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twilightpiesparkle


Been watching the show since day one and I absolutely LOVE the community and everypony in it. Twilight Sparkle is best pony!

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Everypony knows that King Sombra was destroyed by the Crystal Heart; but what no-pony knows, is that one part of him survived. Now, darkness is gathering and war threatens to break out. This time, the Elements of Harmony may not be able to save Equestria, as one of them turns their back on friendship.

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Chapters (11)
Comments ( 24 )

Twilight changed her mind pretty quickly. Surely Pinkie Pie isn't that persuasive?

3947802 well you see for that part I just squeezed it In so that I could get the story to 1,000 words so I could submit the story. That line was not originally planned. plus I think for the amount of time that twilight has lived in ponyville, she has learned not to argue with pinkie :pinkiehappy: :twilightblush:

Arguing with Pinkie you don't really win. She crazy:derpytongue2:

HANG IN THERE TWILIGHT! !:pinkiegasp:

Good chapter...im glad that you'll try to update your story more. I really want to know what happens next.

4131164 my friend and I are going to try to get together this weekend and update :twilightsmile: I am really glad you like the story! :pinkiehappy:

Celestia is acting like a mom. Its really sweet.

Well now we know who's joining Sombrarity on her little crusade.
And also.
The fun has been doubled .

Um, what happened to the update. I wanted to read it after the night in the city.

4333915 sorry, I accidentally hit the publish button when I was not done, but we should be updating tomorrow.

one of them turns their back

In the long desc.

I.... need to reread everything because my brain back fired... please hold

4481676 I am confused by your comment :unsuresweetie: Do you like the story so far?

Well written, but a bit... short. :twilightoops:
(yes I know it continues, but wouldn't it be smarter to cluster up the chapters to maybe 1000-7000 words each?)

Dat break lines though. I read them as MY LITTLE PONY! MY LITTLE PONY! MY LITTLE PONY!
Wouldn't just a line work? please? :twilightsheepish:

Finally the length of the chapters are building up! :yay:

Well. The story is overall good, but I think it needs more fleshing out, so to speak. It feels rather boiled down, I think.

4683403 It will be fleshing out, A LOT, in the future, don't worry. :twilightsheepish: I will talk to my co-author about the line breaks and we are trying our hardest to get long chapters. Hopefully they will be getting longer :twilightsmile:. I really appreciate your constructive criticism!

I like it...keep going!

3959707 That's a cute profile. Where did you get it?

5094287 Thanks! I got it from instagram.

4798456 I know I am responding really late but we are going to try to get it back up and running in about a month.

5432316 Is there a chance you will resume this story?

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