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Lucky Dreams

I didn't choose the skux life, the skux life chose me


Luna thinks of a novel way to cheer up a distraught Sweetie Belle. Five stars on Equestria Daily!

EDIT ONE: Please also check out Singing to the Moon by the fabulously talented uSea. It's a story which I didn't even know existed until someone in the comments pointed out the similarities (I mean, seriously, that story even has some of the exact same phrasing as my own. It's eerie).

EDIT TWO: Funnily enough, long after this was published, the show itself also did something similar. I guess there's something about this pairing that lends itself to this idea?

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EDIT: Why didn't I make this connection sooner? *Backpedals to pretend that this was my inspiration... 'cos it totally was, honest!*


Yeah, you can probably tell I've been feeling pretty down lately. But what's the point in sitting around moping? I thought I'd be better off taking all those bad feelings and turning them into something positive.

Also, I promise not to release any more fics without having my editors look over them first (cross my heart and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye :raritywink:). It's just that this time, I... well, I've been feeling stuck in a rut with my writing lately. For better or worse, I just wanted to get this one out there.

Hope y'all enjoy :pinkiehappy:

Definently favoriting to read l8r, it's like 11:36 right now. :derpytongue2:

Non-author FIRST!
With that out of the way...
I love it! Really well written, a sweet story, and a novel premise. I commend you, my good sir!

Aww, non author not first!

How do you keep putting out such amazing stories so quickly? I'm envious.

The mysterious voice was regal and full of power—something about it reminded her of her sister’s

I see what you did there.

Also, now I'm imagining a Sweetie Belle / Phillip Fry team-up of some kind.

633967 My sleeping pattern is so messed up at the moment that 11:36 actually sounds kind of early to me... man, I need to sort my life out!

633975 Don't worry, you still get the silver medal! :ajsmug:

634025 :pinkiehappy:

634026 And there's me writing in my blog that I'm not getting them out fast enough -- I must sound really whiny. :ajsleepy: (also, thank you!).

634515 I'm glad someone caught that! And a Sweetie Belle/Fry team-up? Now that you've said it, that sounds like a story that has to be written!

634655 Uh-oh, I appear to have given somepony diabetes. I'm so sorry :fluttershbad:

Sweetie belle AND Luna?!? Awww yeah!! A very good story. It gave me a feel, which doesn't happen too often. The comparison between Sweetie belle and Luna was great. And not that i'm complaining but this one made me realize that all your stories are about fillies.

So in your stories...
Luna... Check
Twilight Sparkle... Check
Sweetie Belle... Double check

Youv'e got all my favorites now! :pinkiehappy:

634017 Are you referring to me as a non author or to yourself? :applejackunsure:

635213 heheh, well i just finished the school year so i KNOW my sleeping pattern is about to go haywire. :twilightblush:

Well this was a sweet short. :pinkiesmile:

Nicely done Lucky! :twilightsmile:

635425 Heh! I was wondering how long it would take people to cotton on that they were all fillies. It's the same with my original fiction: ever since my little sister was born (she's 4 now :twilightsmile:) and I realised how less than enthralling a lot of stuff for young girls tends to be (ah, why am I tip-toeing around it? Most of it is terrible), it seems like almost all my protagonists have been girls. I guess I'm kind of weird like that.

... Them's your favourites huh? How about I write a story where Twilight, Luna and Sweetie merge together to form -- no, no, I haven't even finished that sentence and it already sounds like it could be terrifying. I'm going to stop by here before I give myself pony induced nightmares :fluttershyouch:

636242 One time in uni I went for two weeks without seeing the sun. I don't mean that in a jokey sort of way, I mean I quite literally didn't see it, because that's how bad my sleeping pattern was. Trust me on this. You don't ever want to do that to yourself!

Also, he was referring to both of you as 'non author' -- he almost had the first non-author post, but you beat him to the punch :ajsmug:

Also, thank you! :pinkiehappy:

... My story killed somepony :rainbowderp:

636300 ahh ok.... sometimes i just don't get analogies. :derpytongue2:

also i have a window in my room so if my sleeping pattern does go to crap atleast i can see the sun. :trollestia:

635213 If it makes you feel better, you can look at the pace I get chapters out. You're a speedwriter by comparison.

And you're welcome!

