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I am not contained between my hat and my boots.

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Scootaloo has a tough life, but every once in a while, she has a chance to shine.

Consider this an apology for the Scootabuse in One In A Million. It's time for a feel-good story about Scootaloo; a spiritual sequel if you will, though this story is in an entirely separate universe.

Proofreading by JohnPerry
Cover Image by mirapony

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Comments ( 82 )

Ugh... a... SnowScratch? Or we consider his name ufficially "Bulky Biceps"? I'm a huge fan of OctaScratch, but... good all the same.

This was amazing!
Something tells me this isn't the real sequel to one in a million, though.
I am probably right.
But still, Snowflake + Vinyl = :scootangel:

still, why is scootaloo not rd's sister :((( ?????? :applejackconfused::rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh::rainbowderp:

great story :scootangel::rainbowkiss:

I don't really think you have anything to apologize for; I loved One in a Million, but I will take more warm fuzzies any day of the week.
As for the matter of Scoot's parents here... yeah, seems legit. It at least explains why we've never seen them in the show.

I like Snowflake better than Bulk Biceps. This is one of the most interesting choice of character combinations I've ever seen. I like it. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::heart:

Now that's a pairing I've never seen before. But enough about that. This was pretty light and fun, though there's something that's bugging me about this. When all of this is over, will Scootaloo fall into an intense depression from not being able to fly anymore? A good story, I just can't shake the feeling that this temporary joy may make things worse for Scoots in the long run. She may look back on it and think, "Wow, that sure was a great three days. I wish I could feel like that all the time."

The cover art is already a great apology. I look forward to reading this soon.

Accepted, mate.

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Bulk Biceps is canon, though I still like to think of 'Snowflake' as his nickname. :rainbowkiss:

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Yep, not actually a sequel, just sort of related.

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Well, it's MLP canon that they're not sisters, and I'm not going to contradict that.
I figure it's enough to give her a loving family and a good day with her idol.

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:

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Yeah, I actually had a hard time figuring out who they should be, but I like what I eventually came up with.

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I know, right? I could really see those two together.
Vinyl seems to me the type who would go for him.

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Nope, she'll look back on it warmly, and it will motivate her to learn to fly better on her own. :scootangel:
That's my story and I'm stickin' to it. :ajsmug:

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Thanks! :twilightsheepish: I hope you'll let me know what you think when you do!

Removed from Short Stories for exceeding the maximum length. I don't want to be too pushy--you've been a great contributor to the group--but since I've removed everyone else's overlong stories . . .

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Oh... sorry, I thought I remembered the maximum being 5000... I guess it was lower. :facehoof:

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*Nods*
Well, alright then. I had been making the assumption that Scoots woyldn't get any better anyway, of which there really isn't evidence in this story.

Well, this was satisfying. Things that stuck out for me.
1) Scoots parents. huh.
I can see Snowflake as Scoot's dad
I can see Vinyl as Scoot's mom.
I didn't see them together at any point prior to this fic. huh
No complaint from me
2) Why the fuck has no one thought of this earlier. Man that is such a good idea. A sorta training wheels to adjust to how to fly, as your wings grow. Genius.

Anyways, this was a pleasant fic. I huh...I just felt good. I don't know what to say now. I applaud this, and look forward to the next fic. Scootabuse has been atoned for.

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Yay, atonement! ^.^

1) I gotta admit, I like the parent choices, too! :rainbowkiss:
2) I know, right?
(I actually got this idea while playing the MLP gameloft game. In that game, when you fly with Scootaloo, she gets butterfly wings just like an earth pony or unicorn. When I saw that... :raritystarry: I just had to write it in a fic!)

Nice story! The only thing that baffles me is the Vinyl Scratch/Bulk Biceps as Scoot's adoptive(?) parents. I don't think I've seen ANY stories with those two in it. :pinkiegasp:

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:

The only thing that baffles me is [...] I don't think I've seen ANY stories with those two in it.

