck!:twilightsmile:

4219692 Oh of course. I was trying to get it out in time for the deadline so this is a rough first draft. Honestly just about all my stories are rough first drafts! I plan on going back to some of my stories that I like the underlying story, like this one, and as you say give it a "fine-toothed combing."

3949406 I'll be sure to edit that, thanks!

4328468
Very well, you keep your end of the bargain, I'll keep mine.:twilightsmile:

Cute story.:moustache:

I found a few spelling/grammar issues:

He didn’t rush in to talk about his day with Zacora,

- Zecora

Papers covered the kitchen table, although some had seemingly decided to try their upmost to try and cover the floor as well.

- utmost

She quickly stood up and grabbed the battle again with her magic,

- bottle

but the cakes had run out of vinegar.

- Cakes

4329478 That first one wasn't a typo. Zecora has a brother namex Zack... ora?

Aww... that was sweet!

The only thing wrong were the typos, but that's already been pointed out. Plus, I'm not one to talk. :twilightsheepish:

this was adorable, not much else needs to be said

FOR SCIENCE! That was heart warming on the end part. :twilightsmile:

*Grins* Very adorable. A few typos tripped me up but in no way detracted from the enjoyment.:pinkiehappy:

Thank you all for your kind words, I really do appreciate it. You all rock!

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