This made me feel feelings. :fluttercry:

For something entirely unedited, this turned out rather well. Sweetie Belle sure is adorable :pinkiesmile:

636430 ... In summer a few months later after my fortnight of not seeing the Sun, my window became my mortal enemy, because I kept going to bed just as the sun was coming up. It was equally as horrible as not seeing the sun at all! :facehoof:

637106 Ah, don't worry, don't worry! If you ignore them, they'll go away and they'll stop bothering you :ajsmug:

640741 I thought it turned out pretty well too, until it got auto-rejected from EqD because of my grammar :fluttershbad:. I guess that's what you call a valuable lessen.

... Also, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it :pinkiesmile:

640782 Man, EqD has some weird-ass standards. For what it's worth, I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors (except in Luna's archai-o-speech, but that's to be expected 'cos no one knows how that kind of grammatical structure works without doing a lot of research.)

Took me while to finally getting around to reading this. I found it really sweet and enjoyable to read. The ending had me smiling. Wonderful one-shot. :heart:

640824 Thanks man! I've gotta admit, I was a little surprised when they sent it back the way they did... I mean, grammar's something I'm always struggling with (though not for lack of effort), but I at least thought it was good enough not to be auto-rejected. But whatever. I think the pre-readers get faaar too much flack, and they've been been nothing but incredibly nice to me in the past, and if getting rejected makes me improve my story... well, I can't hold anything against them. Thanks to them, the story's in much better shape than it was last week :pinkiesmile:

655968 I'm glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy:

This was pretty nice. A short, but still hearthwarming little tale, that didn't feel too short and neither did it overstay its welcome. Good job!

D'awwww, that was an incredibly sweet, adorable story!

"something about it reminded her of her sister’s voice"

oh you :trollestia:

Your grammar is mostly fine. Remember that "thou" works like "he"/"she"/"they", while "thee" is like "him"/"her"/"them".
"but we would rather we didn’t see thou cry" -- "thee"
"would thou desire to wield control" -- "wouldst" (although this one might be debatable)
"but tonight I found thou" - "thee"
"Everypony’s still made at you" -- "mad"

As for the story itself, I loved it. It was very simple and sweet, it had Luna, and Sweetie Belle and Rarity being loving sisters. I honestly can't find any faults with it. Bravo.

What a lovely little story. I'm on something of a Luna binge right now, and I very much like Sweetie Belle, so having both of them in the same story was a welcome surprise (truth be told, I popped in right over from EQD, so I didn't read the character tags). Simple, elegant, and heartwarming. It doesn't get much better than that when it comes to MLP stories. You hit a wonderful stride. And I envy anypony who can adopt the voices of the characters seamlessly; in other words, I never once stopped and asked, "Is this how Sweetie Belle and/or Luna would speak?" Having one less distraction helps emphasize the flow of the story, although I do not mean to imply it is merely a matter of addition by subtraction. The dialogue gave this story its heart.

Wonderful work. You deserve all the praise which is bound to come your way.

Oh my hnnnnnggg that was amazing. seriously, i think i might need to go to the hospital from the immense levels of d'awww and diabetes in my system. Great work!

Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful! Why have I not read more of your work before? That's a mistake I will remedy right now.

I loved this. It legitimately warmed my heart when I can honestly say that doesn't happen often with fic. I'm still a little teary from the point where Luna let Sweetie draw in the sky. It was such a sweet and lovely gesture. Great story and looking forward to any more great stories from you since I can tell you already write a good Luna, Sweetie, and Rarity so I can only assume you have the others down just as well. :raritywink::unsuresweetie:

So very very impossibly good! I love it!
And I laughed when I first read a mention of the exploding cake. "You made your sister's cake explode." :rainbowlaugh:
And the whole thing together made me smile.:pinkiesmile:

So beautiful... I absolutely loved it :)

This was a nice little closer for the night. Gives the moral that mistakes happen, but we learn from them, grow, and move on. Dwelling on them accomplishes nothing.

Thanks to everypony who commented! It's super appreciated :raritystarry:


672462 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png

672480 I'm glad you enjoyed it!

672601 :pinkiehappy:

672631 :rainbowkiss:

672678 Thanks man! I'm really happy you enjoyed it, and once I'm done commenting I'm going to sort out those mistakes (thanks for pointing them out, it's very appreciated). I don't know what it is about old English, but despite how much time I spent reading up on it, the rules just sort of refused to sink in. Still, it could be worse -- in the first draft, every single 'you' was replaced with a 'thou'. I think that's probably why EqD rejected it the first time round :ajsleepy:

672798 That was such a lovely comment, thank you! :heart:

672844 If you do end up having to go to hospital as a result of how cute you found this story, would you mind if I mentioned that in the story description? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png