:rainbowlaugh:
Original ideas are so scarce now that they baffle people.

As much as I dislike Scootabuse, I think that fic was better than this one. In this one there was no conflict or climax; in splitting a story into 'beginning', 'middle' and 'end', this was a few paragraphs of 'beginning', around a dozen words of 'middle', and the rest was 'end'.

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Yeah, this one wasn't really intended to have a story arc or conflict.

I'm actually surprised it came out as well as it did. I think I was able to work a pretty good amount of tension and suspense in at times, given the lack of a well defined plotline.

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I, for one, enjoy stories that consist mostly or entirely of happiness and smiles and friendship. Not to say I DON'T enjoy conflict- I read sadfics a lot, and I loved "One in a Million". But I also like to fall back on these sorts of cathartic little vignettes, few and far between though they may be.

I supose it will have to do to make up for the scootabuse...
We will douse our torches and put the pitch forks back in the garden shed

Am I the only one around here who thought the scootabuse in "One In A Million" was..well normal for a story of that nature? For most kids, the kind of change she went through is a typical struggle..maybe this story isnt the place for this discussion, but I have to say that I dont think any "apology" was needed...

Either way, ill check this out in time, depending on how you ran with it, (ie, not too sappy), a good scootalove story is always nice.

Apology accepted. :twilightsmile:

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I know, right? ^.^
Sometimes it's nice to just have a story that makes you feel good.

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*breathes sigh of relief*

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Well, an apology isn't needed, but it is wanted. :twilightsmile:
And I think I managed to make it not sappy. ^.^ Scoots is actually a great character for that, because whenever things get too sappy, she tries to get out of it to save her 'cool' image.

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:

The parents choice was original to say the least. Made me chuckle a bit. It was a really relaxing read and I like it that way. Well done good sir.:scootangel:

I have one word, and only one.

D'aaawwww! :pinkiesad2::rainbowkiss::raritystarry::twilightsmile::yay::moustache::trollestia::twistnerd::scootangel:

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Desired effect: achieved. :twilightsmile:

Hmmmm.... I would say you are forgiven BUT I never really saw one in a million as abuse (I think I'm a horrible person)

So no need for sorry but we could really need some cider to celebrate a job well done!

And it is nice to just sit back relax ad read a short story with no conflict involved and just enjoy the moment!

3937722 You play that? Do you have a GL Live account? My username is Raineh14 if you decide to look me up ^^
Also, dis story....too. much. cute! I totally love the idea of Vinyl and Bulk being Scootaloos parents. It's a nice, refreshing, original idea. We hardly see those nowadays(I feel old D:). I also like how when Scoots was trying to put off showing her parents her new wings, it wasn't because she didn't have any, it was because of those reasons she said(Bulk Biceps being busy at work, Vinyl Scratch sleeping).

If anything, this story could use some more fluff. Because more fluff is better. 'Specially if it's marshmallow fluff. :twilightblush:

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Thanks! ^.^
I do like to pride myself on originality.
(For that matter, has anyone ever done a story about Twi giving Scoots magical wings before?)
I'm glad you liked it!

You play that? Do you have a GL Live account?

I used to. :trixieshiftleft:
But then the game started crashing on startup, and can't be fixed. I can't reinstall it without losing all the data I have so far. :ajsleepy: So... I'll just sit and wait and hope the next update from gameloft fixes it. Maybe someday I'll play it again.

In an attempt not give a review that says just: omg this story is so cute!

Isn't it kind of cruel to give her wings in any shape or form if she's never going to fly?
Sure Twilight can just make more, but they aren't hers, she's gonna realize that soon.

Vinyl and Snowflake Bulk Bicep.
Different: Yes
Weird: Yes
Bad: Nope
Original: To me atleast, lol.
There needs to be a fanfic about how this happend.

Umm, that's all I can think of.
I liked the story, but i'm trying to be more 'critical' I guess.

