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Berry Punch wakes up in Canterlot to find that her love is not snuggled warmly next to her. Worse, she can remember everything from the day and evening, which means she wasn't out drinking and lost track of things. That just leaves one question. One question that causes her no small amount of worry:
Where is Minuette?

Rated 'Teen' because of heavy cider usage, or rather the effects of said uses.
Written for EQD's Writer's Training Ground #007

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This is great! Personally I always saw "Colagate" as either a pet name or a name ponies used to tease her. Loved it!

Ooh, NICE. Could you tell me when the 'sequel' gets up?

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I always go with the all-in-good-fun teasing name that her friends use. But as far as her actual name being that, I just can't fathom it.

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Sure, I can do that. Not counting the Writer's Training ground stories, it should be the story I write after the Vinyl and Octavia one that I'm currently working on.

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Poke-poke. Hey, you wanted me to let you know when the sequel is up. I just submitted it. It should be up within a few hours. :raritywink:

hehe, role reversal that's it!

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Well, that is what the prompt called for. Glad you enjoyed this. If you want to know what happens next, you can go read, 'The Bridesmaids.' Unless you read that one first. :twilightsmile:

4576501 Well, I'm actually reading it right now and I gotta say is pretty cool. I'm familiar with Lyra/Bon-Bon but Berry/Minutte is new for me. And I like it!

I was really getting into that tender and tough yet insecure Berry. She's got a way to deal with the world, that's for sure... I can't say too much there as I have a strong conviction of my own where she's concerned.

It certainly doesn't seem like Minuette would have a hard time rocking her socks off any ole time. Perhaps her not doing so more often is more a concern out of not wanting to look like two birds of a feather around one with a bad reputation already? When you make a less-than-popular choice of a friend or a mate, you have to work twice as hard to keep up your own image.

I feel like Cadance should have a character, but hey--she doesn't have much of one in the show either. I always pictured her as the chatty and socially sensitive type who uses her natural powers of tender sweetness to make her way through a rendezvous, but with the magic and authority to back it up only when needed. Still a regular loving pony at heart.

And overall? It really warmed me up a bit. It's a believable story--it could happen to any one of us, getting tanked without trying and needing help from a loved one who's worried sick about you. It's just a familiar situation from the MLP point of view as well. A good tying in. And I always wondered what it would feel like to stumble home from a bar with a good friend. Now I wonder no longer.

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This has got to be the longest comment I've ever received. Thanks. :twilightsmile:

Berry's entire character is straight from Berry Punch Replies on tumblr. I'm glad you got that she is a very strong, yet insecure pony, because that's what I was going for. Too often it seems that all ponies see in Berry is a drunk pony. No redeeming graces whatsoever, which isn't only bothersome to me, but it raises some serious questions. Like, why would anypony want to be around her, and why would Minuette want to marry her if all she does is drink?

I think you're spot on with Princess Cadance. Or that's how I picture her too. The problem is that this was written for one of those EQD writing exercise, so it had a word limit and a time limit. At least she got to talk a little and get a bit of development. Poor Twinkleshine didn't even get that. :applecry:

If you liked this story, I did a sequel to it. It's called The Bridesmaids and it basically picks up where this one left off. But anyway, thanks again for reading and taking the time to comment.

OMG what is that Minuette plush, I need it rn!!!!

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Hoof-made by little-broy-peep on deviantart. As far as I know, they are still very much active in making plushies. Getting a spot for a custom order might be a bit of a wait, but the quality is without question.

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