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A new pegasus stallion catches Rainbow Dash's eye. Being a novice in the ways of romance, Rainbow turns to her friends for help...

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 27 )

FIRST!

Very great story! I shall track it!! :rainbowkiss:

Well I do enjoy the story, at first I was thinking that the OC was going to be a Gary Stu, but this has suprisen me overall.:moustache:

Hmmmm....Thunder Clap reminds me ALOT of my OC "Dark Lightning"......weird...just saying.

This isn't deserving of the three dislikes it has already, so I'm gonna like this to balance them out.:pinkiesmile:

Why you give Fluttershy coltfriend D=. Ask Twilight instead for pure awkward levels!
This doesn't really deserve dislikes but yea, don't use the centered format unless you are writing a homesexual poem.

I agree with every other commenters, in here don't use centered format.

I'm tracking this but withholding my rating for now, to see where it goes.

I don't mind the centered format that much. It was a pretty good read.

I like the basic idea here.

The formatting, however, needs some work. The Centered text is very jarring, making the whole thing difficult to read. I highly recommend going to a left-aligned format.

352989 GENIUS!!!

Anyway, very nice story, tracking it now. Have a mustache. :moustache:

As much as it sucks for me to do this, welcome fourth story to my tracked list. Pretty good actually.

First thoght: OOOH, a non-les RD romance. :coolphoto: Not bad. Just a few errors in there, as far as I saw. The centered alignment didn't really bother me; however, unless one is writing a poem or trying to make a point, I don't recommend using it.

a tad bit too fast
but other than that
:3, yes, this is winning

355746
^ i agree with everything he or she said above.
I think it's nice hat your trying to explore another side of Rainbow Dash while still keeping her in character. It's very d'awww and it's a hetero pairing which for Dash is like a 60:40 ratio in the shipping community.

Wow... that was uh a bit short. I was half expecting more competition from the other ponies cause that always adds to the drama, but I'm not complaining. That was a cute story despite the length

Hmm. A lot shorter than expected.

expectations: CRUSHED
couldve been longer
but hey, im not going to complain
a story is a story, and im going to read it

Oooooo I wish there was more for this story them two could have children together:eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup:

Well, it was a wee bit rushed, but still a cute story. Have a mustache. :moustache:

I didn't find it too rushed, considering Rainbow's get-things-done-no-nonsense personality, but I really would have enjoyed reading more. :rainbowkiss: Nice job!

I cracked up so much when Rainbow started to talk all smushy to him. It just looked so hilarious in my head! :rainbowlaugh:

Good job with this chapter. I wonder how Thunder and Rainbow got together.

Stupid rarity stupid stupid stupid stupid! Stupid!! Stupid!!!!! Stupid!!!!!!! STUPID!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Rarity is idiot :raritydespair: :rainbowhuh: :ajbemused:

This was a good story. I don't know why, but I cringe every time I even think of Dashie acting girly. It's not her! Thunder Clap seems like a really cool OC. Very well done Dashie romance story!
~LATEP

*Rainbow thinks: NOOOOOOO!!* :rainbowlaugh: I could tell this is what she felt. Good job!

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