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Isn't it kind of cruel to give her wings in any shape or form if she's never going to fly?

Nope! :twilightsmile:
This early practice will make her more able to jump right into flying once her real flight muscles finish fully developing, and it will make her more motivated than ever to practice. :scootangel:

Bulk Biceps and Vinyl Scratch...That's a ship I've never considered before...:rainbowderp:

I'm surprised between the two of them that Scoots wouldn't shout "YEAH!" more often. :ajsmug::rainbowlaugh:

I liked this story a lot. It was very light and fluffy. :heart::pinkiehappy:

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Yeah, I don't really know why nobody has done that ship before. It seems like a pretty good fit to me, though, granted, even I'd never thought of it before I tried to answer the question: who are Scoots' parents?

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it! :yay:

3998730 What made you decide on them, in the end? :rainbowhuh: Bulk Biceps is a bit obvious, his wing issue being near identical, but why Vinyl?

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Why Vinyl?

First off, I wanted her to be an earth pony or unicorn, that narrows it down.
Then, I wanted somepony as popular among the fans as possible, while still not being too well-defined of a character to believably be Scoots' mom.
Combine that with Vinyl's similar (at least a little similar) mane style, and (as far as I see it) similar way of approaching life, I figured it was a no-brainer. ^.^

As an extra bonus, I think ScratchBulk would actually be a really cute ship. I could really see Vinyl being into his over-the-top muscles, and I see them both as being very excitable.
:twilightsmile:

The choice may seem random at first, but I actually put a lot of thought and consideration into choosing Scoots' parents... Even made a thread asking for suggestions in the writer's group at one point.

3999610 That is really thought out...and it makes perfect sense. :rainbowderp: I might write a story about that, eventually. Lol. Bulk Biceps is so nice, it'd be really fun to write him as a main character. Lol. :rainbowkiss:

THAT PICURE! JUST... D'AWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

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I know, right? :twilightsmile:

Right in the feels, but in a good way; Scootalove is truly a cure-all for any sort of emotional funk:scootangel:(side effects may include diabetes and excessive euphoria)

And it's always interesting finding a new ship and thinking "how did that come about?" or "what are we going to name that?"
I'm thinking either Biceps-Scratch (could also work for how they got together) or Vinyl-Bulk (which might also be Vinyl's nickname for her record collection)

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Glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsheepish:

Fun little story, and it's always interesting to see fanon turned on its head like with your choice of parents. No one else would ever give DJ-PON3 a child. Of course, the drawback is that it's almost certainly going to be contradicted by canon eventually. With all the Scoota-speculation in the fanbase, it's only a matter of time before her canon parents appear.

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^.^
And I was writing alicorn Twilight before that was a thing. :twilightsmile:
Whatever. If Scoots' parents are ever revealed, I'll be just as happy as anyone to see them.

So, uh, what are you going to write now that this is over?

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Well, quite a few things.
I've got a list I keep updated on my user page.

The big items, though:
-A spectacular anthro-futa-Pinkie clopfic
-An intensely emotional 1st person account from Celestia's view of Nightmare Moon's banishment and the aftermath of that.
-An amazing, in depth, and very feelsy romance/drama involving mostly OC's, done as a commission/collab with PonySlayer. (will have optional clop chapters) You can see some of the progress I'm making toward it by looking at my character vignettes here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/171474/silver-spoon-on-the-moon-and-other-short-stories
-A detective story where Twilight (with Pinkie's help) must find out who is running the Ponyville Mafia.

I'm always liable to spit out a quick, unplanned one-shot if inspiration strikes, though. :twilightsmile:

4073043 You told me to read this one. I thought it was great also... I would've replied sooner... but I got caught up with a few things... Still can't wait for One In A Million's sequel though!!

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Glad you liked it! :twilightsheepish:

Well, I've got other projects on the way, but I'm looking forward to seeing it, too!

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