When the Princesses left us to our fate, many saw it as the end of Equestria itself. In reality, it was just the beginning of another chapter for the populace of Equis.
The Celestial Union; a regime forged from what was left of the noble houses of Canterlot and enforced by the remainder of the royal guard, are the promoters of the right of the individual to succeed.
The Luna Motherland; a state formed in the ashes of Manehatten after it was burnt to the ground, believe that only the co-operation and sacrifice of all in equal measure will salvage the former glory days of ponykind.
You couldn’t care less about either.
As an inhabitant of Canterlot you must struggle to make your life using any means possible, and through this style of living you discovered your natural talents of swiftly moving through the cityscape as a courier. Whether your deliveries are legal or not matters little to you.
But changes are on the horizon, many unseen forces are vying for power behind the scenes, and when the chances to shape Equestria are presented to you, what would you do?
This is a story which moulds around the choices presented to you; the direction of the story as well as the personality of the protagonist and his companions will be affected by the decisions made at the end of each chapter.
Choose carefully, as only those who survive get to decide the definition of good and evil.
First, if you wanna make interactive story you need to advertise it somehow. For example good start its post it on groups. You can use that you use changeling then there is few groups about them example is Changelings are awesome group There is a lot of more, but its your duty to do this ;D
Second, I'm not sure if you shouldn't put AU tag, world building is good and its clearly in future. Anyway you should somehow add later what main events happened (like that how you did RD)
This can be my fault but I don't even know how main hero looks outside that he is mud pony :D. I readed it when I was in car and I missed somewhere it.
3979678 That was pretty informative, thanks for commenting!
I was umming and ahhing about the AU tag, but it does seem like a good idea, and there's a whole backstory i've got in place for it but since the majority of it would be common knowledge to the characters, the plan is to feed it in through small bits over the chapters.
Think i'll try and edit in a little extra description of Pathfinder, it's pretty easy to miss the one bit where i mention his colour, and could use some more work
Again, thanks for the feedback, any thoughts on the choice at the end?
Wow, really good so far!!! I love the detail, your writing is good!
4840525 Glad your enjoying it so far :D
Liking this story so far, I want to know more of how the royal butts disappeared and the more of the character's past, though I suspect that will be revealed in due time. And I notice some mistakes, you're using some terms that ponies aren't supposed to know, like "people" "hand"... you get it. Eh... basically don't use human terms. You forget that you need to add periods rarely, but that's easy to ignore. Either that, good game... good game... good... story...
5079897 Cheers for the comment, glad your liking it.
The only pony term i actively try to not write is 'everypony', the rest are unfortunately mistakes that slip through the net. There always seems to be a handful no matter how many times i re-check it, but i'm worried that going back and fixing them post publishing the chapter would then mark the chapter as "new" again. No idea if theres any truth to that fear, but i'd rather avoid irritating people when a "new" chapter keeps popping up just in case :)
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Heh, I avoid "everypony" too, I just wanted to point out those mistakes because it would bother me to no end if I didn't mention it. You don't need to fix them, fix them if you want, all I need is... the continuation of the story. But first... have a cow.
Wow, even the story description is ironic. The Celestia Union feels like it defines mono-black, while the Luna Motherland feels like it defines mono-white.
Those who get this now have their brains blown across the walls.
Dang...I feel like I'm reading a full fledged novel. I don't say that very often. I just want to know the backstory to this universe!
Wait, seriously? No one is leaving comments? I'll be sure to leave one when I hit the latest chapter.
Yet another chapter without a comment...shame. no wonder you don't update frequently. Welp, I'm tried, I'll be tomorrow night!
I say number two. Inspire them to become better citizens or something like that. Get a positive public opinion. I really hope you continue this soon, I'm enjoying this so much!
I also say that Pathfinder should keep the package. It's not like he can give it to its original person without defining what Grapevine said.
I'm really hooked on this, it's one of the best stories I've read so far! I'm eager to see what comes next ^^