673252 I really hope you enjoy my other stuff as much as you enjoyed this! :heart:

673357 I love hearing about it when my work effects people like this :pinkiehappy:

673471 I'm glad I was able to make somepony smile :ajsmug:

674125 Thank you! :yay:

674228 Thanks! It's something I've been thinking about a lot recently -- the last few months have been really rough. But things have started getting a lot, lot better recently :pinkiesmile:

I would like to point out that this story brought me closer to crying than My Little Dashie did. And I don't even have a sister. :fluttercry:

Yo author bro, i'll admit, this really reminds me of that early fic with the same premise that featured Luna and Sweetie Belle. For some reason, Luna ate jelly sandwiches in that one and was a lot nicer, probably because it got submitted pre-Luna Eclipsed.

ANYWAYS, this is still a nice story, especially liked how tough Luna is, in spite of how sad Sweetie Belle remained. A pony on the 'good side' that's not inherently pleasant and sweet and throws out lightning subconsciously? I'll watch that. A polar opposite to Tia, isn't she?

674655 Sadder than My Little Dashie! Result! :pinkiehappy:

674659 I only started reading/writing fanfiction around November, so until you brought it up I'd honestly never heard of that story. Now that I've read it, I'm really freaked out by how similar they there... I mean, there's a couple of big differences (Luna's personality being the biggest), but then again there's so many little things which are the same, like Rarity's reaction and the fact that Sweetie Belle runs away in both of them and such. I'm actually really embarrassed in a way, even though it's nothing more than a complete co-incidence. I seriously don't want people thinking that I've ripped off a story I've never heard of -- let alone a really good one -- and I'm not going to be able to read over my story in the same way ever again :ajsleepy:

Anyway, I've edited the story description to mention this. And I'm glad you still enjoyed it despite the similarities :pinkiesmile:

674785 saw your extra note in the descriptions; classy. Any chances we'll see a chapter where Luna had that argument or reconciliation with Tia?

Oh, and just realized, how did Luna know about the filly that blew up the cake?

Amazing! And I don't even like Sweetie Belle that much but you wrote her so well and the portrayal of Luna's struggle to change her ways broke my heart but in a good way. :heart:


D'aaaaaaaaaaw! More Sweetie Belle adorableness from Lucky Dreams. I will never get tired of how you write that character.

Heartwarming, a little funny, and altogether a delicious read. Thank you for writing this! An excellent way to start the day even if I have to wait a few minutes for my tears to dry, now.

674905 I wasn't planning on it, but I wouldn't rule it out entirely (if I thought I had a good way of doing it, then maybe). As for how she knew about the cake, I was sort of thinking that it would probably be the sort of news that would spread throughout the castle quickly, or perhaps Luna even made a fleeting appearance at the party! Something along those lines.

674945 Sweetie Belle's one of my favourite characters -- I always really enjoy writing about her! ... Also, here's some sticky tape for you to mend your broken heart :raritywink:

675019 :pinkiehappy:

675086 I'm happy you said that. There's a lot more Sweetie Belle adorableness coming, and soon(ish) :pinkiesmile:

675428 I'm very glad you enjoyed it! It means a lot coming from the author of one of my favourite fanfics (Building Bridges) :pinkiehappy:

675611 Simon Cowell likes MLP fanfiction! Who knew? :rainbowwild: (Also, thanks for the comment :twilightsmile:)

When I hit Sweetie manipulating the stars, the chorus of "My Soul, Your Beats" started playing on my computer. It was freakin' epic.

And I simply quote :unsuresweetie:: "Aww, that was such a sweet story."

YES! I finally moved the story up to the top of my read later list. And I don't regret it. You never cease to amaze me with your fics. What more can I say but "keep up the good work". I really look forward to seeing more from you. You mentioned something about a sequel to Sweetie's Letter, if I'm not mistaken. :moustache:

An amazing, beautiful story. Thank you very much for sharing it and brightening up my night! :twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

Too short and swift for my tastes, but there is definite skill in winding together where a story starts with the background to that situation. Nicely done.

The specific issue that makes this, and short stories in general, feel too fleeting for me is that the emotional switch (or 'lesson'), felt a bit like having it beaten into me with a bat. There's no time to explore the change or let it settle. Without a bit of internal wrestling there's no conflict, just an idea padded into a story. Even as well presented as it is, it feels too slap-dash, but I appreciate that I'm in the minority in this fandom :P

Good work, just not my bag.

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