Chapter 2
Spike blinked open his eyes and stretched his arms. He glanced at the clock and proceeded to jump right out of bed. He had overslept and had to be out on business for Twilight. She must have been as tired as he usually is to not be awake by now. He walked over to the stairs and started to descend down them. Once he had gotten down the wooden steps he saw three unfamiliar mares looking back at him. "Who are you?" Questioned the purple and green dragon.
"I'm Applebloom. This is Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle." Said a yellow pony with a bright red mane. She then gestured to the two other ponies next to her.
"Wait. What? But you are supposed to be fillies. What happened?" Asked a confused Spike.
"We snuck into the library last night and then I did a spell to make us older. We thought that if we made ourselves older we would have the cutie mark that we would get. It says it will not give you a cutie mark if you do the spell." Explained Sweetie Belle.
"The spell took so much out of Sweetie Belle we're going to be stuck like this for at least a week." Chimed in Scootaloo.
"Well Twilight could do the spell for you." Suggested Spike.
"Unless she wants to become a filly again, I don't think so." Countered Applebloom.
"You could stay here until you can do the spell." Offered Spike.
"My family would get worried if I wasn't around." Said Applebloom.
"My sister would be the same." Added Sweetie Belle.
"And Rainbow Dash would wonder where her number one fan is." Said Scootaloo.
"Oh." Said Spike. He was out of ideas
"I guess we could tell our family and friends. It would be for the best." Just as Sweetie Belle had finished that sentence the stairs creaked under the weight of a pony
"Spike? Are you down here?" Called Twilight. "Who are these ponies? Are they here for a book?" Twilight's eyes lit up at the thought of her last sentence.
"Relax Twilight. It's just the Cutie Mark Crusaders. Sweetie Belle cast a spell that made them older. They had hoped it would give them cutie marks but as you see, that is not the case. They need a week to cast the spell again." Explained Spike
"Oh" The light in Twilight's eyes shrunk considerably. As they were chatting in the kitchen they heard the bell that meant there was a person coming into the library. "Stay here." Twilight told the Cutie Mark Crusaders. She walked out into the main part of the library. Standing there was Fluttershy waiting patiently.
"Hi Twilight." Said Fluttershy's nearly inaudible voice. "Could you get me Everfree Animals: A Reference Guide. I mean if you don't mind." Just then the door to the kitchen burst open with the cutie mark crusaders flying out of it.
"Oh hey Fluttershy." Said Applebloom. Twilight started staring daggers at the trio.
"Hi... Um?" Fluttershy stuttered.
"Applebloom. And this is Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle."
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This is good
3970367 Thanks! For both commenting and favoriting.
3970371 No problem
Was looking for cover art. Came across this as a possibility.
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It was tough finding one wherein they had no cutie marks.
This one seems more generic though. ^^
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I LOVE IT
3970424 Thanks for the cover art! I think the second one is perfect! I will mention you in my next chapter.
3970456 Glad you like it. I'm working on the third chapter now.
Word of advice: don't write chapters shorter than 1000 words. A full scene with a setting, description, some element of the plot that advances and a bit of meaningful character interaction can easily--excruciatingly easily--put you in at over 1000 words. Having a chapter that's shorter than this tips off your reader that you're content is rushed, sparse in description, and not at all engaging or emotionally involving, or that you're cutting your scenes off before they're actually finished, both of which are huge no-no's.
3970617 Sorry... I just wanted a published story and if I take things in chunks I find it easier. I'll have the third chapter 1000 words. (I hope)
One thing, when you start dialogue, ALWAYS make a new paragraph for it, okay? The speaker should always have a fresh paragraph to show their speaking.
3970617
Indeed. I would argue 3k is the bear minimum. But that's me.
3970947 Well, to be fair I'd have to agree with you. A 1000 word chapter can encapsulate a single scene, but a single scene advances the plot by such a tiny incremental amount that a chapter should have a few of them so by the time the reader has finished it, they feel like some progress has been made.
Just make sure one does not make the opposite mistake and turn the chapter into an absolute slog to work through.
3970822 Got it. Thanks.